Out Standing Stories and Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 47 "I Still Believe in You "A Book of Horror and Honor.
6 total reviews
Comment from Dr. Nad
This author has been willing to share the burden of loss in his soul through the loss of a son. Thank you for sharing from your heart in a way that brings a sense of some purpose to an event that feels like there is no redemptive purpose. Thank you for retaining his life significance and meaning for the rest of us from a family who saw loss and chose renewed hope.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
This author has been willing to share the burden of loss in his soul through the loss of a son. Thank you for sharing from your heart in a way that brings a sense of some purpose to an event that feels like there is no redemptive purpose. Thank you for retaining his life significance and meaning for the rest of us from a family who saw loss and chose renewed hope.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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The first doctor I want to thank you very much for seeing that you not only review this but you actually read it and now you're sharing that.
I believe a lot of people don't read properly and understand me
And they also take review points away for possible grammar issues or capitalize words that I feel are important.
that doesn't matter to me but when I write something serious just getting sick store reviews and I get three stars I want to know why?
and when I get no feedback tonight just have to block these people especially if they repeat it!
can you imagine trying to educate somebody about reviewing by content which is important and everything else is everybody's own particular style don't criticize that?
And then they just do it over again?
And this is a site where you would think there's intellectuals writing!
but you got to realize dock that there's people here I call them "newbies"
a newbie hasn't posted anything a newbie has just Roots join that month and a newbie gives you one star!
And then they think that they know how to write and review?
Amazing!
you can't even go back on them to get revenge by reviewing one of their works cuz I have nothing!
you can correct them and tell them they're not making friends are making enemies but so I think there's people on here that just come on for one weekend and just do either jealous or order quite frankly assholes!
Thanks,
And my condolences.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
A very nice cover image for a wonderful think-piece. Well executed! The wordings are very well drafted in style and in mix; good grammar all the way. I will always believe! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
A very nice cover image for a wonderful think-piece. Well executed! The wordings are very well drafted in style and in mix; good grammar all the way. I will always believe! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thanks appreciate this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
Nice poem, kind of creepy but well written. I like the presentation. Donating organs after his or her death It's the most selfless thing he or she can do.
I have mentioned this before but you continue to do it so I guess that is the way it is. I don't like the author's notes with the poem. It's distracting. There is a place for author notes at the bottom. Your poems will look better.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
Hello, my friend,
Nice poem, kind of creepy but well written. I like the presentation. Donating organs after his or her death It's the most selfless thing he or she can do.
I have mentioned this before but you continue to do it so I guess that is the way it is. I don't like the author's notes with the poem. It's distracting. There is a place for author notes at the bottom. Your poems will look better.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Marion van Bruggen.
Rated this Five *'s'.
This chapter is fascinating!
It needed a while to "get into the story" but used when I understood why all the "-'s and what they were for, the development of the fantasy struck me and left me openmouthed.
So many Apparations that it can't denied.
You have turned me into a true believer!
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Gypsy,
can I do my 7 point review and I know you seen it cuz I reviewed several your pieces I've never give less than five stars every Sunday I get my six stars I give them to worthy pieces like this.
this is a true story about a man whose son had died in his Apparation had been seen!
Note:
Style and Grammar are secondary.
Content is what's important.
This review and any other "Lesser reviews"
Take away from the Accreditation of the Artist.
Please re-review if not?
I will have no choice but to go to different measures.
Sincerely,
Doctor Ricky 1024
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Reviews are given for improvement and if you can't take it, by all means...do your best.
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Maybe when you write, you need reviews for improvement.
My abilities ad a writer here are unquestionably above that.
I write here and journal.
It's a form of relief, in my case, and the depth level is obviously beyond most, imaginations.
The Adjective and Objective Contents aare always Excellent and Exceptional while the Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
I now have no choice but to go to the next level.
Doctor Ricky 1924.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
This chapter is fascinating! It needed a while to "get into the story" but when I understood why all the "-s were for, the development of the fantasy struck me and left me openmouthed. So many witnesses in this apparicion that it can't be denied. You have turned me into a believer!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
This chapter is fascinating! It needed a while to "get into the story" but when I understood why all the "-s were for, the development of the fantasy struck me and left me openmouthed. So many witnesses in this apparicion that it can't be denied. You have turned me into a believer!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Gypsy Rose just gave this a four star review based on her misunderstanding and the way I present my work here.
I completely copied your review and sent it to her to see if she'll do a re-review and give it the five or six stars that it deserves.
And, yes its a true story and deals with my kid.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
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Thanks again
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
You believe in your daughter, the story, two young men who witnessed the Apparition; your son died thereafter; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this, sponsoring membership.
Please check the typos given in the brackets:
it takes a while to get on it's feet, (it takes a while to get on its feet,)
is an Apparation (is an Apparition)
who witnessed that Appiration though (who witnessed that Apparition though)
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
You believe in your daughter, the story, two young men who witnessed the Apparition; your son died thereafter; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this, sponsoring membership.
Please check the typos given in the brackets:
it takes a while to get on it's feet, (it takes a while to get on its feet,)
is an Apparation (is an Apparition)
who witnessed that Appiration though (who witnessed that Apparition though)
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thanks but no thanks.
You continue to give sub-par ratings for Grammar Issues.
I don't need a teacher I need a reviewer!
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for sharing, Ricky. It's wonderful that Jason saved four lives through the organ donation. Also, he is never forgotten as you keep him alive in your poems.
Suggested corrections:
"It's mission is quite clear as now it's eyes open wide!"
(Its mission is quite clear as now its eyes open wide)
Its is the possessive form.
"What you have just experienced is an Appiration!"
(Apparition)
"And, of course Jason was creamated " (cremated)
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
Thanks for sharing, Ricky. It's wonderful that Jason saved four lives through the organ donation. Also, he is never forgotten as you keep him alive in your poems.
Suggested corrections:
"It's mission is quite clear as now it's eyes open wide!"
(Its mission is quite clear as now its eyes open wide)
Its is the possessive form.
"What you have just experienced is an Appiration!"
(Apparition)
"And, of course Jason was creamated " (cremated)
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thanks for the Grammar Issues lyenochka.
I'm mostly talking on cell phone to reduce my work after writing it down.
Sometimes the phone doesn't use it spell check!
Ricky