Oh Life!
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Comment from kiwijenny
Trues
Well penned ...what a joy hide...when we lie joy hides
When we suppress truth joy hides as well
Good picture
God bless
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Trues
Well penned ...what a joy hide...when we lie joy hides
When we suppress truth joy hides as well
Good picture
God bless
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, though a bit fractured in the write, its message is clearly presented and touches us all in some form or another, at some time in our lives, perhaps even more often than not. Who can say if little white lies are acceptable, while others are not. This writer appears to accept lies, perhaps hidden, but would it not be glorious if truth in all things were possible...
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In my opinion, though a bit fractured in the write, its message is clearly presented and touches us all in some form or another, at some time in our lives, perhaps even more often than not. Who can say if little white lies are acceptable, while others are not. This writer appears to accept lies, perhaps hidden, but would it not be glorious if truth in all things were possible...
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
Comment from AprilViolet
Being truthfully is always the best course! Liars almost always get caught in the end! Better to just tell the truth. I get what you are saying here. Best wishes!
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Being truthfully is always the best course! Liars almost always get caught in the end! Better to just tell the truth. I get what you are saying here. Best wishes!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Alcreator Litt Dear, Well! At last I read some of your work. You have reviewed me several times over the years so I am happy to do so for you. This is a true confession poem - pleased with yourself for being 'uncaught' as you put it. A good poem with a very appropriate picture. Warm regards Dorothy
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Hello Alcreator Litt Dear, Well! At last I read some of your work. You have reviewed me several times over the years so I am happy to do so for you. This is a true confession poem - pleased with yourself for being 'uncaught' as you put it. A good poem with a very appropriate picture. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
Comment from Sugarray77
You have developed a realistic poem in this addition to your poetry book. I won't condone the endorsement for lying, but realistically, lying happens. Good job on developing this read.
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You have developed a realistic poem in this addition to your poetry book. I won't condone the endorsement for lying, but realistically, lying happens. Good job on developing this read.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
Comment from Raul1
Excellent poem! We all speak the truths. I think some of the time the some truths may hurt us. It is good that you were talking about self pride here. No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
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Excellent poem! We all speak the truths. I think some of the time the some truths may hurt us. It is good that you were talking about self pride here. No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
Comment from Robbie Yates
Great poem! I like the way you are reflectively challenging the lies told every day. I wasn't sure at first what the word you'd hidden was... but I think I was overlooking what was staring me in the face! :)
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Great poem! I like the way you are reflectively challenging the lies told every day. I wasn't sure at first what the word you'd hidden was... but I think I was overlooking what was staring me in the face! :)
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
Comment from Dean Kuch
"They" is rather an ambiguous word isn't it, Alcreator Litt Dear?
I would have liked to have known who "they" were you were writing of here in your first line.
This is a little like a tanka poem which also doubles as an acrostic. The first letter of each line spells "trues", however, and not "Truths" as featured in the title, so it is neither a "true" tanka (because of the rhyming), nor is it an acrostic because the title is not spelled out in the poem.
Still, it's food for thought.
~Dean
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"They" is rather an ambiguous word isn't it, Alcreator Litt Dear?
I would have liked to have known who "they" were you were writing of here in your first line.
This is a little like a tanka poem which also doubles as an acrostic. The first letter of each line spells "trues", however, and not "Truths" as featured in the title, so it is neither a "true" tanka (because of the rhyming), nor is it an acrostic because the title is not spelled out in the poem.
Still, it's food for thought.
~Dean
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
Comment from Ginnygray
Well, Dr. Alcreator Litt Dear, I find your 5-7-5-7-7 syllabled poem a challenge to say the least. Your rhyme threw me at first. I really struggled with the first two lines of end rhymes, (truths). After reading the background, and not having enough space do finish the words, I was even more stymied. :). However, I think you are clever because the letters at the beginning of each line are "trues"! Now, self-pride and hide in the last two lines are nicely rhymed. I'm going to stop now before I ramble on further. I haven't lied to you. I am now curious about your book, "Oh Life"! Confused, but tried!ð???
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Well, Dr. Alcreator Litt Dear, I find your 5-7-5-7-7 syllabled poem a challenge to say the least. Your rhyme threw me at first. I really struggled with the first two lines of end rhymes, (truths). After reading the background, and not having enough space do finish the words, I was even more stymied. :). However, I think you are clever because the letters at the beginning of each line are "trues"! Now, self-pride and hide in the last two lines are nicely rhymed. I'm going to stop now before I ramble on further. I haven't lied to you. I am now curious about your book, "Oh Life"! Confused, but tried!ð???
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
Comment from victor 66
Pray tell me, what review you expect? If you are expecting something negative, I can't go there. I believe in free will, free speech and free verse. I have no idea where you are going with this but I like it. Best wishes.
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Pray tell me, what review you expect? If you are expecting something negative, I can't go there. I believe in free will, free speech and free verse. I have no idea where you are going with this but I like it. Best wishes.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2018
