Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

"Innocent Beginnings"
Was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well And flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020

Many thanks for your affirmations, Dr. Ricky.

How did you respond to the final paragraph? What emotions came up for you? When and why have you used the Guardian Angel Prayer?

text = Even if you were not raised by a Roman Catholic mother as I was, you might want to recite the Guardian Angel Prayer (p. 18) at bedtime during the period when you are reading about our dangerous love story. Who knows? In so doing, you might discover. . . .

Comment from Bill Pinder

Excellent

Very interesting and well written story that expresses clearly your attraction to the lady and your interactions with her. Why did you say that it is a forbidden love? Is there another chapter to the story that are waiting for? Thanks for sharing. Bill

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020

I'm glad you were puzzled by "forbidden love." This a deliberate disjunction in the narrative that keeps the reader on edge until it is resolved. Is this permitted? Is this required by effective story telling?

What do you say?

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020

PS: I will be uploading two new chapters for the next three days. Your insights are invaluable. Stay with me if you can. ~Aaron