Envy
contest entry36 total reviews
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
The artwork captured my attention from the start the green colors made it more evil to me.
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem the color green brought out the evil within it.
your words are so true and it makes you wonder how a person could live with those feeling in side of them.
Thank you for sharing.
cookie
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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The artwork captured my attention from the start the green colors made it more evil to me.
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem the color green brought out the evil within it.
your words are so true and it makes you wonder how a person could live with those feeling in side of them.
Thank you for sharing.
cookie
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Miss Cookie,
Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated. Lots of love and Blessings...Portia
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Your very welcome. take are.
cookie
Comment from Sally Law
I hate this sin and I feel it even here on FanStory. Why can't we be happy when others succeed? It truly is the devil's tool.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the contest,
Sally xo
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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I hate this sin and I feel it even here on FanStory. Why can't we be happy when others succeed? It truly is the devil's tool.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the contest,
Sally xo
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Sally
This is indeed a terrible sin, I don't think we should envy anyone, we should always uplift and help one another and be happy when others succeed. But, I guess that's too much like right. Thanks so much for your review and comments.
Blessings my friend lots of love...Portia
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You describe envy so well here and jealously is such a destructive emotion and serves no purpose either. I loved your last line too, much enjoyed, good luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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You describe envy so well here and jealously is such a destructive emotion and serves no purpose either. I loved your last line too, much enjoyed, good luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Dolly,
Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated.
Blessings...Portia
Comment from Susan Larson
"Never envy anyone for who they are/Don't be like Satan, a fallen star..." ! Satan's envy of God's power was indeed the original sin! Then Adam and Eve followed with the same sin. Is envy the root of all evil? I LOVE the green that permeates your whole post. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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"Never envy anyone for who they are/Don't be like Satan, a fallen star..." ! Satan's envy of God's power was indeed the original sin! Then Adam and Eve followed with the same sin. Is envy the root of all evil? I LOVE the green that permeates your whole post. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thanks for your review and best wishes.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery writer. Using the green imaging to represent the envy that you write about is masterful. Your writing scheme is excellent and overall the poem paints a vivid picture of envy. Very well written. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Hello mystery writer. Using the green imaging to represent the envy that you write about is masterful. Your writing scheme is excellent and overall the poem paints a vivid picture of envy. Very well written. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thanks for your review and best wishes...
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you're welcome
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello anon, a well written good poem with perfect rhyme and rhythm throughout. Very well displayed with the appropriate green overall. Very suitable for a subject on jealousy - the green eyed monster. You used good metaphor here. Good end couplet, in rhyme and good advice. Well done - Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Hello anon, a well written good poem with perfect rhyme and rhythm throughout. Very well displayed with the appropriate green overall. Very suitable for a subject on jealousy - the green eyed monster. You used good metaphor here. Good end couplet, in rhyme and good advice. Well done - Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thanks for your review and best wishes...
Comment from Louise Michelle
You did a really good job with this writing challenge. Envy, in small degrees, is not such a bad thing. The problem is it can quickly turn into jealousy. A terrific presentation - it just popped off the screen. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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You did a really good job with this writing challenge. Envy, in small degrees, is not such a bad thing. The problem is it can quickly turn into jealousy. A terrific presentation - it just popped off the screen. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Lou,
Thanks for your review and very kind comments...
Comment from Gail Denham
Well done for this form. Definitely envy is a destructive emotion. And it drives some to wickedness, crime, greed. All those things come to mind. I think it's always something to guard against.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Well done for this form. Definitely envy is a destructive emotion. And it drives some to wickedness, crime, greed. All those things come to mind. I think it's always something to guard against.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thank you kindly for your review...
Comment from Minglement
What a great presentation for your Dark Emotions contest entry. Great artwork to accompany your word pictures. I'm wondering if at the end of your second line, you meant 'begin' to be begins to match the form of 'It' at the beginning of the line. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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What a great presentation for your Dark Emotions contest entry. Great artwork to accompany your word pictures. I'm wondering if at the end of your second line, you meant 'begin' to be begins to match the form of 'It' at the beginning of the line. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thanks so much for your review and for bringing the error to my attention.
Blessings...
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You are most welcome. Good luck :)
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You are most welcome. We are on the same page :) No deductions for the typo. Glad to help.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry reads well, Mystery Author. I like its presentation--the color scheme, the image, the formatting of lines, the rhymes, and the message. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
2nd line---I would add 's' to begin
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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Your contest entry reads well, Mystery Author. I like its presentation--the color scheme, the image, the formatting of lines, the rhymes, and the message. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
2nd line---I would add 's' to begin
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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thanks...
