Shake It Up!!
Routines are sometimes meant to be broken...20 total reviews
Comment from Tami Urbanek
LOL! Yes, the same old, same old can get boring. Your writing flowed nicely. It must be difficult to write something in only 60 words or less. You you got a story!
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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LOL! Yes, the same old, same old can get boring. Your writing flowed nicely. It must be difficult to write something in only 60 words or less. You you got a story!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Thanx so much for your review, Tami -- have a great week ahead! ;) Yvette
Comment from Debbie Pope
You have written about one of my pet peeves. Why do people on elevators and other small settings ignore all the other people that they share a space with? Is a smiled recognition too much to ask? Why do people treat others as though they are invisible?
Good dash, Yvette. You entertained us and made a statement. By the way, did these two dash into a romance or just a new friendship?
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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You have written about one of my pet peeves. Why do people on elevators and other small settings ignore all the other people that they share a space with? Is a smiled recognition too much to ask? Why do people treat others as though they are invisible?
Good dash, Yvette. You entertained us and made a statement. By the way, did these two dash into a romance or just a new friendship?
Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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You are so right.... it's that 'ignore the population unless they're on the computer screen'... ugh!! Glad you enjoyed this one, MQ -- was meant to be a wake-up call, hopefully...?! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Bichon
I really enjoyed this story! It felt very realistic and there was a real sense of humanity to it. Sometimes even the smallest actions can have the biggest smiles!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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I really enjoyed this story! It felt very realistic and there was a real sense of humanity to it. Sometimes even the smallest actions can have the biggest smiles!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow writer. Thank you for sharing your story, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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Hello fellow writer. Thank you for sharing your story, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I enjoyed this nice little piece. it's a pleasing anecdotal story which one could here as a cute-meet. Sometimes it's the simplest things that have the greatest impact.
very nice
GMG
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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Hi there,
I enjoyed this nice little piece. it's a pleasing anecdotal story which one could here as a cute-meet. Sometimes it's the simplest things that have the greatest impact.
very nice
GMG
Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Minglement
Ah, this is a fun, unexpected little romantic entry for the 60 Word Dash contest. I loved that it wasn't all heavy and wordy, trying to cram a lot of info into so few words. If I had a six left, it would be. Yours :) Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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Ah, this is a fun, unexpected little romantic entry for the 60 Word Dash contest. I loved that it wasn't all heavy and wordy, trying to cram a lot of info into so few words. If I had a six left, it would be. Yours :) Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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So glad you enjoyed, Marcia - thank you!!
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You're most welcome ;)
Comment from Dawn Munro
Well now, wasn't this just a delightful little 'slice of life'. I can see this as the opening for an excellent romance story, though it stands well on its own, too. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Well now, wasn't this just a delightful little 'slice of life'. I can see this as the opening for an excellent romance story, though it stands well on its own, too. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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LOL! Glad you see a 'beginning' there! Thanx so much for the review!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Dancemom
This is a well-written story for the sixty word flash fiction contest. This is a cute tale full of romance, and I would enjoy seeing what happens to them next.
Great job! Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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This is a well-written story for the sixty word flash fiction contest. This is a cute tale full of romance, and I would enjoy seeing what happens to them next.
Great job! Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Glad you see a future for these two - thanks for the review!
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
This was nice! A little change in routine is nice. We all have this habit with certain acquaintances that we do certain things casually like clockwork. But this simple act can even lead to a budding romance between the two characters. So, I would suggest you write a short story or novelette which somehow starts a love story with this little thing at the heart of it! It would be nice to see how the two strangers develop a close bond! :-)
Best wishes for the contest and have a good day! :-)
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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This was nice! A little change in routine is nice. We all have this habit with certain acquaintances that we do certain things casually like clockwork. But this simple act can even lead to a budding romance between the two characters. So, I would suggest you write a short story or novelette which somehow starts a love story with this little thing at the heart of it! It would be nice to see how the two strangers develop a close bond! :-)
Best wishes for the contest and have a good day! :-)
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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So glad you so a bit of a future here -- thank you for your enthusiastic review!
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I think this one has potential! Do think on it! :-)
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I guess that a merry heart doeth good like a medicine. It was a great way to break the ice and lighten the mood. I think that dialogue can begin to flow when the next encounter occurs. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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I guess that a merry heart doeth good like a medicine. It was a great way to break the ice and lighten the mood. I think that dialogue can begin to flow when the next encounter occurs. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Hopefully so! Thank you for your review!
