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Comment from Ulla
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Hi Bill, that is very good 5-7-5 poem about an old friend, acquaintance who have never been forgotten. How come Robert(Rabbi) Burns spring to mind? All best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2019


reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
    Hey, I just found a rad, rad roose. HNY
reply by Ulla on 01-Jan-2020
    Happy New year to you!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
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This is well done, and a cherished thought, with which we all can follow your example. I just wonder about the title. "Be Forgot" sounds, to me, like you want someone to be forgotten. Instead, your old acquaintance will never be forgotten. I suppose the title drew me in, to see what it was about. Perhaps, that is why you chose this title. I love the use of the word "blooming" in your mind. As if, it lay dormant, like a plant and began to bloom in your thoughts, in a positive remembrance of someone you never want to forget. Well written, and I love the artwork image you chose.
Take care, Jesse

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2019


reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
    I agree the title seems to imply the opposite of the content. I feel a need to keep it like it is. Thank you, Jesse, for the great review. Happy New Year. Bill
reply by Jesse James Doty on 30-Dec-2019
    Hi Bill.
    Go with the need. You're welcome. It was a pleasure to read and review your post. Happy new year to you, too.
    Jesse
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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This is a good 575, Bill. Your picture choice and well-chosen words match perfectly. Good job with the syllable count per line. Your words carry a great message, too. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2019


reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
    Thank you, Jan. Bill
Comment from Louise Michelle
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Oh, wow, you did such a good job with this short, short. Every word packed a punch. That's one of the strangest images I've ever seen. Is it just me or is that a skull surrounded by flowers. Well, I think it is and your words really complimented it well. Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2019


reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
    Thank you, Louise, for the terrific review. Happy New Year. Bill
Comment from susand3022
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Ahhhhh... When one looks back on the things that one should be Grateful for from years past... one should never forget The Dead. LOL ;) Very good!

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2019


reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
    Thanks, Susan, for reviewing this. Happy New Year. Bill
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Funny how - at the strangest of times - a memory of a old love will surface and catch us off-guard... even bringing up feelings that we'd long buried and forgotten, yeah? No, they never were forgotten, but yes, we do need them to stay forgot. Great offering for the day, Bill -- thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2019


reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
    Thank you, Yvette.
Comment from Teri7
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Bill, This is a very interesting and well written 5-7-5 poem you have penned. You used very good words and very interesting art work. I can relate to thinking of someone from the past just out of nowhere. Thanks for sharing. Happy New Year! Teri

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2019


reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
    Thank you, Teri. Happy New Year! Bill
Comment from nomi338
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From the ground man was taken and to the ground man will return. There is nothing wrong with this as the flowers need fertilizer to grow. Be careful of how you treat dust as that dust could have come from someone famous and beloved.

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2019


reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
    Thanks, nomi. Happy New Year!
Comment from damommy
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This is certainly the time of remembrance. This time of year encourages more than any other. So much happiness to look back on, but some sadness in losing loved ones and friends. You summed it up beautifully.

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2019


reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
    Thanks, Yvonne. Happy New Year!
Comment from humpwhistle
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If not for the title, I can't be certain how you feel about the blooming acquaintance. The skull and the flowers seem to cancel each other out.
'Be Forgot' is a pretty strong statement.

I've got some acquaintances I'd like to erase, too.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2019


reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
    It?s tough knowing where all the bodies are buried ? metaphorically.