Envy
contest entry36 total reviews
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
So very true. Envy is so destructive and makes people do things they might not if they weren't so self-centered. Sadly we all do this at one time or other, but never let it take over. Nothing good comes from it. It is a deadly sin. Well done and congrats on winning the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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So very true. Envy is so destructive and makes people do things they might not if they weren't so self-centered. Sadly we all do this at one time or other, but never let it take over. Nothing good comes from it. It is a deadly sin. Well done and congrats on winning the contest.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Thank you kindly for your review, very kind comments and the congrats, they are greatly appreciated...
Blessings.. Portia
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi this is an excellent write on envy, this bizarre trait that invades both the heart and the mind and makes you do things which you would not have done.
We are always at the mercy of it.
Very well written, clear and strong and with a genuine attempt to be strongly convincing.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Hi this is an excellent write on envy, this bizarre trait that invades both the heart and the mind and makes you do things which you would not have done.
We are always at the mercy of it.
Very well written, clear and strong and with a genuine attempt to be strongly convincing.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Benny,
Thank you kindly for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated...
Blessings...Portia
Comment from A. Willow Bends
I apologize that I am out of sixes. There is nothing I hate more that jealousy or feeling envy. THIS is such a wonderful piece. The rhyme, rhythm, flow is all there and the visual in green was a perfect choice for your words. Love the line in the first stanza about how it takes hold in your heart. How very true. THEN it spreads, doesn't it? Very creative and well done. GREAT JOB!
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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I apologize that I am out of sixes. There is nothing I hate more that jealousy or feeling envy. THIS is such a wonderful piece. The rhyme, rhythm, flow is all there and the visual in green was a perfect choice for your words. Love the line in the first stanza about how it takes hold in your heart. How very true. THEN it spreads, doesn't it? Very creative and well done. GREAT JOB!
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Thank you for such an outstanding review, your very kind comments and rating are greatly appreciated.
Blessings...Portia
Comment from Boogienights
Congradulations on your win. It's a very well written and true poem, about a real feeling that we have all experienced. I was in the contest too, bht if I wasn't voting for myself I would have voted for yours.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Congradulations on your win. It's a very well written and true poem, about a real feeling that we have all experienced. I was in the contest too, bht if I wasn't voting for myself I would have voted for yours.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Boogienights,
Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments and congrats, they are greatly appreciated.
Blessings...Portia
Comment from Dancemom
This is a well written poem on the dark emotion of envy. Your meter and rhyming pattern are well delivered. Congratulations on a well deserved win. Great job and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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This is a well written poem on the dark emotion of envy. Your meter and rhyming pattern are well delivered. Congratulations on a well deserved win. Great job and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Heather,
Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments and the congrats, they are greatly appreciated.
Blessings...Portia
Comment from Ogden
Your poem gives good advice, P.
Perpetrators of other sins may derive satisfaction from committing th.em, but no one ever gets pleasure from envy.
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Your poem gives good advice, P.
Perpetrators of other sins may derive satisfaction from committing th.em, but no one ever gets pleasure from envy.
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Don,
Thank you kindly for your review and comments, they are greatly appreciated.
Blessings...Portia
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You are most welcome, Portia.
Don
Comment from Bicpen
mmm ... I would like you to explain to me something about its construction ... I notice that in most lines it uses nine syllables and in a couple ten syllables. I was not of any real knowledge as to what this piece was in its form either its format. It could be quite possibly be a sonnet gone wrong it could be a quatrain gone wrong or even a ballad of some form all I can really see is that it has a rhyme scheme of AABB and varied syllable count ... if free-verse explain it to me. It is a reasonable idea with a good concept but its failings are as I have mentioned. The rhyme works but the simplicity of the lines word choice could be improved.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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mmm ... I would like you to explain to me something about its construction ... I notice that in most lines it uses nine syllables and in a couple ten syllables. I was not of any real knowledge as to what this piece was in its form either its format. It could be quite possibly be a sonnet gone wrong it could be a quatrain gone wrong or even a ballad of some form all I can really see is that it has a rhyme scheme of AABB and varied syllable count ... if free-verse explain it to me. It is a reasonable idea with a good concept but its failings are as I have mentioned. The rhyme works but the simplicity of the lines word choice could be improved.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Well my friend, it is called the pharp format of Envy, reflecting words carefully placed in my heart by God.
Thank you Kindly
Pharp
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poetry is more than just the words being placed in your heart even God in his being Father Son and Holy Ghost have form format rhyme and reason they also choose to deliver in colour and imagery rich and pure with the inquiry of hallowed ground ... all I am asking is that you try to develop and educate your poetry make it an art and enjoy it other than that it will just be A POEM.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your winning poem on envy is well-written and vividly descriptive. Many crimes--including murder--can be traced back to jealousy. The end lines are especially expressive.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Your winning poem on envy is well-written and vividly descriptive. Many crimes--including murder--can be traced back to jealousy. The end lines are especially expressive.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Janice,
Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated.
Blessings...Portia
Comment from karenina
The perfect "green with envy" background color for your poem. Envy is an emotion that leads us away from any growth or grace... I fount this little tidbit about envy and wanted to share it with you, as I agree with your words: "Aristotle defined envy as pain at the sight of another's good fortune, stirred by "those who have what we ought to have." Bertrand Russell said that envy was one of the most potent causes of unhappiness. Not only is the envious person rendered unhappy by his or her envy, Russell explained, but that person may also wish to inflict misfortune on others, in forms of emotional abuse and violent acts of criminality."----- All true, I think---but your poem says it so much better!--Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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The perfect "green with envy" background color for your poem. Envy is an emotion that leads us away from any growth or grace... I fount this little tidbit about envy and wanted to share it with you, as I agree with your words: "Aristotle defined envy as pain at the sight of another's good fortune, stirred by "those who have what we ought to have." Bertrand Russell said that envy was one of the most potent causes of unhappiness. Not only is the envious person rendered unhappy by his or her envy, Russell explained, but that person may also wish to inflict misfortune on others, in forms of emotional abuse and violent acts of criminality."----- All true, I think---but your poem says it so much better!--Karenina
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Karenina,
Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated.
Thanks for sharing with me words from Aristotle and Bertrand Russell. I agree with Russell 100%, I have seen with my own eyes how envy and jealousy have destroyed a family.
Blessings my friend...Portia
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I was reluctant to add that little essay for fear you'd think I was just "padding" my review...but, like you, I have experienced the familial destruction envy can bring and so opted to include it.---Thanks, Karenina
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Thank you, I am glad you added it.
Portia
Comment from Patty Palmer
That green monster, jealousy, comes creeping right along when you least expect it. It burrows deep in your soul if you don't realize it is happening. Sometimes it takes hard work to not allow yourself to give in to evil jealousy and be commended when you do. I agree never to envy anyone because you are better than that. Great job!
Patty
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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That green monster, jealousy, comes creeping right along when you least expect it. It burrows deep in your soul if you don't realize it is happening. Sometimes it takes hard work to not allow yourself to give in to evil jealousy and be commended when you do. I agree never to envy anyone because you are better than that. Great job!
Patty
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Patty,
Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated.
Blessings...Portia
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You're welcome!
Patty
