Devil of a Monster
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Comment from royowen
The problem is I discovered, it doesn't matter who we are, there is always a monster lurking inside all mankind, the problem seems to be non-acceptance of that, if we know and admit, that is something that can't be overcome, and it depends on our ability to shackle this monster. Beautifully written my friend, stanzas mostly articulate 9 syllable lines. And aabb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
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The problem is I discovered, it doesn't matter who we are, there is always a monster lurking inside all mankind, the problem seems to be non-acceptance of that, if we know and admit, that is something that can't be overcome, and it depends on our ability to shackle this monster. Beautifully written my friend, stanzas mostly articulate 9 syllable lines. And aabb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
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Comment from Barbaraj1
You have written a good poem about what makes a monster. It takes being sly, one that causes discord, and rob you of your precious sole. This is a
good contest entry.
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You have written a good poem about what makes a monster. It takes being sly, one that causes discord, and rob you of your precious sole. This is a
good contest entry.
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Comment from Gail Denham
This attacking of the mind is a very real problem for many. The kids in school are "cyber-bullied" - that's ridiculous - why dont' they simply turn off their machines. but they're mesmerized.
Good poem to point out the monsters.
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This attacking of the mind is a very real problem for many. The kids in school are "cyber-bullied" - that's ridiculous - why dont' they simply turn off their machines. but they're mesmerized.
Good poem to point out the monsters.
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Comment from Sally Law
Wow. I've never been so sick for a sixer, mystery poet. This is absolute truth and warning in a poem. Expertly penned and illustrated to perfection. Hopefully, many will be read this and turn back from him and his ways.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally xo
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Wow. I've never been so sick for a sixer, mystery poet. This is absolute truth and warning in a poem. Expertly penned and illustrated to perfection. Hopefully, many will be read this and turn back from him and his ways.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally xo
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Comment from Therese Caron
I give sixes to poems I can feel. I don't know if you even realize how strong your third stanza really is. Spend enough time around "monsters" and you will find you are picking up some traits yourself that are hurtful to others. You have to fight to stay true to yourself. I use prayer for everything. This is a remarkable poem!
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I give sixes to poems I can feel. I don't know if you even realize how strong your third stanza really is. Spend enough time around "monsters" and you will find you are picking up some traits yourself that are hurtful to others. You have to fight to stay true to yourself. I use prayer for everything. This is a remarkable poem!
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Thanks so much for such an outstanding review, very kind comments and the six star rating. Have a wonderful and blessed day.
Blessings...
Comment from padumachitta
hello. a good poem for this monster of a contest. I wish you luck.
The rhyme pattern does not feel forced. And the theme is carried through.
It is a strong poem of universal appeal. Fit for any land and culture.
Therefore, I am not sure about the ending, as on a written level it takes the punch out of the poem(this is not about view) It is about what I think would strengthen the poem, the theme, to make it more universal and for all people to question the state of their 'soul' and ethics.
However, it is only a suggestion(I'm in a writing group where the leader, harps on and on about universal appeal...)
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hello. a good poem for this monster of a contest. I wish you luck.
The rhyme pattern does not feel forced. And the theme is carried through.
It is a strong poem of universal appeal. Fit for any land and culture.
Therefore, I am not sure about the ending, as on a written level it takes the punch out of the poem(this is not about view) It is about what I think would strengthen the poem, the theme, to make it more universal and for all people to question the state of their 'soul' and ethics.
However, it is only a suggestion(I'm in a writing group where the leader, harps on and on about universal appeal...)
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Thanks so much for your review and suggestion, it is greatly appreciated. Blessings...
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello anon, a very well written poem and a good entry to the contest. You have covered many aspects on the character of a monster - all of them referring to the human kind. Your rhyme is good, you cover a wide spectrum of the character of a monster. A good final rhyming couplet about salvation rounds off your interesting poem. Good Luck - Dorothy x
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Hello anon, a very well written poem and a good entry to the contest. You have covered many aspects on the character of a monster - all of them referring to the human kind. Your rhyme is good, you cover a wide spectrum of the character of a monster. A good final rhyming couplet about salvation rounds off your interesting poem. Good Luck - Dorothy x
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think some must be born monsters because so much is done to fellow human beings that couldn't possible be taught. Innocence is how most are born, it's just those few that keep slipping in. This is a really excellent contest entry for what makes a monster a monster. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx
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I think some must be born monsters because so much is done to fellow human beings that couldn't possible be taught. Innocence is how most are born, it's just those few that keep slipping in. This is a really excellent contest entry for what makes a monster a monster. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
A good choice of topic to use for the Monster writing prompt using Satan, the Devil, against faith as your salvation. Well told, and good luck in the contest,
cheers.
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A good choice of topic to use for the Monster writing prompt using Satan, the Devil, against faith as your salvation. Well told, and good luck in the contest,
cheers.
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I doubt this guy would have many friends or girlfriends as they will soon learn to move on, but these monsters do exist and I have met them! Wise words here, love Dolly x
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I doubt this guy would have many friends or girlfriends as they will soon learn to move on, but these monsters do exist and I have met them! Wise words here, love Dolly x
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