Comment from RShipp

Excellent

Thanks for an entertaining and education tale about the plight of the honey bee. I enjoyed it.

My best friend form college is a bee-keeper. I know there is a special name for his occupation/passion, but I forgot it and I didn't take the time to google.

I hope we have stopped the use of enough of the dangerous pesticides (finding the necessary replacements for such cures) so that soon, bees will flourish.

If not, one of the smallest of creatures cause the downfall of many of the world's largest of creatures.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020

Your words ring true I forgot to add pesticides to the plight and the problems.
Thanks,
Ricky

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

A story about bees and the tribulations they are suffering because the changes in nature patterns. thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2020

Thanks I just cleaned up an edited it but the final part won't be till tomorrow.
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Comment from Wabigoon

Excellent

Hi Ricky--
Good effort Lots of "mistakes" or "spag," what ever you want to call it. But, I think your, seeming stumbling into this "fairy tale" is absolutely on track. Do the work necessary to "clean it up." Eliminate mistakes and, cripes, all the quotation marks -- what are they supposed to signify? And you have something, something important.

Best
Wabigoon/Jeff

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2020

Thanks Jeff I just cleaned up an edited but the final part won't be till tomorrow.
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Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Wow! So, time travel and bees.... in New Jersey! ;) A wonderful offering that is not only entertaining but provides a unique view of bee farming and the 'state' of bees in our country! ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2020

Thanks Yvette.
I just cleaned up and edited this but the final part won't be till tomorrow.

Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante

Excellent

This is a great subject to educate children about: the disappearance of our honeybees. I like that you have an introduction by a time-traveling Annie Oakley, Sharpshooter.

I know you mentioned that you dictate your text, so I guess the grammatical or spelling errors will be handled by an editor or proofreader, if and when you go to publication.

These lines had me a little confused:
"We can see candy worrie that we may be forced to move our many colonies."

I'm sure it was a transcription error, but the meaning was somehow lost -- except for the part about having to move their colonies which I can see would be a huge problem.

I applaud your effort to bring this issue to the attention to young and developing minds!

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2020

Thanks and it's funny how you talk about my transmission normal remco problems.
since I'm transmitting on a cell phone I can't see the spell check it's too small with for my vision.
I do have two large dictionaries but I only usually use them reference for the editor's note for the meaning of an important words.
As a number to Strathmore and number three Covington's who's who world rank Rider and in addition men's a rank Me Above genius in the literal world I do create my own words by the way you would be surprised to see auras and graphical issues in my work.
Many many times a year on fanstory I've been criticized by basically women who chastise that issue and take the Stars away.
Not so much in my eyes as the way it's written it's more important the way it's presented.
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reply by Mary Kay Bonfante on 02-Jan-2020

Ricky, I hope you don't feel that I am criticizing your work. It is only that some things are a little hard for me to understand. I fully appreciate that you are using transmission equipment. I don't really know what Remco is, Covington or Strathmore. But I remain your friend and appreciate your work, not taking any stars away.
- Mary Kay