The Battle Begins
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Comment from RShipp
An enjoyable medieval-history/ magical dragon story.
I have read earlier parts and I am looking forward to your next installment.
The use of the trebuchet was a great touch.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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An enjoyable medieval-history/ magical dragon story.
I have read earlier parts and I am looking forward to your next installment.
The use of the trebuchet was a great touch.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter. I have a book balloon on this so you can catch up on some others if you like.
Comment from Patty Palmer
The story is quite active! The grammar is also good. My biggest hurdle when reading it was that I had no idea who or what was going on. Since this is a chapter of a book, in order to know who everyone is and who they are fighting and why I would need to go back and read the previous chapters. If I like what I've read, I might take the time to go back. If in the beginning, you could post a synopsis of what has happened in the last chapters, the reader could pick right up from there and continue on with the story. I've even seen some authors put a list of characters letting the reader know who they would be reading about in your book.
I think if I knew more preview the story would have made good sense to me. Your chapter here was full of excitement!
Patty
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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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The story is quite active! The grammar is also good. My biggest hurdle when reading it was that I had no idea who or what was going on. Since this is a chapter of a book, in order to know who everyone is and who they are fighting and why I would need to go back and read the previous chapters. If I like what I've read, I might take the time to go back. If in the beginning, you could post a synopsis of what has happened in the last chapters, the reader could pick right up from there and continue on with the story. I've even seen some authors put a list of characters letting the reader know who they would be reading about in your book.
I think if I knew more preview the story would have made good sense to me. Your chapter here was full of excitement!
Patty
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Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed the chapter.
Comment from Mistydawn
What a suspenseful post. Well-written, very interesting. You had me on the edge of my to the very end. I'm sure glad no one was harmed and hope they don't return. Great job.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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What a suspenseful post. Well-written, very interesting. You had me on the edge of my to the very end. I'm sure glad no one was harmed and hope they don't return. Great job.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Thanks. Glad I had you on the edge. I did my job.
Comment from damommy
Hurray for those dragons and dragoyles. They saved the day. They are beginning to learn the extent of their talents. I don't see how anyone can defeat them. Hopefully, they all stay safe. Please don't kill off any of the dragons.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Hurray for those dragons and dragoyles. They saved the day. They are beginning to learn the extent of their talents. I don't see how anyone can defeat them. Hopefully, they all stay safe. Please don't kill off any of the dragons.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Thanks for the six! Don't worry, I'm not planning anything bad for the dragons. They'll be okay.
Comment from Sallyo
A prefab weapon! I assume the word is Normal French. Sounds like something they'd come up with. I've been wondering how things were going with the dragons and Aaron and this was a particular satisfying chapter.
Dragoyle's turn.
Dragoyles' turn.
much to close.
much too close.
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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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A prefab weapon! I assume the word is Normal French. Sounds like something they'd come up with. I've been wondering how things were going with the dragons and Aaron and this was a particular satisfying chapter.
Dragoyle's turn.
Dragoyles' turn.
much to close.
much too close.
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Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Thanks. I'll fix that right now. Glad you enjoyed the chapter.
