Comment from emjaihammond

Excellent

To begin with, that art work is divine! I really was drawn by it's presence. The poem is hard for me to follow, but after reading it a couple of times I think I see where you are going. The author's notes are a must for me, but your words always flow beautifully. It just takes more than one pass on some pieces to know for sure I get what you are saying. I do like your work though. It always makes me think.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2013

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THANK YOU FOR HONEST REVIEW.

Comment from Black_Oxygen

Excellent

This poetry speaks of acknowledgement and surrender.
This piece makes the reader pause and think. The
attached photo is a befitting accent that enhances
the message. Thank You for your creation.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2013

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THANK YOU FOR APPRECIABLE REVIEW.

Comment from visionary1234

Average

Al, this one started off interestingly enough - I could see flashes of fascinating imagery and you obviously love words - but the abbreviated words didn't seem to have a point to them and I got tired of the "xeno" thing - too much repetition and something becomes a little contrived, yes? :)S

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2013

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Comment from Gungalo

Good

A very giving and tiaking write Al. I wish I could say I understand it but I don't. Some parts are very clear while others are not. Ahhhhh confusion plus.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2013

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THANKS

reply by Gungalo on 13-Apr-2013

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Comment from Ceallach

Excellent

Well Al, finally a poem that has some meat to it. Are you open to suggestions? I am curious because I believe this poem has real potential. I was able to feel this poem and to me that is a major improvement when considering all your other poems that I have read. Though I do not agree to the use of shortened words (rem - for remember) and words I have never seen before (xeno)- but if you insist on this they should be used sparsely. Maybe one word each poem till everyone gets the hang of your style. Just thoughts friend. I liked this one, really did. C~

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2013

Comment from marijmd

Excellent

Once again you have done a wonderful job in capturing your passion with words. You poem is nicely emotive and I can see where you want the reader to be headed.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2013

Comment from mauial

Poor

The shame about it is that this gets the "all time best" recognition that some really good writing doesn't get. When will you give us something of real substance?

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 Comment Written 12-Apr-2013

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Comment from steevie

Excellent

I am not really sure what's going on here but I have to say that the language is complex and that in its self is reason to read this over two, if not three times to fully appreciate the impact

steve

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2013

Comment from MM lives on :)

Excellent

Dear AL, it appears that some seek joy in trying to humiliate and belittle your style...it is a testamant of their own inadequacies...those who seek joy in others misery are henceforth miserable themselves. Perhaps I see prejudice as well in some and shame on them all that you scribve in metaphors. keep on going

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2013

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello to you Alcreator Litt Dear
I may be way off but I feel from what you said here--

I descry my limited days
onto the course bound
widely Thy sharpen
glistening my heart to sense the truth and
mirth of being prized,

is saying we should

press toward the mark for the prize of the high calling of God in Christ Jesus?

Gert

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2013