Oh Life!
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Comment from WorstPoetic Reviewer
Great! What a devotion, commitment and appreciation! Such a free verse in such a declared cadences or style is superb and only a gifted poet can compose a great salutation to thou (God under His Grace that the poet is prized and he appreciates so clearly how all his hopes are fulfilled by God who has been taking care of such honest and sincere follower of God since The Maiden Day and such an experience reveals here and poet feels awe that such an experience of being prized by God will never be believed by anybody on earth for it is only a truth realized by the poet with the prize he desired and God offered and the poet says only such a true feeling will ever be realized or comprehended by a true soul). What a flow expressed so clearly, passionately by heart, I am sure this will bit all and win the contest for I have read a few. Let God offer the Prize through FS as the reward of such a gifted free verse in a complete sentence. AFRAID, NO SIX STARS WITH ME EVER!
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Great! What a devotion, commitment and appreciation! Such a free verse in such a declared cadences or style is superb and only a gifted poet can compose a great salutation to thou (God under His Grace that the poet is prized and he appreciates so clearly how all his hopes are fulfilled by God who has been taking care of such honest and sincere follower of God since The Maiden Day and such an experience reveals here and poet feels awe that such an experience of being prized by God will never be believed by anybody on earth for it is only a truth realized by the poet with the prize he desired and God offered and the poet says only such a true feeling will ever be realized or comprehended by a true soul). What a flow expressed so clearly, passionately by heart, I am sure this will bit all and win the contest for I have read a few. Let God offer the Prize through FS as the reward of such a gifted free verse in a complete sentence. AFRAID, NO SIX STARS WITH ME EVER!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2006
Comment from Margokatt
thank you for contributing some work! It is beautiful and I dare say, are we writing about the same thing? Your words are reminescent of divisions between cultures, but they are hidden cleverly by your poetic weave. . .do tell . . AC. . am I on the right track?? MK
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thank you for contributing some work! It is beautiful and I dare say, are we writing about the same thing? Your words are reminescent of divisions between cultures, but they are hidden cleverly by your poetic weave. . .do tell . . AC. . am I on the right track?? MK
Comment Written 27-Mar-2006
Comment from MelMil
Mostly I enjoyed reading your poem. I reread it several times to try and follow through where you were going - are you dying? The use of thou and thy is interesting and quite comforting. There are a few places where the words do not run as well as others, for example the stanza with 'job' in. You are brave to write such complex poetry. Well done.
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Mostly I enjoyed reading your poem. I reread it several times to try and follow through where you were going - are you dying? The use of thou and thy is interesting and quite comforting. There are a few places where the words do not run as well as others, for example the stanza with 'job' in. You are brave to write such complex poetry. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2006
Comment from Robbi
Talk about a run on sentence and then some. This then is how to do it. I wonder if you got away with it though, if you revealed all that you would in this form had you used but a few "." Here and there. LOL. Well done. Beautiful imagery. Robbi
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Talk about a run on sentence and then some. This then is how to do it. I wonder if you got away with it though, if you revealed all that you would in this form had you used but a few "." Here and there. LOL. Well done. Beautiful imagery. Robbi
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Comment Written 26-Mar-2006
Comment from grannyeri
Some interesting things mentioned here. Looks as if this is all one long run on sentence though. Might be better without any punctuation at all, rather than just commas. Find too much repetition of the word xen throughout the piece, especially at the beginning, incessant, prize, prized. Think this is about thanking someone for their help, as near as I can figure out.
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Some interesting things mentioned here. Looks as if this is all one long run on sentence though. Might be better without any punctuation at all, rather than just commas. Find too much repetition of the word xen throughout the piece, especially at the beginning, incessant, prize, prized. Think this is about thanking someone for their help, as near as I can figure out.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2006
Comment from Brantley88
This moves very well, but needs some clarification. I read it several times and liked most of the word usage, but the message did fade a bit. Since this is a contest entry, I think it could use a rewrite to hammer the message home more, as it were. A very nice start though.
Cheers,
Jim
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This moves very well, but needs some clarification. I read it several times and liked most of the word usage, but the message did fade a bit. Since this is a contest entry, I think it could use a rewrite to hammer the message home more, as it were. A very nice start though.
Cheers,
Jim
Comment Written 26-Mar-2006
