Expressing Myself
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "honestly..."Writing my way out of depression / mental illness
31 total reviews
Comment from Eleri
This poem has the correct number of syllables per line for the contest and reads well. The emotion behind it seems dark and sad, which makes the whole thing very atmospheric.
Good luck in the contest
Eleri
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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This poem has the correct number of syllables per line for the contest and reads well. The emotion behind it seems dark and sad, which makes the whole thing very atmospheric.
Good luck in the contest
Eleri
Comment Written 31-May-2023
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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Thank you so much for the feedback Debbie!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a poignant verse but all the better expressed because of the personification of the heart and the fact that it really isn't quite in sync with your head perhaps where loss is deeply ingrained. A fine, thought-provoking 5 liner. Good luck! Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2023
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This is a poignant verse but all the better expressed because of the personification of the heart and the fact that it really isn't quite in sync with your head perhaps where loss is deeply ingrained. A fine, thought-provoking 5 liner. Good luck! Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 31-May-2023
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2023
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Thank you
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
Well I would say that you definitely made it if you are able to hear your heart laughing which is a good happening at any time. Thank God and laugh with it. The poem is five lines, reads well, and the subject is good. Buona Fortuna in the contest. giovanni
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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Well I would say that you definitely made it if you are able to hear your heart laughing which is a good happening at any time. Thank God and laugh with it. The poem is five lines, reads well, and the subject is good. Buona Fortuna in the contest. giovanni
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review!
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y/w giovanni
Comment from Puzzle
Is this about the loss of a child or loss of love. I'm guessing child based on the picture but it stated it was a romance poem so I'm a little confused. But there are no errors. I enjoyed it!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Is this about the loss of a child or loss of love. I'm guessing child based on the picture but it stated it was a romance poem so I'm a little confused. But there are no errors. I enjoyed it!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Loss of love. When I was choosing the picture I didn't have my glasses on and I thought it was a distraught old lady... LOL
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Hahaha ohhhh mystery solved!!!!!
Comment from DeboraDyess
Wonderful poem. Time is a tricky thing. A minute can feel like an eternity and a day can pass in the blink of an eye. But I suspect whoever made that saying popular had no clue...
Thank you for sharing. No need for a 'fix'. It was well done.
Blessings,
Deb
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Wonderful poem. Time is a tricky thing. A minute can feel like an eternity and a day can pass in the blink of an eye. But I suspect whoever made that saying popular had no clue...
Thank you for sharing. No need for a 'fix'. It was well done.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much!
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
A simple idea, and simply written but it is very effective. I think it often takes a lot of work to make something sound as simple and clear as this, so I mean that in a very positive way.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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A simple idea, and simply written but it is very effective. I think it often takes a lot of work to make something sound as simple and clear as this, so I mean that in a very positive way.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much. Im glad you liked it
Comment from Cindy Decker
Hello. What a beautiful drawing! Your poem fits the 5 line criteria. It is an excellent poem. They say time heals all wounds and sometimes it does, but sometimes some hurts take longer to heal, like you express in your poem. ' I love your words: this old heart beats to spite me', and 'I hear it laughing." This is such good work, because you have expressed a profound feeling in just a few words. Best wishes. Have a good weekend.
Cindy
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Hello. What a beautiful drawing! Your poem fits the 5 line criteria. It is an excellent poem. They say time heals all wounds and sometimes it does, but sometimes some hurts take longer to heal, like you express in your poem. ' I love your words: this old heart beats to spite me', and 'I hear it laughing." This is such good work, because you have expressed a profound feeling in just a few words. Best wishes. Have a good weekend.
Cindy
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review and generous rating. I get such a thrill when I see the plus light up!!
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You?re welcome!
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are strong, clear and creative. I pondered on the
theme of this poem. The words of this poem are deep. The artwork
is adorable and compliments this poem.
May you be well and safe.....
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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The author's words are strong, clear and creative. I pondered on the
theme of this poem. The words of this poem are deep. The artwork
is adorable and compliments this poem.
May you be well and safe.....
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review!
Comment from A. Willow Bends
There is so much here that is unsaid leaving the reader with questions. Good poetry often does that. The overall effect is wonderful. My favorite line is that the heart beats to spite you. (and that it is laughing) Mysterious and leaves much to wonder about. Great job with the open ended for the reader.
Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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There is so much here that is unsaid leaving the reader with questions. Good poetry often does that. The overall effect is wonderful. My favorite line is that the heart beats to spite you. (and that it is laughing) Mysterious and leaves much to wonder about. Great job with the open ended for the reader.
Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your thoughtful review!!
Comment from smileycloud
now there is a more realistic twist on a romance story
I like your style
to put an almost comedy slant on extreme long lasting pain .....believe it or not.....is healing and growth
well done
I could not see the artwork from Amy though
did it not save in the frame of the poem?
good luck in the contest
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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now there is a more realistic twist on a romance story
I like your style
to put an almost comedy slant on extreme long lasting pain .....believe it or not.....is healing and growth
well done
I could not see the artwork from Amy though
did it not save in the frame of the poem?
good luck in the contest
have a smiley day
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much.. thanks for understanding the meaning!
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:)
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Thank you so much for understanding!