Haunted house
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Comment from BeasPeas
This is excellent. This is a topic that needs to be kept before the public. Sad that this continues to happen. Your Ciquain is powerfully worded in just a few lines. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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This is excellent. This is a topic that needs to be kept before the public. Sad that this continues to happen. Your Ciquain is powerfully worded in just a few lines. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Thanks so much Marilyn. Glad you liked it
Comment from Minglement
I love the feel of this contest entry and accompanying artwork. You tell a chilling story in so few words. A sad story, to be sure. No fancy big words, no elaborate imagery, just an artfully told horror story . Ooooh, I loved it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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I love the feel of this contest entry and accompanying artwork. You tell a chilling story in so few words. A sad story, to be sure. No fancy big words, no elaborate imagery, just an artfully told horror story . Ooooh, I loved it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Thank you.
You are very welcome.
Comment from RShipp
I believe you have followed all the requirements of a cinquain.
My favorite phrase: "where she now lies battered and buried beneath the floorboards" WOW!!!! I was not ready for that! I was trying to figure out what your picture had to do with the poem... and WHAM! Loved it!
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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I believe you have followed all the requirements of a cinquain.
My favorite phrase: "where she now lies battered and buried beneath the floorboards" WOW!!!! I was not ready for that! I was trying to figure out what your picture had to do with the poem... and WHAM! Loved it!
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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So glad you like it. Many thanks
Comment from Michele Harber
This is a well done Cinquain, meeting the required line and syllable counts while also telling an unnerving story that could easily be expanded and entered into a horror story contest. Meanwhile, good luck in the Cinquain vote.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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This is a well done Cinquain, meeting the required line and syllable counts while also telling an unnerving story that could easily be expanded and entered into a horror story contest. Meanwhile, good luck in the Cinquain vote.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Many thanks.
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Thanks Michele
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You're welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, this is a strong and powerful write! An abused woman now haunts the house she once inhabited, a chilling tale here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Oh my goodness, this is a strong and powerful write! An abused woman now haunts the house she once inhabited, a chilling tale here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Thanks Dolly. X
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Thanks Dolly. X
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Cinquain about haunting a house where the victim was murdered and buried is something that happens often. The myrdered victim will not rest until the body is found and properly buried.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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A very well-written Cinquain about haunting a house where the victim was murdered and buried is something that happens often. The myrdered victim will not rest until the body is found and properly buried.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Thanks Sandra.
Comment from Susan Larson
When I read the title I certainly wasn't expecting to be whammied with something like this! You have a wonderful way with words here and perfect picture. Wish you'd entered this in a contest so I could vote for you!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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When I read the title I certainly wasn't expecting to be whammied with something like this! You have a wonderful way with words here and perfect picture. Wish you'd entered this in a contest so I could vote for you!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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You can. It is in the cinquain poetry contest. Thanks Susan.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Cinquain Poem writing prompt.
This verse tells a grim tale of someone buried beneath the floor and haunting.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the Cinquain Poem writing prompt.
This verse tells a grim tale of someone buried beneath the floor and haunting.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Many thanks
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This is very well written: scary and creepy, for sure, but also with a sense of poetic justice, for this is the place where she was brought to pain, to tears and finally, to death. Hearing it, one wishes that the one who abused her still dwells there to feel the vengeance of her spirit. While I do not believe in such phenomena, I feel the tragedy and horror of her betrayal and the need for vengeance she might want to wield, if she could. The picture works well with the poem.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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This is very well written: scary and creepy, for sure, but also with a sense of poetic justice, for this is the place where she was brought to pain, to tears and finally, to death. Hearing it, one wishes that the one who abused her still dwells there to feel the vengeance of her spirit. While I do not believe in such phenomena, I feel the tragedy and horror of her betrayal and the need for vengeance she might want to wield, if she could. The picture works well with the poem.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from May 1
Wow, this sure is creepy, I love it. The way you wrote this works rather well to make the reader imagine the situation clearly. Also, the picture fits perfectly with the tone of the poem. All in all, quite an enjoyable read.
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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Wow, this sure is creepy, I love it. The way you wrote this works rather well to make the reader imagine the situation clearly. Also, the picture fits perfectly with the tone of the poem. All in all, quite an enjoyable read.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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So pleased you like it. Many thanks
