Comment from allborn66

Excellent

This is a very interesting poem. I like the rhyme in your poem. I think you conveyed your theme well. The picture is nice.
Barbara

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2013

Comment from Selina Stambi

Good

I am trying very hard to understand your writing. I couldn't catch the hide in the style.

Joy hide ... sounds interesting, though.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013

thanks for trying so hard for so short work....
i appreciate your tenacity and wisdom....
the hide was so simple....
it was like reading acrostic -- TRUE....

Comment from Michael Wayne

Average

Five exclamation points (including the title) in 27 words. That is nearly twenty percent. Perhaps a stronger choice of word could help you move away from the reliance on over-punctuation.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013

thanks for such a wise comment....
you are so wise that your words speak....
great reviewer you must be...
but please stop reviewing my works...
this was your last review of my works...
please never review my works...
never lose heart, only you will not review my works...
thanks for your last review...
hope you will spare me...
shall always be thankful to you if you stop reviewing my works

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Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Good

And I'm on a hiding to nothing trying to work out exactly what the word 'hide' means in the poem and in the author notes.I was going well with the lies - I understood that - and I see there is some reference to consequences. Apologies for my inadequacies. Giddy

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

Joy ride...taking a vehicle (stealing) driving it around and then returning it. Usually without much gas. :-) Your humor is well placed and your syllable count is perfect. I enjoyed it. Carolyn

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2013

Comment from marijmd

Excellent

I usually enjoy your poems I did struggle a little with this one to decipher the meaning. I do not consider that a bad thing though - something that provokes thought is always good.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2013

Comment from Deniz22

Good

1 Corinthians 14:19;9 But in the church I would rather speak five intelligible words to instruct others than ten thousand words in a tongue.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013

thanks for quoting great reference from the Bible...
never understand what you refer to and why
be glad if you please clarify me the point you referred to
appreciate your wisdom

reply by Deniz22 on 09-Apr-2013

I'm merely trying to say that if you feel you have a message that's worth telling, Paul's advice is to speak plainly with a view to having your hearers understand you.

So, what are you trying to say, really? Dennis

Comment from steevie

Excellent

Trues, is the hide my friend and you have written another masterpiece here with this poetic piece. What is truth if there is no lie? What is good of there is no bad?

steve

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2013

Comment from fairy77

Excellent

That was a lovely poem:)But should there be truths twice? The rest a wonderful rhyme and I got challenged too.They seem to love rhyme:)beth fairy77.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2013

Comment from GeraldS

Excellent

I must confess I read your postings, but seldom comment, because I usually don't understand what I'm reading. Of course I have no claim to being a poet either. But, I think I understood this piece and I'm not sure why. For me the 'hide in the style' seemed to be a switch between hide and ride, making this piece a joy ride.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2013