You Keep Me Warm
Firewood is heavy.30 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great presentation. I like the image you chose. With your well-chosen words, too, I can imagine the two of you relaxing and ?? in front of the fire. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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This is a great presentation. I like the image you chose. With your well-chosen words, too, I can imagine the two of you relaxing and ?? in front of the fire. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 24-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Thanks Jan lol
Comment from Teri7
This is a very sweet and well written 20 word poem you have penned about your husband and how he takes good care of you by bring in the heavy wood no matter the weather. This is so sweet and romantic. Beautiful words and imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2020
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This is a very sweet and well written 20 word poem you have penned about your husband and how he takes good care of you by bring in the heavy wood no matter the weather. This is so sweet and romantic. Beautiful words and imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 21-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2020
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Dear Teri thank you and I hope you are safe and well, God Bless you.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Nicely structured, visually appealing. I like the touch at the end where it appears as if signing off a letter with love. Blustery winter and warmth and comfort and lasting love are in common use--perhaps try something fresher? Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Nicely structured, visually appealing. I like the touch at the end where it appears as if signing off a letter with love. Blustery winter and warmth and comfort and lasting love are in common use--perhaps try something fresher? Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 21-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I love the artwork and the loving image that you are creating. I read your notes and I believe you are missing a bet by not including the words "my snowman" into your poem. You could delete any number of words, maybe winter (since it's clearly winter) and maybe heavy (since people know firewood is heavy). Anyway, I would do it:
On this blustery night,
you,
covered in snow . . .
my snowman,
carrying firewood.
bringing warmth and comfort
with
your lasting love.
Or maybe just title it My Snowman. It's a sweet poem. I enjoyed it a lot.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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I love the artwork and the loving image that you are creating. I read your notes and I believe you are missing a bet by not including the words "my snowman" into your poem. You could delete any number of words, maybe winter (since it's clearly winter) and maybe heavy (since people know firewood is heavy). Anyway, I would do it:
On this blustery night,
you,
covered in snow . . .
my snowman,
carrying firewood.
bringing warmth and comfort
with
your lasting love.
Or maybe just title it My Snowman. It's a sweet poem. I enjoyed it a lot.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Thanks Debbie, I appreciate your thoughtful review.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Laura,
You've written an excellent poem for the twenty word contest.
I can picture him coming through the door covered with snow.
In my younger days, that would have been me, too.
These days I stay inside and watch the snow fall.
Wonderful inclusion of the the warmth and comfort of love and the firewood.
Inviting picture to match.
Here's to Spring.
Good luck in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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Hello Laura,
You've written an excellent poem for the twenty word contest.
I can picture him coming through the door covered with snow.
In my younger days, that would have been me, too.
These days I stay inside and watch the snow fall.
Wonderful inclusion of the the warmth and comfort of love and the firewood.
Inviting picture to match.
Here's to Spring.
Good luck in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 08-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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Thanks Robert, Your thoughtful review is appreciated and I am waiting for spring as I am an avid gardener. We still have snow and no flowers in the garden until May.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Oh this is a lovely, sweet 20 word poem about your man that keeps you warm in the cold winter nights. Love the picture you've used, and enjoyed the read. Hood luck in the contest,
cheers.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Oh this is a lovely, sweet 20 word poem about your man that keeps you warm in the cold winter nights. Love the picture you've used, and enjoyed the read. Hood luck in the contest,
cheers.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Thanks Pearl!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I like how you manage to sneak in some romantic love in a very serious twenty words poem. Your husband it's a lucky fellow. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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I like how you manage to sneak in some romantic love in a very serious twenty words poem. Your husband it's a lucky fellow. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Thanks very much, Iza. ^_^
Comment from Gideon300
This is such a lovely scene. It always is comforting. I guess that's why so many movies recreated it. Your heart always goes Thump! Thump!
Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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This is such a lovely scene. It always is comforting. I guess that's why so many movies recreated it. Your heart always goes Thump! Thump!
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Thanks for your review and comments.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
What a precious poem! Your snow-covered husband framed at your front door must be the picture of comfort -- even more than the warm, cozy image you've chosen for your poem. He sounds like a strong guy who takes very good care of you. Obviously you love each other very much. May God bless you both.
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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What a precious poem! Your snow-covered husband framed at your front door must be the picture of comfort -- even more than the warm, cozy image you've chosen for your poem. He sounds like a strong guy who takes very good care of you. Obviously you love each other very much. May God bless you both.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much, and God bless you too.
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Thank you, too!
Comment from Bill Pinder
This is a great example of a poem that starts with a common chore of bringing in the firewood and expresses it in a creative way to add deeper meaning with your well chosen words. Thanks for sharing. Bill
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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This is a great example of a poem that starts with a common chore of bringing in the firewood and expresses it in a creative way to add deeper meaning with your well chosen words. Thanks for sharing. Bill
Comment Written 29-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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Thank Bill, I appreciate your feedback.
