Aiona's Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 76 "Sailing Weather"Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.
5 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Aiona,
The words and artwork give images or just the opposite of the words.
This is definitely not sailing weather, unless you want to sink the boat.
I hope this does well in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
Aiona,
The words and artwork give images or just the opposite of the words.
This is definitely not sailing weather, unless you want to sink the boat.
I hope this does well in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Thanks, Joan! It is gusting 50 knots right now where I live. No sailing for me. :(
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No problem, Aiona. Definitely not.
Joan
Comment from susand3022
Hi Aiona, I'm really beginning to see YOU in your poems. :) The sailor that can't get herself on the water has to be contented by the sight of the waves and the sound of her windchimes. Bummer... LOL :)
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
Hi Aiona, I'm really beginning to see YOU in your poems. :) The sailor that can't get herself on the water has to be contented by the sight of the waves and the sound of her windchimes. Bummer... LOL :)
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Yup. It's cathartic. Thanks for the review, Susan.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
wind whipped
windchimes
from my window seat
whitecaps wave at me wildly
to R.S.V.P.
This contest entry is spot on and your wording with the RSVP is very cleverly done. My smile of the morning
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
wind whipped
windchimes
from my window seat
whitecaps wave at me wildly
to R.S.V.P.
This contest entry is spot on and your wording with the RSVP is very cleverly done. My smile of the morning
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Thank you, Barb. :)
Comment from Mackenzie Schmidt
Your Poem Sailing Weather fit the qualification for the five line poem. The picture greatly elevated the poem. I cant see any which this poem could be improved.
It Was Very Well Done, Good Lick with the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
Your Poem Sailing Weather fit the qualification for the five line poem. The picture greatly elevated the poem. I cant see any which this poem could be improved.
It Was Very Well Done, Good Lick with the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Yeah.... that painting.... when you hit a good gust.... that's exactly how it looks! Great painting. I'm guessing bunkie has sailed before. Thank you for the review.
Comment from Alex Rosel
Oh, the is a lovely 5 line poem. You employ alliteration to to emphasize the wind and waves theme {thumbs up}.
Best of luck with the competition judging {smiles}.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
Oh, the is a lovely 5 line poem. You employ alliteration to to emphasize the wind and waves theme {thumbs up}.
Best of luck with the competition judging {smiles}.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Thanks for the review. I was wondering if I was waxing overboard with the alliteration. I guess not!