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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
What an great way to express a mountain of love or hate. Molehills are plenty around here in the fall. They uproot the grass or lawns, so we set traps. They just need to stop the digging; if they did they would live.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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What an great way to express a mountain of love or hate. Molehills are plenty around here in the fall. They uproot the grass or lawns, so we set traps. They just need to stop the digging; if they did they would live.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Thank you for the review:) Sometimes solutions seem so simple :)
Comment from Liz O'Neill
What a great theme. So original compared with the others. They say it is a sign of giftedness to think outside the box. I will be voting for this one. This will draw the reader in to reflect upon how they make mountains out of mountains and molehills out of mountains. Either way there is drama. We get so worked up about small things and love to minimize what needs to be attended to. This could serve as a cautionary tale without the reader acting consciously. Well thought out.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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What a great theme. So original compared with the others. They say it is a sign of giftedness to think outside the box. I will be voting for this one. This will draw the reader in to reflect upon how they make mountains out of mountains and molehills out of mountains. Either way there is drama. We get so worked up about small things and love to minimize what needs to be attended to. This could serve as a cautionary tale without the reader acting consciously. Well thought out.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Thank you! I am grateful for your support and kind words:)
Comment from phill doran
Hello to you
You have a very good idea here and the piece works well, but you need to address the fourth line - it is one syllable short ( the / choice / is / ours).
As I say, the idea here is very good, but as this is a contest, you'll be disqualified for the last line and that would be a pity.
If you reply once you have fixed the final line, I will refresh and revise my review.
I wish you well with your writing
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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Hello to you
You have a very good idea here and the piece works well, but you need to address the fourth line - it is one syllable short ( the / choice / is / ours).
As I say, the idea here is very good, but as this is a contest, you'll be disqualified for the last line and that would be a pity.
If you reply once you have fixed the final line, I will refresh and revise my review.
I wish you well with your writing
cheers
phill
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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Thank you-- just changed it--locally, I'd be laughed at for using
"our" as one syllable.
I appreciate your suggestion and your time very much:)
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"...it's always our choice..."?
I know syllables can vary from place to place, but I suppose if we all wrote what we heard It'd be impossible to measure : there has to be a standard.
Still, thanks for taking it on board - I have revised my rating - cheers, phill
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Thank you, again. I do appreciate the correction.
Comment from Peter Gardner
What a great thought! You put such meaning into these words of truth. We see everywhere we look people acting in such manner. Oh, that we would keep things simple. Well done!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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What a great thought! You put such meaning into these words of truth. We see everywhere we look people acting in such manner. Oh, that we would keep things simple. Well done!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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Thank you:)