Breathing Spring
I live where winter is very long and cold.21 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author. Your lines read well with good rhymes and imagery. I could envision everything you mentioned. Your words are well-chosen and describe spring in a beautiful way. The art is a great pairing with your words. There is good flow to your poem. We had almost 80* and yesterday. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author. Your lines read well with good rhymes and imagery. I could envision everything you mentioned. Your words are well-chosen and describe spring in a beautiful way. The art is a great pairing with your words. There is good flow to your poem. We had almost 80* and yesterday. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 18-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the great review!
Comment from Bichon
Oh wow, the imagery in this poem is excellent. I really felt like I was inside the words watching the winter melt away. I wish you the best of luck in the contest with this fabulous entry.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Oh wow, the imagery in this poem is excellent. I really felt like I was inside the words watching the winter melt away. I wish you the best of luck in the contest with this fabulous entry.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review!
Comment from Boogienights
I absolutely love this poem. I love the rhyme and I can certainly relate to the subject matter. It was snowing just this morning, here in Duluth, mn. I have had it! Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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I absolutely love this poem. I love the rhyme and I can certainly relate to the subject matter. It was snowing just this morning, here in Duluth, mn. I have had it! Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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It snowed here today too! Thanks for the nice review.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
This is a joyful, colorful, hopeful Spring-poem. that I would have liked to give the extra twinkling star.
Several small but annoying flaws convinced me to stop at five stars.
The flow!!! Please read your poem aloud and find out for yourself where you get stuck.
2nd line, "have been stashed" is throwing me off the beat. Better (for instance) to use"now". There are more lines to replace some words to get the nice 4-syllables constant with which you started the poem. Good luck!
You made some rectifications, I see. Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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This is a joyful, colorful, hopeful Spring-poem. that I would have liked to give the extra twinkling star.
Several small but annoying flaws convinced me to stop at five stars.
The flow!!! Please read your poem aloud and find out for yourself where you get stuck.
2nd line, "have been stashed" is throwing me off the beat. Better (for instance) to use"now". There are more lines to replace some words to get the nice 4-syllables constant with which you started the poem. Good luck!
You made some rectifications, I see. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the help and advice!
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You are welcome!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written rhyming poem about welcoming Spring after a long cold winter. When the winter seems far too long we start searching for signs if colorful warmer Spring.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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A very well-written rhyming poem about welcoming Spring after a long cold winter. When the winter seems far too long we start searching for signs if colorful warmer Spring.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I know the feeling. Winter started here in November of last year. You evidently live in the northern part of the states, too. I guess we know why the snow birds go South. I really liked your poem.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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I know the feeling. Winter started here in November of last year. You evidently live in the northern part of the states, too. I guess we know why the snow birds go South. I really liked your poem.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much! Spring will arrive sooner or later.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Where do you live? I live in Los Angeles, California. Our weather is pretty warm almost all year round. Your poem is a good poem for the spring contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Hello my friend
Where do you live? I live in Los Angeles, California. Our weather is pretty warm almost all year round. Your poem is a good poem for the spring contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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I live in upstate northeastern NY, about 25 miles from Canada, in the Adirondack mountains, on Lake Champlain. It is beautiful here and people travel from all over to take pictures in the fall. But the winters are long and pretty brutal. Thank you for the nice review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Long winters take their toll on lives and spring is a welcome change, the shift is often slow and sluggish, you captured this in your poem, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Long winters take their toll on lives and spring is a welcome change, the shift is often slow and sluggish, you captured this in your poem, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much!!
Comment from Michele Harber
What a lovely, lively poem that truly makes me wish spring were here already. It's bouncy and jaunty, with a very happy feeling. You can't read this and not smile. Your poem flows very smoothly, and your rhymes all work well.
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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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What a lovely, lively poem that truly makes me wish spring were here already. It's bouncy and jaunty, with a very happy feeling. You can't read this and not smile. Your poem flows very smoothly, and your rhymes all work well.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Thank you for such a nice review!!!!
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You're very welcome!
