Jagged
3 line poem29 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Bednar
Whew. So much is packed into this 3 line poem The ending doesn't really stop there as the reader wonder if they are still perfectly matched - and I am led to believe "no"
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Whew. So much is packed into this 3 line poem The ending doesn't really stop there as the reader wonder if they are still perfectly matched - and I am led to believe "no"
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Much appreciated.
Comment from dragonpoet
Seems like this is about how opposites attract or maybe people with problems willing to help each other smooth the jagged edges with
their love.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing
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Seems like this is about how opposites attract or maybe people with problems willing to help each other smooth the jagged edges with
their love.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing
dp
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
Comment from robyn corum
Gareth,
Congratulations on the well-deserved honors, recognition (and cash!) for this piece.
I love the content. Who among us has never had a relationship like this?
The presentation is just right: simple font, simple background, simple contrast. There is no need for an 'added' image to war with what you have already asked us to personally dredge up. *smile*
This qualifies as a perfect senryu in my book and I have to wonder if you plan to do anything with it. It is definitely (and easily) good enough for publication and off the top of my head, I would recommend sending it to Bottle Rockets (snail mail, though), Prune Juice, Failed Haiku (yes really), and ohhhh... and there is one more quick one... grrrrr...
BUT to be honest, this (imo) is really, realllly good so I might consider saving it long enough to look ahead to some of the bigger and more prestigious contests/ awards. There's a 'street' haiku contest I am thinking of specifically. Calendar contests are really cool though I think a lot of those (2021) are ending/ have ended.
You can check out many contests from the following website:
https://www.thehaikufoundation.org/calendar/calendar_contests.htm
[though I just realized they are not displaying the most recent update --again--grrrr....]
Oh!!! Frogpond! That was the final journal I wanted to mention.
Whew. So much babbling! And you probably already knew all this. If so, just overlook me.
I obviously loved your tiny three-lined poem. Thanks so much!!
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Gareth,
Congratulations on the well-deserved honors, recognition (and cash!) for this piece.
I love the content. Who among us has never had a relationship like this?
The presentation is just right: simple font, simple background, simple contrast. There is no need for an 'added' image to war with what you have already asked us to personally dredge up. *smile*
This qualifies as a perfect senryu in my book and I have to wonder if you plan to do anything with it. It is definitely (and easily) good enough for publication and off the top of my head, I would recommend sending it to Bottle Rockets (snail mail, though), Prune Juice, Failed Haiku (yes really), and ohhhh... and there is one more quick one... grrrrr...
BUT to be honest, this (imo) is really, realllly good so I might consider saving it long enough to look ahead to some of the bigger and more prestigious contests/ awards. There's a 'street' haiku contest I am thinking of specifically. Calendar contests are really cool though I think a lot of those (2021) are ending/ have ended.
You can check out many contests from the following website:
https://www.thehaikufoundation.org/calendar/calendar_contests.htm
[though I just realized they are not displaying the most recent update --again--grrrr....]
Oh!!! Frogpond! That was the final journal I wanted to mention.
Whew. So much babbling! And you probably already knew all this. If so, just overlook me.
I obviously loved your tiny three-lined poem. Thanks so much!!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2020
Comment from Spitfire
Great example of paradox. This made me think of young married couples of teens in love. That very imperfection of both persons keeps them together.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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Great example of paradox. This made me think of young married couples of teens in love. That very imperfection of both persons keeps them together.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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Many thanks. Good to hear from you. G
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a good one G for the three line poetry contest. Jagged edges that match perfectly would make for a perfect pair. The opening line is more pensive hinting that the edges don't quite meld. Much thought put into these few lines.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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This is a good one G for the three line poetry contest. Jagged edges that match perfectly would make for a perfect pair. The opening line is more pensive hinting that the edges don't quite meld. Much thought put into these few lines.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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Many thanks as always. G
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a very well written poem. No illustration, not many words and yet perfectly understandable. Jagged edges engage perfectly with other like jagged edges. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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This is a very well written poem. No illustration, not many words and yet perfectly understandable. Jagged edges engage perfectly with other like jagged edges. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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Much appreciated, Marilyn. G
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Jagged, has the right set up and finds that dangerous people with complicated lives often find a fitting friend.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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This 5-7-5, Jagged, has the right set up and finds that dangerous people with complicated lives often find a fitting friend.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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Cheers, Bill. G
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Awesome 3-liner because it's quite provocative... are we now so smooth that we don't notice one another or are we now worn-well and fitted such as a machine without passion or have those edges become more...? Loved it, G -- and it's perfect without a pic, makes the reader work for a conclusion! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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Awesome 3-liner because it's quite provocative... are we now so smooth that we don't notice one another or are we now worn-well and fitted such as a machine without passion or have those edges become more...? Loved it, G -- and it's perfect without a pic, makes the reader work for a conclusion! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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Many thanks Yvette. Hope you well. G
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written three-line poem about a relationship that was once jagged around the edges but it seemed to be a perfect match at the end of the day.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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A very well-written three-line poem about a relationship that was once jagged around the edges but it seemed to be a perfect match at the end of the day.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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Much appreciated, Sandra. G
Comment from Bichon
I have not read writing from you in a while! This one is fabulous. I love the contrast between the jagged edges and the idea of fitting perfectly. It really worked well.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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I have not read writing from you in a while! This one is fabulous. I love the contrast between the jagged edges and the idea of fitting perfectly. It really worked well.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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Yeah, I'm on a go slow at the moment. lol Too much work in the real world. Happy belated birthday! G