Mommy's Sunshine
You only think you're hiding your mood from them...20 total reviews
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow writer. Thank you for sharing your flash fiction, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Hello fellow writer. Thank you for sharing your flash fiction, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the review -- so glad you enjoyed little Robert.
Comment from Debbie Pope
Thank you for this feel good story. What an adorable little man on a mission. Your story takes me back to times when my children used to try to cheer me up. It's the best part of having children. You are surrounded by people who love you and want you to be happy. Thanks for taking me back.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Thank you for this feel good story. What an adorable little man on a mission. Your story takes me back to times when my children used to try to cheer me up. It's the best part of having children. You are surrounded by people who love you and want you to be happy. Thanks for taking me back.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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So glad you enjoyed little Robert's efforts - thank you for your review!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork
and presentation to
go with it.
-This story is well written
and pulls at the heart strings.
-Young Robert is such a
thoughtful, perceptive boy.
-He knows just what to do
to cheer his mommy up.
-I love how he collects
all of the lights, and
puts on light show.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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-Very nice artwork
and presentation to
go with it.
-This story is well written
and pulls at the heart strings.
-Young Robert is such a
thoughtful, perceptive boy.
-He knows just what to do
to cheer his mommy up.
-I love how he collects
all of the lights, and
puts on light show.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Oh, I'm so glad you enjoyed little Robert!! Thank you!
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You are very welcome. I don't see how anyone could not like him!
Comment from Susan Larson
Flash fiction produced by means of a flashlight! This is a very clever story that lit me up as I read it. I do relate to this because once when I was sick in bed one of my boys , about age 3, scraped the chocolate icing off a donut into a glass of water and presented it to me as chocolate milk to make me feel better. I'd give you a six if I still had one.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Flash fiction produced by means of a flashlight! This is a very clever story that lit me up as I read it. I do relate to this because once when I was sick in bed one of my boys , about age 3, scraped the chocolate icing off a donut into a glass of water and presented it to me as chocolate milk to make me feel better. I'd give you a six if I still had one.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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So glad you enjoyed sweet Charlie! Thank you for your review!
Comment from May 1
Oh, that's such a sad image. Aww... Robert is the sweetest little boy. All in all, I really enjoyed reading this heartwarming story. It's simply beautiful, wonderfully written.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Oh, that's such a sad image. Aww... Robert is the sweetest little boy. All in all, I really enjoyed reading this heartwarming story. It's simply beautiful, wonderfully written.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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So glad you enjoyed little Robert - thank you!!
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a cute short story about a little boy who is trying to please his mother. The explanatory note is helpful too. This is a respectable flash fiction contest entry.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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This is a cute short story about a little boy who is trying to please his mother. The explanatory note is helpful too. This is a respectable flash fiction contest entry.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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So glad you enjoyed little Robert's efforts - thank you so much!
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Author, it will be hard for many voters to not pick this piece, as entry of choice! Well written and a great theme.
I particularly admire that you can tap into a child's imagination to creat a story like this one.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Dear Author, it will be hard for many voters to not pick this piece, as entry of choice! Well written and a great theme.
I particularly admire that you can tap into a child's imagination to creat a story like this one.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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So glad you enjoyed little Robert's efforts - thank you so much!
Comment from Dancemom
This is a great entry for the flash fiction contest. This is well written and held my interest. This was cute how he tried to cheer up his mommy. What a sweet child! Great job and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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This is a great entry for the flash fiction contest. This is well written and held my interest. This was cute how he tried to cheer up his mommy. What a sweet child! Great job and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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So glad you enjoyed little Robert's efforts - Thank you so much!
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This is a precious and adorable story! I love the way this little boy does everything he can think of to cheer up his Mommy, and chase away her blues. "Inside sunshine" is something a little child would come up with. They really do connect so deeply with those they love.
I didn't find any errors. Beautifully written.
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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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This is a precious and adorable story! I love the way this little boy does everything he can think of to cheer up his Mommy, and chase away her blues. "Inside sunshine" is something a little child would come up with. They really do connect so deeply with those they love.
I didn't find any errors. Beautifully written.
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Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Oh, I'm so glad you enjoyed little Robert's efforts - thank you so much!
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You're very welcome! So sweet.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written and very sweet 70 Word Flash Fiction story you have penned for the writing prompt. You used great words and very nice imagery. Thanks for sharing. love, Teri
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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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This is a very well written and very sweet 70 Word Flash Fiction story you have penned for the writing prompt. You used great words and very nice imagery. Thanks for sharing. love, Teri
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Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Oh, I'm so glad you enjoyed little Robert's efforts - thank you so much!
