Vacation Trials
Vacations sometimes let you down.24 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
I read you story with interest. I can relate to what it is like to be far from home and so sick. The last time I was in Mexico, I got food poisoning and I didn't think I was going to survive. I wasn't near a nice hospital and the where ai was taken didn't speak English. The facility was primitive, but the doctor saw I was dehydrated and managed to pull me though. He gave me hug with I left his clinic. I too was thankful to be home again.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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I read you story with interest. I can relate to what it is like to be far from home and so sick. The last time I was in Mexico, I got food poisoning and I didn't think I was going to survive. I wasn't near a nice hospital and the where ai was taken didn't speak English. The facility was primitive, but the doctor saw I was dehydrated and managed to pull me though. He gave me hug with I left his clinic. I too was thankful to be home again.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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Thanks Beth for your review, your experience sounds dreadful. I am glad you were ok. I am thankful to be home even though its cold with snow.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a nightmare! I don't know if I'd want to leave my own country again after that holiday from hell. That poem and picture always reminds me of when my first husband died, how I was given it by my friend, 35 years ago, it was so comforting. I think you have a strong entry here, good luck. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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What a nightmare! I don't know if I'd want to leave my own country again after that holiday from hell. That poem and picture always reminds me of when my first husband died, how I was given it by my friend, 35 years ago, it was so comforting. I think you have a strong entry here, good luck. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 21-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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Thanks Sandra for your review and thoughtful comments. I am sorry you lost your husband that is much much worse. xo
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Laura. That is an awful set of circumstances for a vacation. I'm sorry you had such a tough time during your time away to a warm spot. I hope you are doing much better. The story is the description of a nightmare. Having to deal with the paperwork you mentioned would have me pulling my hair out.
I hope your lives get back to normal really soon. The story is well written and very readable.
Robert
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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Hello Laura. That is an awful set of circumstances for a vacation. I'm sorry you had such a tough time during your time away to a warm spot. I hope you are doing much better. The story is the description of a nightmare. Having to deal with the paperwork you mentioned would have me pulling my hair out.
I hope your lives get back to normal really soon. The story is well written and very readable.
Robert
Comment Written 20-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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Thanks Robert, hows Ralphie is he ok?
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Ralphie is better than he should be :)))
Comment from Bichon
Oh wow, being sick on holidays is never fun and I am glad you are no longer in the hospital abroad. I hope you are feeling better now. You have recounted the whole situation very well though.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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Oh wow, being sick on holidays is never fun and I am glad you are no longer in the hospital abroad. I hope you are feeling better now. You have recounted the whole situation very well though.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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Thanks for your review and kind words.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh dear, what a nightmare! You've certainly made the best of a bad situation -- your story is riveting.
I see I was a little presumptuous with my review of your poem, assuming the walk you took to capture the beautiful hibiscus flowers was where you live. (LOL)
Two small nits for your consideration -- first, paragraphs three and four need space between them. (Just a minor thought.) Next, your hyphen should be a double hyphen.
Imagine! After all that, to find some pond scum trying to scam you. Sheesh! I'm glad you're okay. Wishing you a speedy return to optimum health.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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Oh dear, what a nightmare! You've certainly made the best of a bad situation -- your story is riveting.
I see I was a little presumptuous with my review of your poem, assuming the walk you took to capture the beautiful hibiscus flowers was where you live. (LOL)
Two small nits for your consideration -- first, paragraphs three and four need space between them. (Just a minor thought.) Next, your hyphen should be a double hyphen.
Imagine! After all that, to find some pond scum trying to scam you. Sheesh! I'm glad you're okay. Wishing you a speedy return to optimum health.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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Thanks for your thoughtful and helpful review. You kind words mean a lot.
Comment from robyn corum
Laura,
Nope. This is not the story I was remembering. That must have been someone else. Bless your heart! (And your arm!)
I am so glad you are feeling better and I am sure your family is glad to have you home. *smile*
Note:
Two days later they called and said we have never heard of us.
--> a little garbled
Thanks!
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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Laura,
Nope. This is not the story I was remembering. That must have been someone else. Bless your heart! (And your arm!)
I am so glad you are feeling better and I am sure your family is glad to have you home. *smile*
Note:
Two days later they called and said we have never heard of us.
--> a little garbled
Thanks!
Comment Written 20-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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Thanks for taking the time to read and your advise, God Bless.
Comment from Susan Larson
Your comment"vacations sometimes let you down" describes this one in more ways than one. What a blessing that you kept your faith.
One note: this should read "paperwork to fill out waiting for us in the regular mail."
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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Your comment"vacations sometimes let you down" describes this one in more ways than one. What a blessing that you kept your faith.
One note: this should read "paperwork to fill out waiting for us in the regular mail."
Comment Written 20-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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Thanks for your helpful review, ^_^
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You?re welcome. Glad you?re home!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh my goodness gracious!!! Holy crap! I would be hard pressed to go anywhere far, but I would certainly NEVER leave the country again - AAACK!! Oh, Laural, I do hope your poor arm recovered... did they ever tell you what in the world was wrong? Did you go to your doctor when you got home just to be sure you were all back to 'normal' on the inside, too? Wow!! Well, it's done now... you'll laugh about it in another, say, ten years or so... certainly not before then! :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest!! ;) :)
vacation, in Puerto Vallarta Mexico --> vacation in Puerto Vallarta, Mexico
arrived in azure --> arrived to azure [otherwise, you're in the flowers and in the trees, too!! :) :)]
and palm trees --> and [fantabulous] palm trees [give it some adjective to balance it with the other to parts of the compound object...;)]
The glorious --> We had the glorious
swimming so I --> swimming, so I
usual and we had --> usual, and we had
husband, I need to go to the doctor, as --> husband that I needed to go to the doctor as
breath. Luckily there --> breath. [begin new paragraph here] Luckily, there
expensive so we took --> expensive, so we took
ahead and they --> ahead, and they
of tests a breathing mask and medication in the emerg. --> of tests, a breathing mask, and medication in the emergency room.
little English and the --> little English, and the
suite with a private bathroom and a sofa and free --> suite: it had a private bathroom, a sofa, and free
worried and my daughter --> worried, and my daughter
for 2 days even --> for two days, even
insurance in which --> insurance with which
down and I was --> down, and I was
antibiotics and puffer and discharged --> antibiotics, an inhaler, and discharged
people and everything --> people, and everything
care of, two days later they called and said we have never heard of you. --> care of. Two days later, they called and said they had never heard of us.
company and it seemed --> company, and it seemed
had put an --> had to put an
days and I just --> days, and I just
vacation the sun came out and --> vacation, the sun came out, and
nice but I really --> nice, but I really
than the way there, because --> than on the way there because
in Canada I felt --> in Canada, I felt
north so we had --> north, so we had
thankfulness, thank God --> thankfulness - thank God
now but a little --> now, but I am a little OR now, perhaps a little
note my husband --> note: my husband
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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Oh my goodness gracious!!! Holy crap! I would be hard pressed to go anywhere far, but I would certainly NEVER leave the country again - AAACK!! Oh, Laural, I do hope your poor arm recovered... did they ever tell you what in the world was wrong? Did you go to your doctor when you got home just to be sure you were all back to 'normal' on the inside, too? Wow!! Well, it's done now... you'll laugh about it in another, say, ten years or so... certainly not before then! :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest!! ;) :)
vacation, in Puerto Vallarta Mexico --> vacation in Puerto Vallarta, Mexico
arrived in azure --> arrived to azure [otherwise, you're in the flowers and in the trees, too!! :) :)]
and palm trees --> and [fantabulous] palm trees [give it some adjective to balance it with the other to parts of the compound object...;)]
The glorious --> We had the glorious
swimming so I --> swimming, so I
usual and we had --> usual, and we had
husband, I need to go to the doctor, as --> husband that I needed to go to the doctor as
breath. Luckily there --> breath. [begin new paragraph here] Luckily, there
expensive so we took --> expensive, so we took
ahead and they --> ahead, and they
of tests a breathing mask and medication in the emerg. --> of tests, a breathing mask, and medication in the emergency room.
little English and the --> little English, and the
suite with a private bathroom and a sofa and free --> suite: it had a private bathroom, a sofa, and free
worried and my daughter --> worried, and my daughter
for 2 days even --> for two days, even
insurance in which --> insurance with which
down and I was --> down, and I was
antibiotics and puffer and discharged --> antibiotics, an inhaler, and discharged
people and everything --> people, and everything
care of, two days later they called and said we have never heard of you. --> care of. Two days later, they called and said they had never heard of us.
company and it seemed --> company, and it seemed
had put an --> had to put an
days and I just --> days, and I just
vacation the sun came out and --> vacation, the sun came out, and
nice but I really --> nice, but I really
than the way there, because --> than on the way there because
in Canada I felt --> in Canada, I felt
north so we had --> north, so we had
thankfulness, thank God --> thankfulness - thank God
now but a little --> now, but I am a little OR now, perhaps a little
note my husband --> note: my husband
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Thanks Yvette, Your kind words mean a lot, I appreciate all the tie you took with my grammar issues. I can tell you are a teacher. Thanks again xo Laura
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your contest entry. You expressed your thoughts/feelings well. You used great descriptive words throughout. I enjoyed reading this for the way it was written--sorry your vacation was spoiled. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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You did a good job with your contest entry. You expressed your thoughts/feelings well. You used great descriptive words throughout. I enjoyed reading this for the way it was written--sorry your vacation was spoiled. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Thanks for your review and kind words.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Vacation Trials"
A non-fiction contest entry.
Yes Lord sounds like God did Carrie you that day and you know it too because when you look back there was not just one set of footprints but two!
I would have title This..
"My Vacation in Hell!"
(from Puerto Rico with love)
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You wrote the story wonderful he was very easy to follow with no grammar issues that I could find?
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Theme and imagery was appropriate.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
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I've only had one similar vacation but it was too Jamaica and it was no issues the weather was beautiful the cruise ship though hit a tropical storm in October need to shut the ship down but are ship has 53,000 tons of stabilizer so we were okay or skipped Cancun though in them Mexico can hit a second stop and Jamaica then afterwards on to the Cayman islands.
Thanks and good luck with this.
Ricky
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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"Vacation Trials"
A non-fiction contest entry.
Yes Lord sounds like God did Carrie you that day and you know it too because when you look back there was not just one set of footprints but two!
I would have title This..
"My Vacation in Hell!"
(from Puerto Rico with love)
...
You wrote the story wonderful he was very easy to follow with no grammar issues that I could find?
...
Theme and imagery was appropriate.
...
Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
...
I've only had one similar vacation but it was too Jamaica and it was no issues the weather was beautiful the cruise ship though hit a tropical storm in October need to shut the ship down but are ship has 53,000 tons of stabilizer so we were okay or skipped Cancun though in them Mexico can hit a second stop and Jamaica then afterwards on to the Cayman islands.
Thanks and good luck with this.
Ricky
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Thanks Ricky, I appreciate you and your thoughtful review.
