Fred and Thelma
You callin' me shabby?15 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ha, ha, ha, funny one - Good grief, Thelma, you hafta take all those pills?
Well, Fred, only if I want to keep livin'.
Oh. Well, maybe you shouldn't.
Very funny. You WERE being funny, weren't you? -
and then the chubby ducks. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
People tell me I'm a very funny guy.
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Ha, ha, ha, funny one - Good grief, Thelma, you hafta take all those pills?
Well, Fred, only if I want to keep livin'.
Oh. Well, maybe you shouldn't.
Very funny. You WERE being funny, weren't you? -
and then the chubby ducks. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
People tell me I'm a very funny guy.
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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thanks so much for reading and for your positive comments. Glad you liked it.
Comment from ESOSTINE
Quite humorous. The story kept me searching till I reached the second to the last line and couldn't stop laughing. One could imagine the mood of Thelma when Fred passed across the "shabby" message.
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Quite humorous. The story kept me searching till I reached the second to the last line and couldn't stop laughing. One could imagine the mood of Thelma when Fred passed across the "shabby" message.
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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thanks so much for your nice comments. Typical teasing banter between a h&W who enjoy each other's company.
I'm glad you liked it.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment from Jessica Bell
Oh, Fred and Thelma could have been my grandparents. Two people telling stories on the front porch. So cute. I love all dialogue stories, and this works well!
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Oh, Fred and Thelma could have been my grandparents. Two people telling stories on the front porch. So cute. I love all dialogue stories, and this works well!
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Thank you for reading and for your comments. I love couples who genuinely enjoy each other - which your grandparents obviously did.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Belated congrats, agaaain. I am struggling to catch up with the wealth of material: I'm 6 weeks' worth of "overwhelmed." Snappy banter--clever twist at the end. He got her good! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Belated congrats, agaaain. I am struggling to catch up with the wealth of material: I'm 6 weeks' worth of "overwhelmed." Snappy banter--clever twist at the end. He got her good! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 29-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Thanks, Liz. I love the picture. a cute, happy old couple.
Hope you catch up and enjoy the reading while doing so.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment from Gail Denham
Well - very cute story and you did it well. And funny too - I do appreciate humor. and isn't it like two long-married folks talking to each other. You captured that well
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Well - very cute story and you did it well. And funny too - I do appreciate humor. and isn't it like two long-married folks talking to each other. You captured that well
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Thanks, Gail.
Much appreciated!
pome lover
Comment from Y. M. Roger
If it won't, you just need to literally delete the whole line from the end of the previous 'talker' to the beginning of the next 'talker' and then manually type (not cut/paste): line return/entire speaking part that wasn't working/line return. It's done that to me before too. :/ :/
Nooooww... what a FUN offering for this contest!! ;) You see what I mean about your awesome wit!! ;) This is just wonderful, LSL -- can so see a number of couples having this 'conversation'...LOL! ;) :) Thanx for sharing, my friend and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
grief,Thelma, --> grief, Thelma,
wanted
to --> wanted to [unnecessary line return]
wouldn't
want 'em either. --> wouldn't want 'em either. [unnecessary line return]
them
look old. --> them look old. [unnecessary line return]
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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If it won't, you just need to literally delete the whole line from the end of the previous 'talker' to the beginning of the next 'talker' and then manually type (not cut/paste): line return/entire speaking part that wasn't working/line return. It's done that to me before too. :/ :/
Nooooww... what a FUN offering for this contest!! ;) You see what I mean about your awesome wit!! ;) This is just wonderful, LSL -- can so see a number of couples having this 'conversation'...LOL! ;) :) Thanx for sharing, my friend and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
grief,Thelma, --> grief, Thelma,
wanted
to --> wanted to [unnecessary line return]
wouldn't
want 'em either. --> wouldn't want 'em either. [unnecessary line return]
them
look old. --> them look old. [unnecessary line return]
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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Many, many thanks and also for the the help. weird line returns not intentional.
Been busy. May try one more time to fix. (may not) :<
cell phone and computer on the fritz, now have ex's cell phone that my daughter brought me - a Samsung - don't know how to do certain things on it. getting too old for all this stuff! may get that phone advertised for seniors. or maybe two cans and a string.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your contest entry, Pome Lover. It is a fun little conversation with good flow and interesting topic that is well-expressed.
This is a dialogue only contest. Your entry cannot include speech tags--such as she said/he replied etc. I believe it cannot have the names as you have written for each speaker. I suggest you delete the names asap. Maybe you can have a few lines where Fred & Thelma are discussing this that sets the scene or leads into this discussion. Then use the lines but leave off their names.. Respectfully, Jan.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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I enjoyed your contest entry, Pome Lover. It is a fun little conversation with good flow and interesting topic that is well-expressed.
This is a dialogue only contest. Your entry cannot include speech tags--such as she said/he replied etc. I believe it cannot have the names as you have written for each speaker. I suggest you delete the names asap. Maybe you can have a few lines where Fred & Thelma are discussing this that sets the scene or leads into this discussion. Then use the lines but leave off their names.. Respectfully, Jan.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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thanks! will do. ASAP
Katharine
Comment from Teri7
Now this is cute and funny dialogue you have penned for the dialogue writing contest. You used great descriptive words in your dialogue. I wish you the best in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Now this is cute and funny dialogue you have penned for the dialogue writing contest. You used great descriptive words in your dialogue. I wish you the best in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
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Comment Written 30-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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thanks, Teri.
I may start a Fred and Thelma Show and ask readers for their ideas of a funny topic they can talk about. Maybe. :)
Katharine - pl
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Oh that would be very fun to read and review on here. I can't wait to keep reading! love and blessings, Teri
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thanks!
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you are so welcome!
Comment from Therese Caron
Great dialogue. So true of people who have been together a long time - interrupting each other, going off on tangents, ruining a story by constantly asking questions during it. Very amusing and realistic. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Great dialogue. So true of people who have been together a long time - interrupting each other, going off on tangents, ruining a story by constantly asking questions during it. Very amusing and realistic. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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thanks! and they're comfortable with each other. enjoy each other.
Thanks for reading and for your good wishes!
Comment from judiverse
Great job with this contest entry, and best of luck. You really have a great dialogue only story. The characters are witty and pretty sharp for their age. It's clever the way Fred digresses in telling his story. The wooden duck bit is another humorous point. Funny bit about the duck being "distressed." The bit about the shabby chic is comical too. I don't know that you need to keep repeating the characters; names at the beginning, especially for a dialogue only story. judi
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Great job with this contest entry, and best of luck. You really have a great dialogue only story. The characters are witty and pretty sharp for their age. It's clever the way Fred digresses in telling his story. The wooden duck bit is another humorous point. Funny bit about the duck being "distressed." The bit about the shabby chic is comical too. I don't know that you need to keep repeating the characters; names at the beginning, especially for a dialogue only story. judi
Comment Written 30-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Oh, really? I don't need names? It would sure read smoother if I don't need them.
will check other entries.
thanks
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I hope you get this worked out. I really think the names are unnecessary. judi
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thanks. I took out the names and quotation marks.
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Did you check some other dialogue only stories to see how they did it? judi
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last time I checked, they didn't show any others down at the bottom. will check again.
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You're welcome. If this is a site-sponsored contest, they probably don't show the entries. judi
