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Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "St. Louis Chapter 19 part 2"Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
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Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Barbara, I hope this review finds you well. I haven't been keeping up on Fanstory as much as I would like to, so it was good to get back into your story. Logan and Mac are some two of my favorite Fanstory characters. Good job as always and I'm sure I will enjoy playing catchup. On to the next chapter, have a great day!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Hello Barbara, I hope this review finds you well. I haven't been keeping up on Fanstory as much as I would like to, so it was good to get back into your story. Logan and Mac are some two of my favorite Fanstory characters. Good job as always and I'm sure I will enjoy playing catchup. On to the next chapter, have a great day!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from tfawcus
You're certainly managing to keep us guessing. No definite breakthrough here, but a few new clues to keep us guessing. It seems to me that the only two people who don't know they are a couple are Logan and Mac! LOL
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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You're certainly managing to keep us guessing. No definite breakthrough here, but a few new clues to keep us guessing. It seems to me that the only two people who don't know they are a couple are Logan and Mac! LOL
Comment Written 24-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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I think you're right. I wonder why that is. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This section of the chapter seems to emphasize Sidney and Mark more. Here is a revealing line: At the same time, Logan and McKenzie said, "We're not."
When there is a coincidence like that, it really isn't a coincidence, says this reader. Mark was pretty casual about being turned down, twice, technically. Just have to see what happens next!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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This section of the chapter seems to emphasize Sidney and Mark more. Here is a revealing line: At the same time, Logan and McKenzie said, "We're not."
When there is a coincidence like that, it really isn't a coincidence, says this reader. Mark was pretty casual about being turned down, twice, technically. Just have to see what happens next!
Comment Written 24-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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I think Mark sees the writing on the wall, but he will come into play later. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from LeannaP
if you ever need somebody to listen, I'm available." My favorite line. Its great that a lending hand and or an ear to listen was offered.
These moments create precious memories.
Happy holidays
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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if you ever need somebody to listen, I'm available." My favorite line. Its great that a lending hand and or an ear to listen was offered.
These moments create precious memories.
Happy holidays
Comment Written 23-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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They sure do. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from robyn corum
Barbara,
Fun chapter! I like the idea of adding a new 'love interest' to the mix. That should be entertaining to watch! hahahaha
Some notes for you:
1.) Logan stepped closer, knelt, and took her hands in his.
--> this seems a little weird when she's standing.
2.) Still holding onto one of Logan's hands she stood and led him into the den.
--> she was already standing and pacing
That's it. Nice and sharp writing and well done, as always. I enjoyed! Thank you!
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Barbara,
Fun chapter! I like the idea of adding a new 'love interest' to the mix. That should be entertaining to watch! hahahaha
Some notes for you:
1.) Logan stepped closer, knelt, and took her hands in his.
--> this seems a little weird when she's standing.
2.) Still holding onto one of Logan's hands she stood and led him into the den.
--> she was already standing and pacing
That's it. Nice and sharp writing and well done, as always. I enjoyed! Thank you!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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In my head I still had her on the couch. I have changed it. Thank you for the catch. My brain is non-functioning sometimes. LOL I appreciate the help.
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welcome!
Comment from judiverse
This part brings up some interesting possibilities. They've been (discussing Sidney, and to me he sounds like a prime suspect. Mark shows up unexpectedly. (Wouldn't he have just called?) Logan acts wary of him, and with good reason, as they had the run-in earlier. I'm wondering what connection he could have with Megan, though. Unless there's something we don't yet know about. Excellent chapter, and I like that Mac does a pretty good job of showing her strength despite the threats she'd received. judi
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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This part brings up some interesting possibilities. They've been (discussing Sidney, and to me he sounds like a prime suspect. Mark shows up unexpectedly. (Wouldn't he have just called?) Logan acts wary of him, and with good reason, as they had the run-in earlier. I'm wondering what connection he could have with Megan, though. Unless there's something we don't yet know about. Excellent chapter, and I like that Mac does a pretty good job of showing her strength despite the threats she'd received. judi
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Mark will play an important part later. I need him show up at the house. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome. Merry Christmas to you and family. judi
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Maybe Mark killed Megan, and now he's out to kill Mac... he's a serial killer, see? No? Well, I tried.
It's license plate <-- its license plate, no apostrophe
I have no idea what this is about?" <-- Delete question mark.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Maybe Mark killed Megan, and now he's out to kill Mac... he's a serial killer, see? No? Well, I tried.
It's license plate <-- its license plate, no apostrophe
I have no idea what this is about?" <-- Delete question mark.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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I made those corrections. Thank you for the catches.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this is a another fine chapter. Well, I think they somehow give out the vibes that they are a couple. It's a great new chapter and I'm looking forward to the next one. Merry Christmas! Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Hi Barbara, this is a another fine chapter. Well, I think they somehow give out the vibes that they are a couple. It's a great new chapter and I'm looking forward to the next one. Merry Christmas! Ulla:)))
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Why do they assume they are a couple? Because they soon will be!! lol. I think they might be onto something regarding Megan being pregnant. Now to find some evidence and get it sorted! Well done, Barbara, another very interesting part. Have a wonderful Christmas, and a successful 2020! xxx Sandra x
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Why do they assume they are a couple? Because they soon will be!! lol. I think they might be onto something regarding Megan being pregnant. Now to find some evidence and get it sorted! Well done, Barbara, another very interesting part. Have a wonderful Christmas, and a successful 2020! xxx Sandra x
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
As is often the case, Logan and Mac are the last ones to realize they are a couple. You write believable dialogue. That's not an easy task but you make it seem to be.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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As is often the case, Logan and Mac are the last ones to realize they are a couple. You write believable dialogue. That's not an easy task but you make it seem to be.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Thank you for the encouragement. I appreciate it.
