Comment from thechair

Excellent

I was surprized how long this was. I'm used to your short stuff. But damn, this could possibly be my favorite from you. Some killer stuff in there.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2006

Comment from BlackDove

Average

Okay I don't want to be rude or offend you I just don't understand it entirely. Parts I do understand but I don't get the piece as a whole. Probably me being stupid about poems but I'm really confused with the subject of the poem.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2006

Comment from Emily_69

Excellent

This was truly an interesting piece and I'm grateful you had the notes to refer to. This poem has taught me that even the unconventional can speak to people and be meaningful. It was hard to read at first but that is what free verse is--free to do what you will. The second and third tries were better. Thank you for opening my eyes to something new!!

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2006

Comment from TillMcCauley

Good

I feel if the reader has to refer to authors notes to understand a piece, the piece has missed the mark. It's words were poetic , true, but without specific meaning and understanding. It just didnt do it for me. Just my opinion :)

Till

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2006

Comment from Adora Bayles

Excellent

Alcreator: Webster was only a marginal help. Then I saw your daffynitions at the end. More baffle. Thou art a dumbration to my fuzzy brain. Yet, your poem has a certain colorful lilt. Thank you for the strange music.
Adora

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2006

Comment from mblundell68

Excellent

Prized;
The color, the ocean
The clouds, the days
The grandeur of it all
Very poetic, very revealing
and must I say, very healing

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2006

Comment from aBoxofBrokenCrayons

Excellent

One of the most unqiue poems I have ever seen. Seriously, I think you'll have an excellent chance at this contest. I love the free verse and thank God for your Author's Notes, haha.

Best of luck,
Paul-

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2006

Comment from trailblazer101

Excellent

descry my limited days
onto the course bound
widely Thy sharpen
glistening my heart to sense the truth and
mirth of being prized,
the lust of mine fulfilled under Thy governance,

It's a good write.
Makes one think that one could live forever.
Question: How long would Adam have lived if he'd never sinned?

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2006

Comment from Sandisan

Excellent

A good poem. I have to give you this one just on your word usage alone.
Great vocabulary. I really like the last line..but I see this is for Thy graced hearts to comprehend.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2006

Comment from EMB

Average

You know, there is such a thing as being too poetic. (Well, you can be "too" anything, for that matter.) But this is an example of being too poetic (in my opinion, of course.) In other words, what . . . the . . . heck . . . are you saying?

Oh, and I looked up "xen" and couldn't find it. What is it? Are you saying "strange" cloud? If so, why not say it?


This is truly a "xeno-poem."

Ed

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2006