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Comment from karenina
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How you manage to acrobatically juggle double and even triple entendre's within the contraints of the contest rules amazes me! There are those who "claim" to be religious but tend not to think humble pie was ever baked for them... That is hypocrisy, truly. Then again, (clever you)--if one is truly religious he would never think of himself as a "self made man"--so further food for thought! Good luck in the contest!--Karenina

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
    Excellent im glad you could relate and understand so clearly Im away to bake another pie this ones going to be even shorter and black and white ... !
reply by karenina on 17-Feb-2020
    You are a talented and wry poetic "chef"--looking forward to the next treat!--Karenina
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
    Its cooked I just hope I haven't over cooked it otherwise I ll have to serve up a cold dish ... lol.
reply by karenina on 17-Feb-2020
    Just gave you your first review...
    So I won THAT!---Karenina
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
    Excellent then no more competitions until I win again ...
reply by karenina on 17-Feb-2020
    Hmmmm. Interesting thought!--K
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
    anytime ...
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Strong statement but so very well stated ... a very unique offering for the contest, but it should definitely stand out among the many, sir!! ;) :) Thanx for that thought-provocation for the day, and best of luck! ;) Yvette

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
    Excellent im great at winning competitions I have several entries all the same poem there fab see ya !!!
Comment from TallySally
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Hi - Pride cometh before the fall.
You hit the contest requirements on the head - and conveyed so much wisdom in so few words. We all stand on feet of clay. When we get a big head we truly do get top heavy - and come crashing down. And Everyone's watching.
Great job,
Relda

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
    Excellent much appreciate the thoughts and words over and out ... !
Comment from A. Willow Bends
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Great five liner! I am always impressed with those of you who can get a profound message across within short parameters such as this. Great visual chosen. I would think you would do extremely WELL with this one!
Good Luck!
Wendy

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
    Well what you and I think dont really matter it all in the hands of those who do vote lol. I like it im glad you enjoyed it tell everyone to come round for a slice anytime ... lol.
Comment from Darlene Franklin
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This poem falls gently on the ear, but I'm not sure how the last two lines relate to what comes before, except that hypocrisy will lead eventually to humble pie? A good moral tale.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
    You got it the customer of religion is a strange creature they promote morality and truth when living a lie and sometimes just sometimes when they fall on their own sword its nice to serve them a slice freshly baked .... lol.
Comment from Marilyn Lou Berry
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Love that illustration accompanying your poem. Last 2 lines are effective and punchy, good effect. Lesson(s) learned, but not too late hopefully! Strong contender in the contest, so good luck!!

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
    yes everyone learns a lesson some harder than others some more fun than other I hope I win.
Comment from Diana L Crawford
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So true! Not many eat humble pie even if they know they should! Great wisdom here in this 5 line contest entry!

Thank you for sharing this wise statement!

xoxo

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
    Excellent much appreciated.
reply by Diana L Crawford on 16-Feb-2020
    xoxo
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hello my friend,

Nice five lines poem with a correct 2/2/5/7/5 syllables count. The presentation is okay but I don't like when the pictures have words...it takes away from the poem... it's distracting.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
    I thought this one added to the message and I got another one on its way at some point.
Comment from juliaSjames
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Yes humble pie is free though it's not very palatable to the ego.
Well done with this short write. There's even slant rhyme for an additional poetic touch.

I wish you the very best in the contest. This is an intriguing philosophical entry.

Blessings Julia

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
    Excellent most people dont know how hard it is to keep winning in the competitions so I just stay quiet about it.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Excellent idea about the self-righteous man who forgets to be humbleğ??? I love this poem is so true to itself. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
    Excellent maybe Ill come second maybe third but first whoo knows could be tricky.