Exceptionalism in Real Life
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Comment from Liberty Justice
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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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SIX STARS 6******You really expressed your deep emotions and opinions in this writing. Your words so detailed and thought provoking. Why did you stop writing? Read review mine also. www.liberty justice lolol liberty justice
Comment Written 28-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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I had a 68 day problem on this site with Tom Ens.
He accused me of cutting and pasting reviews which I told him I could not do that on a cell phone.
And, I don't know how to paste and cut.
As a result I was supposed to be blocked 5 to 7 days and it turned into months!
I wrote a letter.
(the address listed was not viable so it was returned)
I called their company.
(the 800 numbers some site for mortgage assistance and the other 609 number since they are out of supposedly Aberdeen New Jersey would not work with my cell phone)
I even opened up a second account to try and communicate since I couldn't on my original account because I would no agree!
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Which by the way is against the rules which cause more problems.
Finally, after they wish me a Merry Christmas,
Tom told me he corrected the problems 2 hours ago.
I told him to completely erase the second account.
I can't get back into the original count because of the second!
Which they finally unrestricted.
Ricky
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OMG WOW! Glad you're ok.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Your writing is very heartfelt and profound, but fairly cynical and somewhat disjointed. Some of it resonates with me, as it seems that you are a Bible believing Christian, as I am, but I don't know how many people will be persuaded of your ideas (and of the truths they contain) as they are currently written.
"And, for each and every tick of the Clock, another hopeless Fool, falls victim to another addiction!"
I would take care calling addicts "hopeless fools." They may have done foolish things to reach that point, but the designation is void of sympathy, and there may be grieving family members of lost addicts among your readers.
In this paragraph, I think you are missing a word, where indicated by the blank line:
Maybe the sky is really falling?
And if so then perhaps it's our ______ because we are all, 'Chicken Littles?'
As for 9/11 being planned by disadvantaged terrorists, I would be careful with that, too. I went to a high school for gifted students, yet there was no way my family could afford to send me to an Ivy League college. I was rebellious for a time, but didn't grow up to become a terrorist. Many people lost loved ones in the 9/11 attacks; others suffered diseases after working around Ground Zero, and while the idea of the Ugly American may have some validity, nothing justifies what the Muslim terrorists did.
"Well today?
They're just rodents captured in a trap called walk Disneyland or World!"
What is "walk Disneyland"? (I think you can spell out "Disneyland or Disneyworld.")
Are the lines
"Love thy mouse?" and
"Thou shaft not kill with a mousetrap?"
intended to show that we're more concerned as a society with fictional characters than we are with real human beings, and their suffering?
I think I got that with a careful reading, but it wasn't obvious, at first.
The artwork you have chosen is beautiful. The general themes you are emphasizing are worthy ones: we need to be less shallow, more accountable, more compassionate to those in need, less greedy and selfish and we need to worship God, who alone deserves it. I hope you will advance well in the continuation of your writing.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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Your writing is very heartfelt and profound, but fairly cynical and somewhat disjointed. Some of it resonates with me, as it seems that you are a Bible believing Christian, as I am, but I don't know how many people will be persuaded of your ideas (and of the truths they contain) as they are currently written.
"And, for each and every tick of the Clock, another hopeless Fool, falls victim to another addiction!"
I would take care calling addicts "hopeless fools." They may have done foolish things to reach that point, but the designation is void of sympathy, and there may be grieving family members of lost addicts among your readers.
In this paragraph, I think you are missing a word, where indicated by the blank line:
Maybe the sky is really falling?
And if so then perhaps it's our ______ because we are all, 'Chicken Littles?'
As for 9/11 being planned by disadvantaged terrorists, I would be careful with that, too. I went to a high school for gifted students, yet there was no way my family could afford to send me to an Ivy League college. I was rebellious for a time, but didn't grow up to become a terrorist. Many people lost loved ones in the 9/11 attacks; others suffered diseases after working around Ground Zero, and while the idea of the Ugly American may have some validity, nothing justifies what the Muslim terrorists did.
"Well today?
They're just rodents captured in a trap called walk Disneyland or World!"
What is "walk Disneyland"? (I think you can spell out "Disneyland or Disneyworld.")
Are the lines
"Love thy mouse?" and
"Thou shaft not kill with a mousetrap?"
intended to show that we're more concerned as a society with fictional characters than we are with real human beings, and their suffering?
I think I got that with a careful reading, but it wasn't obvious, at first.
The artwork you have chosen is beautiful. The general themes you are emphasizing are worthy ones: we need to be less shallow, more accountable, more compassionate to those in need, less greedy and selfish and we need to worship God, who alone deserves it. I hope you will advance well in the continuation of your writing.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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Thanks for your thoughts.
I caught the one typo corrected it supposed to be Walt not walk.
The purpose in the general approach that I was looking for is to show that intersect today's societies we still have a long ways to go.
It's true that the terrorist for 10 years planned 911 and even were accepted as citizens and learn to fly a plane before they approached basically stealing 2 major airlines traveling materials and hance crashing into the towers.
When it comes to addictions my very own daughter almost died as a heroin addict.
true these are touchy subjects but that is what I was looking for I was looking for reactions I was looking for comments this was also posted on Facebook.
I appreciate your comment and your concerns all the others that I received were all positive with 5 Star reviews.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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I appreciate your gracious response. Yes, "Walt Disneyland," that makes sense, I didn't realize it was a typo. Autocorrect can do terrible things to our writing, sometimes!
It was very unfortunate that the 9/11 terrorists were able to give us the slip in so many ways. I don't link it to our moral failures, but we were clearly too careless in our general approach to matters of security. That's when our government established the Department of Homeland Security, in an effort to avoid inter-agency communication problems.
I'm sorry you almost lost your daughter to heroin; I did lose a close family member and drugs were involved. Drugs are a scourge on our society, and we indeed have many social and moral ills to overcome. We are accountable for our actions and you are right about that.
I wish you the best in your writing.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow, Doc, you have certainly visited many if not all scourges that plague our current reality here... the context of 'Chicken Little' certainly makes those scourges more thought-provocation than not... :) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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Wow, Doc, you have certainly visited many if not all scourges that plague our current reality here... the context of 'Chicken Little' certainly makes those scourges more thought-provocation than not... :) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 28-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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Thanks.
And yes, I have had a few incidents similar to these writings in my life.
Ricky
