Green Eyes
Mirroring my deep desire54 total reviews
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a charming write in its gentle reference to sensual desire - flawless in its warm musing and adherence to the prompt. The presentation is mesmeric in its entirety...
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In my opinion, a charming write in its gentle reference to sensual desire - flawless in its warm musing and adherence to the prompt. The presentation is mesmeric in its entirety...
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Eve, thank you for the validation.
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You are very welcome...Eve
Comment from Janet Foor
Perfect artwork to compliment your well written 5/7/5 poem. Green eyes is a delightful poem about something you love.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
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Perfect artwork to compliment your well written 5/7/5 poem. Green eyes is a delightful poem about something you love.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
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Janet, thank you.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery writer. You did a nice job on meeting the requirements of a 5 - 7 - 5 poetry style. you also did a good job with content in completing your idea. Good luck in the contest.
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Hello mystery writer. You did a nice job on meeting the requirements of a 5 - 7 - 5 poetry style. you also did a good job with content in completing your idea. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Thanks for good wishes.
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You're welcome
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Thanks for good wishes.
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You're welcome
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You're welcome
Comment from zlp22
Great picture. I do not think that green is as popular as having blue eyes.Good luck in the contest. The color of one's eyes is the first thing that people notice. .Good short poem that says alot.
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Great picture. I do not think that green is as popular as having blue eyes.Good luck in the contest. The color of one's eyes is the first thing that people notice. .Good short poem that says alot.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
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Thank you yes green eyes only 2% in the world.
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Thank you yes green eyes only 2% in the world.
Comment from Raul1
I think that this poem has a very good chance of winning the contest! Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest!
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I think that this poem has a very good chance of winning the contest! Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Raul, thanks.
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You're welcome
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting and well written 5-7-5 poem you have penned for the 5-7-5 writing prompt about green eyes. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, Teri
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This is a very interesting and well written 5-7-5 poem you have penned for the 5-7-5 writing prompt about green eyes. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Teri, thank you for your review, comments and blessings!
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon
Ambiguously interesting. Do her eyes 'reflect' (i.e. throw back at you) your desires, which you are 'projecting' (so, she could have little or no interest at all, but you can see yourself in her eyes) OR (hence the ambiguity), do here eyes 'mirror' your desires i.e. she feels the same way too?
A big difference in the real world.
I will assume that if she allowed you so close that you could see that deeply into her eyes, it was because she feels the same desire - so I anticipate a three-line poem on "decorating the baby's room" in a couple of months.
I wish you well with this.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Hello Anon
Ambiguously interesting. Do her eyes 'reflect' (i.e. throw back at you) your desires, which you are 'projecting' (so, she could have little or no interest at all, but you can see yourself in her eyes) OR (hence the ambiguity), do here eyes 'mirror' your desires i.e. she feels the same way too?
A big difference in the real world.
I will assume that if she allowed you so close that you could see that deeply into her eyes, it was because she feels the same desire - so I anticipate a three-line poem on "decorating the baby's room" in a couple of months.
I wish you well with this.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Well Phill, my FS friend I can honestly say it is that later. She did marry 37 years ago. Our greatest achievement was three do-overs to the baby's room decor. LOL
Comment from padumachitta
hi
super picture and poem to go with it. And the way the words flow is good, something about the feel of them it works for me, good luck in the contest
Keep those eyes open:-)
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hi
super picture and poem to go with it. And the way the words flow is good, something about the feel of them it works for me, good luck in the contest
Keep those eyes open:-)
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Alchera
I love green eyes.
The poem has been well fit and set within the "I love writing prompt contest" structural rules counting syllable senryu format and narrative story lined content. Will the writer's desire ever become true? Good job
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I love green eyes.
The poem has been well fit and set within the "I love writing prompt contest" structural rules counting syllable senryu format and narrative story lined content. Will the writer's desire ever become true? Good job
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Alchera, thank you for the validation and good wishes.
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Always welcome!
Comment from Minglement
Wow lovely imagery in your words and the artwork you chose. I've always been fascinated by green eyes. Nice entry for the contest. I have no suggestions for improvement. Good luck in the contest.
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Wow lovely imagery in your words and the artwork you chose. I've always been fascinated by green eyes. Nice entry for the contest. I have no suggestions for improvement. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Minglement, thank you for the validation and good wishes.
