Felix and other Friends
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "juno and prince"All About Our Pets and Other Animals
6 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Cass, this is wonderful. Descriptive, interesting, fun and distressing all at the same time. I had no idea that the beautiful peacock was such a tough bird to handle. Sounds like the two parrots we had at one time who were totally unhandleable even though my husband built them their own spacious aviary and we doted on them. A terrific write filled with humor and nuance. Great job. A sixer if I had one. Marilyn
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Cass, this is wonderful. Descriptive, interesting, fun and distressing all at the same time. I had no idea that the beautiful peacock was such a tough bird to handle. Sounds like the two parrots we had at one time who were totally unhandleable even though my husband built them their own spacious aviary and we doted on them. A terrific write filled with humor and nuance. Great job. A sixer if I had one. Marilyn
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Dear Marilyn, Thank yo for your review and the five stars. The problem with the peacocks was of my own making. I ought to have realized they needed more than just plain back yard fencing to keep them from wandering, and living lives of mayhem and mischief.
When they left my care they went to a country property with lots of other peacocks to keep them company. They were lovely though and I enjoyed having them for the six months they lived with me.
Cheers Cass
Comment from Scarbrems
It's a fun story with some great elements in it. Peacocks are wonderful birds to use as your main characters, and you've really given them personality. I'd only say that you 'tell' rather than 'show' at bit too much. I realise it's a bit difficult with birds because they can't reveal events in dialogue, but if they interacted with people more, you could get round that. One other small thing, I've always been taught not to start a sentence with 'suddenly'. This is all just suggestions, I did enjoy your imaginative story, and I'm hoping these really are your birds and you'll give us more of their adventures.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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It's a fun story with some great elements in it. Peacocks are wonderful birds to use as your main characters, and you've really given them personality. I'd only say that you 'tell' rather than 'show' at bit too much. I realise it's a bit difficult with birds because they can't reveal events in dialogue, but if they interacted with people more, you could get round that. One other small thing, I've always been taught not to start a sentence with 'suddenly'. This is all just suggestions, I did enjoy your imaginative story, and I'm hoping these really are your birds and you'll give us more of their adventures.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Dear Friend, Thank you for your review and the five stars. The peacocks were real alright. Their presence in my life for that six months has given me some of my most enduring memories.
There are other stories to tell about the peacocks. All entertaining, so I probably will regale you with other of their doings. cheers Cass
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
So much fun! And I'm getting paid too! Such humor throughout and vivid description. I love---I'll have your feathers for dusting...evidence of peacock onslaught. Cheers right back at you. LIZ
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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So much fun! And I'm getting paid too! Such humor throughout and vivid description. I love---I'll have your feathers for dusting...evidence of peacock onslaught. Cheers right back at you. LIZ
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Dear Liz, Thank you for your review and the five stars. The peacocks' exploits do have an amusing side to them, especially when recounting them to an appreciative audience. But, the little perishers nearly drove me frantic with their escapades until I acknowledged that peacocks weren't like chickens and meant for back yards with easily hopped fences. It was then that I arranged for their removal to a large country property. Mostly fun while it lasted
Cheers Cass
Comment from Shirley McLain
I always wanted peacocks but after reading your story, I think I have changed my mind. You did an excellent job keeping those birds on track. Keep writing and stay healthy. Shirley
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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I always wanted peacocks but after reading your story, I think I have changed my mind. You did an excellent job keeping those birds on track. Keep writing and stay healthy. Shirley
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Dear Shirley, Thank you for your review and the five stars. My mistake was in attempting to keep them confined in an ordinary back yard. They had come from a place where the fences were 8ft high and they had coops for them. Still it was fun. While it lasted and I could keep up with them, that is. cheers Cass
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Nice story and I laugh reading it, even if for you was not so funny. I guess beauty comes with a price and goes hand in hand with vanity. I like how innocent they look after mischief :"I knew then they would return to the back yard via a bolt hole under the house and re-appear near the back door as innocent as sparrows looking for crumbs."
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Nice story and I laugh reading it, even if for you was not so funny. I guess beauty comes with a price and goes hand in hand with vanity. I like how innocent they look after mischief :"I knew then they would return to the back yard via a bolt hole under the house and re-appear near the back door as innocent as sparrows looking for crumbs."
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Dear Iza, Thank you for your review and the five stars. They would adopt a faintly incredulous expression as if to say"You can't be serious. We didn't have anything to do with this. What cheek!!" While their claw marks were all over the ruined garden bed or the chicken food was scattered across the shed floor, while the chooks were still shut in their coop. They were fun days, but I certainly earned my rest at night. cheers Cass
Comment from Fonda Little
Mistakes I found, "With those two little terrors ,he'll need it.", change it to, "With those two little terrors, he'll need it".
"They weren't going to come home the way they had gone.That was too much like obedience and that", put two spaces after the period so it reads, "gone. That was too much".
This story reminds me of my mother's friend who also had peacocks, they were troublemakers as well and she told me once that they flew all the way to a different county and my mom's had to drive all the way there to get them!
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Mistakes I found, "With those two little terrors ,he'll need it.", change it to, "With those two little terrors, he'll need it".
"They weren't going to come home the way they had gone.That was too much like obedience and that", put two spaces after the period so it reads, "gone. That was too much".
This story reminds me of my mother's friend who also had peacocks, they were troublemakers as well and she told me once that they flew all the way to a different county and my mom's had to drive all the way there to get them!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Dear Friend, thank you for your review and the five stars. Your corrections are glaringly obvious when they are pointed out to me, so thank you for that. The only way to keep peacocks from flying is to trim their wings. I did it.Once!! It seemed barbaric and I felt as if I was maiming them, so I put up with the neighbours' complaints for as long as I could before sending them to a property in the country .
He started a business with selling peacocks and other exotic birds and was going to breed from the two he took from me.A happy end to the story I am glad to say cheers Cass
