Oh Life!
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Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend this is well written this poem has some much feeling going through the work building up to the ending I enjoyed well done regards Jill
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Yes my friend this is well written this poem has some much feeling going through the work building up to the ending I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very well written poem I don't think I like this one as much as the others though think this one is a bit to high brow for me thank you for sharing
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This is a very well written poem I don't think I like this one as much as the others though think this one is a bit to high brow for me thank you for sharing
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hello. Good flow in the attempt to read it as you advised with one sentence. I liked your use of Xeno as to denote strange and foreign. Xeno-phobia comes to mind and that I believe is part of the angle in your poem. Some are shunning out what is strange while others recognize the need to continue gracing the divine glory of Jesus as an insrument of the after-life. Cheers.
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Hello. Good flow in the attempt to read it as you advised with one sentence. I liked your use of Xeno as to denote strange and foreign. Xeno-phobia comes to mind and that I believe is part of the angle in your poem. Some are shunning out what is strange while others recognize the need to continue gracing the divine glory of Jesus as an insrument of the after-life. Cheers.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
Comment from Harlequin
A very well written piece of poetry that flows well with good rhythm, wonderful imagery.A very thought-provoking poem that I enjoyed reading very much.
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A very well written piece of poetry that flows well with good rhythm, wonderful imagery.A very thought-provoking poem that I enjoyed reading very much.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
Comment from Gloria ....
There is some stunning visual imagery here such as:
defiling my golden whitish embroidered azure,
the web of the ceaseless glow I do keep,
Which I read as a rebirth or a metamorphosis.
One thing that stood out as odd:
Thy cardinal rule ain't able to show Thy grace,
in my opinion the word 'ain't' stands starkly out of place within the literary context of this poem.
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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There is some stunning visual imagery here such as:
defiling my golden whitish embroidered azure,
the web of the ceaseless glow I do keep,
Which I read as a rebirth or a metamorphosis.
One thing that stood out as odd:
Thy cardinal rule ain't able to show Thy grace,
in my opinion the word 'ain't' stands starkly out of place within the literary context of this poem.
Gloria
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good professional review
Comment from Bill Schott
The myriad abbreviations are not known to me as a standard. I like that they are identified here, along with a couple of under used words like penumbra and adumbrate. This is becoming very Clockwork Orangesque in its dialect building.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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The myriad abbreviations are not known to me as a standard. I like that they are identified here, along with a couple of under used words like penumbra and adumbrate. This is becoming very Clockwork Orangesque in its dialect building.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from cutie
xeno--clouds....
what a good word that xeno-xen ;O)
different outlook and same message...i think all book giving same message with different style.
elephant eye in the picture ! huh?
giant blink of big soul!!! ;O)
thanks great poem try!!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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xeno--clouds....
what a good word that xeno-xen ;O)
different outlook and same message...i think all book giving same message with different style.
elephant eye in the picture ! huh?
giant blink of big soul!!! ;O)
thanks great poem try!!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS FOR THIS GREAT APPRECIATIVE REVIEW.
Comment from michaelrayholt
Wow. I would say that I like this poem, but it seems you've taken a bit too much poetic license with the nature of God. He's not a servant who does things for us; everything that exists is for His pleasure.
Also, I'm all for the introduction of new vocabulary into artistic works, but when you make up so many that the reader can't even tell what you mean by the surrounding sentences, you're trying too hard to be abstract and eccentric.
A good effort, but not yet a complete work. Keep trying! :)
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Wow. I would say that I like this poem, but it seems you've taken a bit too much poetic license with the nature of God. He's not a servant who does things for us; everything that exists is for His pleasure.
Also, I'm all for the introduction of new vocabulary into artistic works, but when you make up so many that the reader can't even tell what you mean by the surrounding sentences, you're trying too hard to be abstract and eccentric.
A good effort, but not yet a complete work. Keep trying! :)
Comment Written 24-Apr-2006
Comment from Phoenix Rysing
good job...well versed and flow easily throughout the piece...I noticed a few spags, but over all...good job...thanks for sharing....good job
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good job...well versed and flow easily throughout the piece...I noticed a few spags, but over all...good job...thanks for sharing....good job
Comment Written 24-Apr-2006
Comment from joelh605
Hello Alcreator,
With all the stars and reviews your poem has garnered, this dissident yawp can hardly matter; but if you're going to write something deliberately outside the realm of direct comprehensibility, what on earth is the point of including a glossary? That's one major disconnect; the second is that, rather than move us to feel a given emotion of perceive a given point of view or consider an argument, or a reaction, or receive an insight, all that meets me on the page is a jumble. I'm completely unable to find the handle, and while maybe that's just me, your reviews reflect the range of your readers as much as they do the range of your work :-)
Very kind regards, Gil Arend.
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Hello Alcreator,
With all the stars and reviews your poem has garnered, this dissident yawp can hardly matter; but if you're going to write something deliberately outside the realm of direct comprehensibility, what on earth is the point of including a glossary? That's one major disconnect; the second is that, rather than move us to feel a given emotion of perceive a given point of view or consider an argument, or a reaction, or receive an insight, all that meets me on the page is a jumble. I'm completely unable to find the handle, and while maybe that's just me, your reviews reflect the range of your readers as much as they do the range of your work :-)
Very kind regards, Gil Arend.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2006
