Clear Vision
A '5-7-5' Contest Offering14 total reviews
Comment from May 1
Wow, I can't stop being impressed by the fact that you can say so much in just a few words and make it sound so beautiful. All in all, I really enjoyed reading this poem, it's awesome.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2020
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Wow, I can't stop being impressed by the fact that you can say so much in just a few words and make it sound so beautiful. All in all, I really enjoyed reading this poem, it's awesome.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2020
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These 'short forms' are perfect for a working person, May -- they can be done in a short amount of time since they require no rhyme or rhythm that always take me quite a while!! ;) :) Thanx for your review, ma'am, and have a great day! ;) Yvette
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Clear Vision, has the right set up and suggests that first we must look at the person in the mirror to see an evil doer. That mirror is disgusting by the way.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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This 5-7-5, Clear Vision, has the right set up and suggests that first we must look at the person in the mirror to see an evil doer. That mirror is disgusting by the way.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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LOL!! ;) :) Thanx for the review and that smile this morning, Bill - take care out there!! ;) Yvette
Comment from pome lover
well, that's one I think could be taken several ways. hmmm
It's not always easy to spot?
Open mind and clear vision makes it easier?
the accuser better look within her/him self?
Did I get it right, teach?
pome
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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well, that's one I think could be taken several ways. hmmm
It's not always easy to spot?
Open mind and clear vision makes it easier?
the accuser better look within her/him self?
Did I get it right, teach?
pome
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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The goal was the second one there... although, I suppose you're right, it could be interpreted a number of different ways.... so, whatever works for you, my lady!! ;) :) LOL! Thanx again, for all your time - means a lot!! ;) :) Yvette
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I like this art, but the poem itself of course is what we're reading. I see hard C alliteration with 'Confronting' and 'clean' as an amazing little sandwich form here. It's the kind of line that would also lend itself to a longer poem, if so desired, later on.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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I like this art, but the poem itself of course is what we're reading. I see hard C alliteration with 'Confronting' and 'clean' as an amazing little sandwich form here. It's the kind of line that would also lend itself to a longer poem, if so desired, later on.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Thanks much!!
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon
Very, very good. A complete (and interesting) thought in such a small format.
It reads like the best aphorisms - i.e. something your mother always said...
A busy contest, because of teh small/short format, but I expect you will do really well with this.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Hello Anon
Very, very good. A complete (and interesting) thought in such a small format.
It reads like the best aphorisms - i.e. something your mother always said...
A busy contest, because of teh small/short format, but I expect you will do really well with this.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Many thanks!
Comment from Sugarray77
This well written verse is very thought provoking and the artwork is a very good choice to draw the reader back to the point. Well done and I wish you good luck.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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This well written verse is very thought provoking and the artwork is a very good choice to draw the reader back to the point. Well done and I wish you good luck.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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Many Thanks!
Comment from arman khan
Very beautiful little poem. A little philosophical. No doubt , evil is everywhere, but confronting an evil is quite difficult and different, she presents the idea in a very simple way. Symbolically the poem reflects that consciousness is necessary to be alive to confront an evil. Mirror has different interpretation in literature and lights the selflessness of a person. Great poem, great idea.
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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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Very beautiful little poem. A little philosophical. No doubt , evil is everywhere, but confronting an evil is quite difficult and different, she presents the idea in a very simple way. Symbolically the poem reflects that consciousness is necessary to be alive to confront an evil. Mirror has different interpretation in literature and lights the selflessness of a person. Great poem, great idea.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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Comment from Katelynn Magee
I absolutely love this! Such a strong message depicted in just 11 words. The fan art included matches perfectly with the 5-7-5. Wish you the best of luck with the contest
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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I absolutely love this! Such a strong message depicted in just 11 words. The fan art included matches perfectly with the 5-7-5. Wish you the best of luck with the contest
Comment Written 17-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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Many thanks!!
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is kind of a spooky poem which reminds me of the book "The Portrait of Dorian Gray," where the painting aged along with his evil deeds. It is an excellent contest entry and the image is a fitting complement.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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This is kind of a spooky poem which reminds me of the book "The Portrait of Dorian Gray," where the painting aged along with his evil deeds. It is an excellent contest entry and the image is a fitting complement.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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Many thanks!!
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
Oh yes indeed! Wow! Simply wow! The way you managed to convey such a deep message in mere 3 lines and fewer syllables speaks volumes about your writing skills. I have a feeling already that this will be a winning entry. I certainly will be voting for this one!
Yes, one can not look to the outside before facing and wiping out the evil that exists within! Well done
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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Oh yes indeed! Wow! Simply wow! The way you managed to convey such a deep message in mere 3 lines and fewer syllables speaks volumes about your writing skills. I have a feeling already that this will be a winning entry. I certainly will be voting for this one!
Yes, one can not look to the outside before facing and wiping out the evil that exists within! Well done
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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Many, many thanks!!
