Oh Life!
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Comment from GracieAnn
I truly think you have abilities but have difficulty with the language. There are no rules of grammar in your poem. I come away bewildered and wonder what was said. I did find meaning in this phrase,"Thou envision to feel Thy illumination,
incessant care for my inclination as part of the job
endowed in my favor"
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I truly think you have abilities but have difficulty with the language. There are no rules of grammar in your poem. I come away bewildered and wonder what was said. I did find meaning in this phrase,"Thou envision to feel Thy illumination,
incessant care for my inclination as part of the job
endowed in my favor"
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
Comment from joann r romei
This was interesting, I enjoyed the spiritual positive aspect of it, the old english wording read easily, I liked the format as well, no errors noted.
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This was interesting, I enjoyed the spiritual positive aspect of it, the old english wording read easily, I liked the format as well, no errors noted.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
Comment from amahra
I love the originality of the writing. You are becoming quite an artist with your type of writing. Surely it is your signature. People will read your writings and immediately know it is you they're reading.
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I love the originality of the writing. You are becoming quite an artist with your type of writing. Surely it is your signature. People will read your writings and immediately know it is you they're reading.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
Comment from gazzagodbod
do tend to struggle to understand your work sometimes but liked this one the embracing of love pearls i found especially pleasing thank you gazza
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do tend to struggle to understand your work sometimes but liked this one the embracing of love pearls i found especially pleasing thank you gazza
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
Comment from justatuna
I liked this. Your poetry is difficult to understand, but there's nothing wrong with that. Mine is also sometimes difficult to understand. This flowed much better than some of the others and I found myself looking forward to the next line.
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I liked this. Your poetry is difficult to understand, but there's nothing wrong with that. Mine is also sometimes difficult to understand. This flowed much better than some of the others and I found myself looking forward to the next line.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
Comment from mrsmajor
I have tried to read some of your poems, and understand what you are saying..obviously you have something in mind when you are writing, but my problem is I now feel you write only for yourself, perhaps to see your words in print..
I love poetry and enjoy trying to capture the messages, the writer is trying to convey..it just does not work here..
Regards,
Victoria
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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I have tried to read some of your poems, and understand what you are saying..obviously you have something in mind when you are writing, but my problem is I now feel you write only for yourself, perhaps to see your words in print..
I love poetry and enjoy trying to capture the messages, the writer is trying to convey..it just does not work here..
Regards,
Victoria
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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THANKS
You're welcome!
Comment from JM daSilva
This poem is not for everyone, so I won't give you a bad rating because some people might enjoy mixing archaisms with modernisms. The war between logicians and poets has been raging since Plato and Aristotle argued with Heraclitus. I'm more of a logician, so everything has to carry morphemes.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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This poem is not for everyone, so I won't give you a bad rating because some people might enjoy mixing archaisms with modernisms. The war between logicians and poets has been raging since Plato and Aristotle argued with Heraclitus. I'm more of a logician, so everything has to carry morphemes.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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THANKS
Comment from TiffanyLeeBaldwin
This piece of work is amazing and I think you did a great job constructing this. Your vocabulary is beautiful and the emotion shines through.
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This piece of work is amazing and I think you did a great job constructing this. Your vocabulary is beautiful and the emotion shines through.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
Comment from Nebukadneser
Brilliant! Brilliant! Brilliant! What a lovely writ this is. The understanding of the giver of life as nirvana sets in and we understand, really understand for the first time and then the realization how prized you are, you discover your responsibilities to your creator the breather of life to understand!
You're a star.
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Brilliant! Brilliant! Brilliant! What a lovely writ this is. The understanding of the giver of life as nirvana sets in and we understand, really understand for the first time and then the realization how prized you are, you discover your responsibilities to your creator the breather of life to understand!
You're a star.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very deep and powerful poem about the progression through a spiritual life.I particularly like;
how quietly
Thou help me prized
the pride name in Thy grandeur
and I recall
my reporting dawn
leaving this mort' abode,
Great work with this~Debbie
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A very deep and powerful poem about the progression through a spiritual life.I particularly like;
how quietly
Thou help me prized
the pride name in Thy grandeur
and I recall
my reporting dawn
leaving this mort' abode,
Great work with this~Debbie
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
