Oh Life!
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Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a beautiful piece of poetic expression. It is written in uery accessible language and makes good sense. I enjoyed reading this one. Kudos
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This is a beautiful piece of poetic expression. It is written in uery accessible language and makes good sense. I enjoyed reading this one. Kudos
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very wel lwritten, alcreator, you did a great job writing this tanka poem about the joy you get from hiding truth from others. that's what i got out of it.
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this is very wel lwritten, alcreator, you did a great job writing this tanka poem about the joy you get from hiding truth from others. that's what i got out of it.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
Comment from JohnDope
Very interesting and unique rhyme scheme employed in this poem. Don't worry, God knows that they are and forever will be liars. Self-pride; for I know I speak the truth, therefore nothing else matters. Good job
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Very interesting and unique rhyme scheme employed in this poem. Don't worry, God knows that they are and forever will be liars. Self-pride; for I know I speak the truth, therefore nothing else matters. Good job
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR YOUR COMMENTARY FEEDBACK.
Comment from Joan E.
I liked your tanka-like form with rhyme. You share thought-provoking reflections about truth and lies. Thanks for the lesson. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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I liked your tanka-like form with rhyme. You share thought-provoking reflections about truth and lies. Thanks for the lesson. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR GOOD REVIEW.
Comment from dannyleonn
Starting the the beginning. I want to soak in the entire work.
Omission, the the liars validation! There are so many interpretations of this piece.
Love the line: "What a joy hide!"
Once again, I must state I enjoy your author notes as much as the poetry.
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Starting the the beginning. I want to soak in the entire work.
Omission, the the liars validation! There are so many interpretations of this piece.
Love the line: "What a joy hide!"
Once again, I must state I enjoy your author notes as much as the poetry.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from mauial
Thought provoking piece. Okay, the liar has suppressed truth and taken manking on a ride that is anything but joy for mankind. A joy for the liar for sure, as he continues to blind all who think they can do things without God's truth.
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Thought provoking piece. Okay, the liar has suppressed truth and taken manking on a ride that is anything but joy for mankind. A joy for the liar for sure, as he continues to blind all who think they can do things without God's truth.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Gloria ....
Well Alcreator I had to return to the beginning to gain a larger understanding of where you are coming from. So is this a tanka? OK I didn't catch the hide in the style, but it does remind of the camo moth that camouflages itself to avoid detection, which is quite different from deceit employed to prey on the unsuspecting.
Interesting. Many thanks to you for sharing.
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Well Alcreator I had to return to the beginning to gain a larger understanding of where you are coming from. So is this a tanka? OK I didn't catch the hide in the style, but it does remind of the camo moth that camouflages itself to avoid detection, which is quite different from deceit employed to prey on the unsuspecting.
Interesting. Many thanks to you for sharing.
Gloria
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for fantastic commendable review
Comment from Bill Schott
I began reading this in Chapter 22 and thought I'd jump back to see from whence this nutty book began. This looks like a tanka to me. My first impression is that is the beginning of a renga that will end when the atmosphere ignites. The tone here seems a bit hostile.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I began reading this in Chapter 22 and thought I'd jump back to see from whence this nutty book began. This looks like a tanka to me. My first impression is that is the beginning of a renga that will end when the atmosphere ignites. The tone here seems a bit hostile.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for truthful review
Comment from Righteous Riter
I like this. The writer breaks this piece down to the finest form. Everyone has their own thought process so I'm not messing with that pride thing.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I like this. The writer breaks this piece down to the finest form. Everyone has their own thought process so I'm not messing with that pride thing.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice review
Comment from Candyjean
This perfectly done 5-7-5-7-7 is a real eye opener. I can really see a moral here. It is so much easier to remember the truth than try to remember a lie correctly. Great job.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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This perfectly done 5-7-5-7-7 is a real eye opener. I can really see a moral here. It is so much easier to remember the truth than try to remember a lie correctly. Great job.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
