The Lighter Side of Things
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "The Perfect Wife"We all need to smile, especially these days.
17 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Very well done and congratulations on winning the contest. You certainly deserved it.
This was clever and creative with all those apologies even right up to grave .
I enjoyed the fun of reading it.
Best regards,
Mary
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2020
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Very well done and congratulations on winning the contest. You certainly deserved it.
This was clever and creative with all those apologies even right up to grave .
I enjoyed the fun of reading it.
Best regards,
Mary
Comment Written 25-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2020
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Thank very kindly Mary xoxo
Comment from lancellot
Very funny. I can see how this won the forgiveness contest. It is well crafted, and there is humor in every line. That she got away with it too and is making this declaration at his grave is simply icing on the cake.
Thank you for the smile today.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2020
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Very funny. I can see how this won the forgiveness contest. It is well crafted, and there is humor in every line. That she got away with it too and is making this declaration at his grave is simply icing on the cake.
Thank you for the smile today.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2020
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Thank you Lancelot your review gave me a smile too! xoxo
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL!! Always such fun to make a point with that lovely twist of sarcasm, yeah?! ;) A fun one for the record books, my lady - can certainly see why it won! ;)
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2020
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LOL!! Always such fun to make a point with that lovely twist of sarcasm, yeah?! ;) A fun one for the record books, my lady - can certainly see why it won! ;)
Comment Written 25-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much Yvette. Glad you enjoyed xoxoxo
Comment from Michele Harber
OMG, Chris, this is so cute!!! I pretty much saw where you were headed fairly early on but, let's face it, I know you well enough to know you're not the shrinking violet, sucking up type of person. Every stanza made me giggle, your twists were perfect, and your rhymes were absolutely spot on.
I don't give sixes often, and I never give them on the basis of friendship, but you really did deserve this. I'm so glad you won, and just sorry that you had to share the victory (and the site dollars) with others.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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OMG, Chris, this is so cute!!! I pretty much saw where you were headed fairly early on but, let's face it, I know you well enough to know you're not the shrinking violet, sucking up type of person. Every stanza made me giggle, your twists were perfect, and your rhymes were absolutely spot on.
I don't give sixes often, and I never give them on the basis of friendship, but you really did deserve this. I'm so glad you won, and just sorry that you had to share the victory (and the site dollars) with others.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Hey, thanks buddy, I'm really happy you enjoyed this enough to award a sixer! It was a pretty cliche "plot", wasn't it lol?! And it's okay sharing the winning $$. I'd started off with only 1 vote and at last check before I went to bed last night, I was down the bottom with 2, so I was really pleased and surprised to see I'd worked my way up to the winner's block! So I don't mind sharing in the least lol. Thanks again for your review and those shiny stars xoxoxoxox
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You're very welcome, Chris. There's nothing wrong with cliched as long as you write it well and ultimately make it your own, and you certainly did both. I had a lot of fun with it, and it was a very different style of writing than I was used to from the ones I'd proofed for you. It was fun to see something lighter and more straightforward. I understand that much poetry relies on metaphor and simile and extensive description and what I like to call "Yoda-speak" (red as rubies the roses were). I'm a much more straightforward poet, and sometimes it's nice to read something else that's straightforward. Yours was direct, to the point, and very funny. (Should I be worried that I found a poem about murder very funny?)
FYI, my muse seems to be on winter break right now so, for the rhyming poetry contest, I'm probably going to enter a poem I wrote over the summer. I'm bringing this up just because, after what I just said about straightforward poetry, this poem actually starts out very descriptive and poetic until ?.
Anyway, I'm glad your poem made it up the ranks last night. I was so excited when I saw that you'd tied for first. xoxoxo
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We-e-e-ll.....maybe you should be a bit worried considering your winning poem "I Connected The Dots".
Just sayin' lol!
I'd like to read your entry for the Rhyming contest, if that's a possibility!? Gotta check out my competition hahaha
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In all fairness, "Connecting the Dots" was just a fictional story I made up - and, as long as the cops continue to believe that, I won't serve time.
I'll email you the poem I'm probably going to enter. If my muse comes back from vacation before then, I might write something new but, if she's enjoying the weather in Fiji, or wherever muses go to relax, I'll use the one I'm sending you.
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Well, like you, I hope any members of the constabulary who may read FS contributions, remain convinced that my poem is fictional, otherwise I'm screwed lol!
It's hard when muse's go on leave. I also wonder where they go to recharge, because they sure remain uncontactable for the duration! Mine's just poking her head over my shoulder, but not really back yet. A reduction in pay might get her working...
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Actually, she's probably holding out for a raise. Don't you just hate it when we need our muses more than they need us?
[By the way, I'll keep the truth about your poem secret if you'll keep the truth about mine.]
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Okay, I won't rat if you won't lol!
Yeah, these bloody muses are so self centred! They need pulling into line
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Right! I'd give my muse a good talking to - if I could find where the heck she went.
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I can at least strangle mine while all she's doing is peeking over my shoulder. If I do that though, she'll rack off for good and I'll have to get a new one!
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Be careful. The last thing you need is another murder charge!
Comment from jenintorre
Wow. Absolutely love it. A winner for sure. You have my vote. Thanks for the entertaining write. It's the best poem that I've read in ages. Good luck and best wishes Jen.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Wow. Absolutely love it. A winner for sure. You have my vote. Thanks for the entertaining write. It's the best poem that I've read in ages. Good luck and best wishes Jen.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much jenintorre, for the vote, the review and the fact you thought it worthy of a sixer! ** big smiles ** xoxoxo
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Forgiveness Poem writing prompt.
This well rhymed verse asks forgiveness of a loved one who moved on.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the Forgiveness Poem writing prompt.
This well rhymed verse asks forgiveness of a loved one who moved on.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much Sharon xoxoxoxo
Comment from moongirlwriter
This is from a time when women gave everything. . .and men still wanted more in their marriage. Then we are left alone to live out our lives. I did some of that (I believe I must be a generation or two behind but totally get the 80/20 give). I'm so glad my daughters have husbands who appreciate them and their efforts. . .I must have done something right for them to not follow in their mom's footsteps. Nice writing, Best of luck with this piece.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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This is from a time when women gave everything. . .and men still wanted more in their marriage. Then we are left alone to live out our lives. I did some of that (I believe I must be a generation or two behind but totally get the 80/20 give). I'm so glad my daughters have husbands who appreciate them and their efforts. . .I must have done something right for them to not follow in their mom's footsteps. Nice writing, Best of luck with this piece.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thank you moongirlwriter xoxooxx
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Comment from Susan X Smith
Ha, ha. I like this cute story within a poem. The suspense builds until the ends. The rhyme scheme works well within it. I enjoyed reading this one. You have my vote.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Ha, ha. I like this cute story within a poem. The suspense builds until the ends. The rhyme scheme works well within it. I enjoyed reading this one. You have my vote.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much Susan, for your comments and the vote!
Comment from Elaine Chiodi
An excellent commentary on the tongue-in-cheek need for forgiveness. Great imagery and rhyming that tell a complete story of what may happen when life is is all take and no give. Good luck in the contest... ...ec
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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An excellent commentary on the tongue-in-cheek need for forgiveness. Great imagery and rhyming that tell a complete story of what may happen when life is is all take and no give. Good luck in the contest... ...ec
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thanks so much Elaine xoxoxo
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You're welcome... ...ec
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
Well, well. I guess that her measuring up or not measuring up didn't matter very much in the end. She got it all. It sounds to me like she was working like a slave to make sure that you were taken care of. I enjoyed reading this humorous and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Well, well. I guess that her measuring up or not measuring up didn't matter very much in the end. She got it all. It sounds to me like she was working like a slave to make sure that you were taken care of. I enjoyed reading this humorous and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much Jeffrey. It's so hard when one doesn't quite measure up lol! xoxoxoox
