Comment from May 1

Excellent

That is quite an interesting view on life, wonderfully written. I think it fits the writing prompt perfectly. Also, I love the image you used for this one. All in all, I really enjoyed reading it.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020

Thanks much for your read and kind comments.

Comment from Liz O'Neill

Excellent

This poem has the most substance of all. I am voting for this one. This sounds like preparation for this lifetime or moving from one to the other. What doI want to learn in this lifetime. Who do I want to become? Then we work throughout our whole life to become what we aimed for 'til it is time to move on. Well expressed.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020

Thanks so much for your read and encouraging words. It seems voters do not like works that are "too philosophical" however, I will plunge on undeterred.

Comment from Pantygynt

Good

In this contest you are permitted to write poetry or prose. This is entered as poetry presumably free verse, but in point of fact it is simply prose split up into lines, which is not the same thing at all.

Typo here:
'It is our task to contruct the...' I think you mean construct here.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020

Thanks for the input. I will rethink and try to incorporate some poetic devices.

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

The first stanza settles the mood for the rest of the poem:"Our body and soul are united in a warm dark place
Then we are born into much a brighter but colder place
We enter a world of increasing personal responsibility
Where we must begin the process of our own becoming" thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020

Thanks for the read and review.