My Being Knows You
The years have given us familiarity beyond speech...58 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Nicely done! And you didn't choose a limited syllable line scheme but gradually reduced a syllable per line. I really liked the naught-thought rhyme. And I liked the overall feeling of words not being necessary as the lovers communicate with touch and are so close they know each other's thoughts. Best to you in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Nicely done! And you didn't choose a limited syllable line scheme but gradually reduced a syllable per line. I really liked the naught-thought rhyme. And I liked the overall feeling of words not being necessary as the lovers communicate with touch and are so close they know each other's thoughts. Best to you in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Thanx so much for your wonderful comments, Helen! ;) The sense of truly knowing someone beyond words is something that can only be experienced...but what a fulfilling and comfortable experience it is!! :) Take care out there and have a wonderful week ahead! ;) Yvette
P.S. Look, only three days behind now - lol!! ;) :)
Comment from Bicpen
Its EXCELLENT ...
It is a dream where the silence of whispers are lingering becoming eternalised in the endurance and constancy of the senses. It moves with grace and deliberates the longing and soul of compassion with a desire of embrace which smoulders in the imagery and word choice which is brave and a delight. It shines through with a voice of caring and celebrates the wisdom of listening, here it embeds itself in the memory and becomes a part of the spiritual with the touch of acquired and experienced passion.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Its EXCELLENT ...
It is a dream where the silence of whispers are lingering becoming eternalised in the endurance and constancy of the senses. It moves with grace and deliberates the longing and soul of compassion with a desire of embrace which smoulders in the imagery and word choice which is brave and a delight. It shines through with a voice of caring and celebrates the wisdom of listening, here it embeds itself in the memory and becomes a part of the spiritual with the touch of acquired and experienced passion.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Thanx so much for all of your wonderful comments, George! ;) The sense of truly knowing someone beyond words is something that can only be experienced...but what a fulfilling and comfortable experience it is!! :) Take care out there and have a wonderful week ahead! ;) Yvette
P.S. Look, only three days behind now - lol!! ;) :)
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Excellent Im glad you like it Im only organising myself and what I seem to have got is an organised mess lol.
Comment from Debbie Pope
You are not usually sappy at all. This one is downright romantic. You make us wonder why are the whispers fading into naught. No one is talking now, but touching and thought are going on. Interesting. You give us something lovely to think about.
Well done as usual.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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You are not usually sappy at all. This one is downright romantic. You make us wonder why are the whispers fading into naught. No one is talking now, but touching and thought are going on. Interesting. You give us something lovely to think about.
Well done as usual.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Thanx so much for your wonderful comments, MQ! ;) The sense of truly knowing someone beyond words is something that can only be experienced...but what a fulfilling and comfortable experience it is, yeah?!! :) Take care out there and have a wonderful week ahead! ;) Yvette
P.S. Look, only three days behind now - lol!! ;) :)
Comment from JudyE
I thought this a very nicely penned Valentine's poem and I'm sure it will get a lot of votes. It flows nicely and I always like verses that have at least some rhyming. Good luck
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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I thought this a very nicely penned Valentine's poem and I'm sure it will get a lot of votes. It flows nicely and I always like verses that have at least some rhyming. Good luck
Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Thanx so much for your review, Judy! ;) The sense of truly knowing someone beyond words is something that can only be experienced...but what a fulfilling and comfortable experience it is, yeah?!! :) Take care out there and have a wonderful week ahead! ;) Yvette
P.S. Only three days behind now!! ;) :)
Comment from Dancemom
This is a well-written poem for the Valentine poem contest. I love your sentiment that your love continues both because of touch and thought. Great job! Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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This is a well-written poem for the Valentine poem contest. I love your sentiment that your love continues both because of touch and thought. Great job! Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Thanx so much for your wonderful comments! ;) The sense of truly knowing someone beyond words is something that can only be experienced...but what a fulfilling and comfortable experience it is!! :) Take care out there and have a wonderful week ahead! ;) Yvette
P.S. I apologize for being so far behind!! Was a crazy week and I have all the boys home this weekend (HOORAY!!).... I'm attempting to get caught up while they're outside working on cars!! Don't know how far I'll get, but we'll see!! ;) :)
Comment from glindaboy52
Very eloquent in verse and thought. The entire sense of two loves converging into one is beautifully expressed here. There is a deepening of the virtue of love transcending here. Very nicely expressed.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Very eloquent in verse and thought. The entire sense of two loves converging into one is beautifully expressed here. There is a deepening of the virtue of love transcending here. Very nicely expressed.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Wow! Thank you very much for those wonderful stars and your awesome comments -- they are both so appreciated! ;) The sense of truly knowing someone beyond words is something that can only be experienced...but what a fulfilling and comfortable experience it is!! :) Take care out there and have a wonderful week ahead! ;) Yvette
P.S. I apologize for being so far behind!! Was a crazy week and I have all the boys home this weekend (HOORAY!!).... I'm attempting to get caught up while they're outside working on cars!! Don't know how far I'll get, but we'll see!! ;) :)
P.S. I apologize for being so far behind!! Was a crazy week and I have all the boys home this weekend (HOORAY!!).... I'm attempting to get caught up while they're outside working on cars!! Don't know how far I'll get, but we'll see!! ;) :)
Comment from Lobber
Hi Yvette,
Very ethereal - love the way it floats - using )naught( adds a sense of vintage and an ungoing passage of time to the feeling. The shifting font colors add energy to the emotion and senses of hearing and feeling. Neat art, too. - Lobber
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Hi Yvette,
Very ethereal - love the way it floats - using )naught( adds a sense of vintage and an ungoing passage of time to the feeling. The shifting font colors add energy to the emotion and senses of hearing and feeling. Neat art, too. - Lobber
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Thanx so much for noting the colors' effect on the words, Lobber... some do not agree with the font manipulation but, after being a teacher of teenagers for so long, I've concluded that color and presentation make a world of difference: from the color pen with which I grade to the placement of a simple smiley face or heart here and there on a not-so-great paper... yeah, the pen's a case of 'spoonful of sugar yada-yada', but it's the same principle as color of font on a presentation! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
P.S. I apologize for being so far behind!! Was a crazy week and I have all the boys home this weekend (HOORAY!!).... I'm attempting to get caught up while they're outside working on cars!! Don't know how far I'll get, but we'll see!! ;) :)
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
What do you know, a sappy blond. You said that not me.
I really like this piece. It has very good meter and pacing. It reads really well and the message is cool. You track the relationship over time and there's even an inference that relationships change but they don't go away.
That's a good one.
I meant to ask you if Werner Von Braun was the right answer to your dear Abby story.
Z. (*_*)
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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What do you know, a sappy blond. You said that not me.
I really like this piece. It has very good meter and pacing. It reads really well and the message is cool. You track the relationship over time and there's even an inference that relationships change but they don't go away.
That's a good one.
I meant to ask you if Werner Von Braun was the right answer to your dear Abby story.
Z. (*_*)
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Thanx, Z, and, yeah, I know it was a sappy evening...lol! ;) We ladies get those sometimes (for more it's more like rarely...) .... you guys ever? (would you admit i? wink!)
Oh, and, yes, was von Braun: 'Don't take off your dancing slippers!!" Best quote EVER!! ;) :)
Take care! ;) Yvette
