Love Long Distance
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 " The Premonition - Chapter 16"A Wartime Romance
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Comment from Ricky1024
The promotion chapter 16 was a very well written piece.
I like all the attitude songs that you put at the end that helps with the I'm tired view of the Piece.
Thanks,
And Happy New Year!
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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The promotion chapter 16 was a very well written piece.
I like all the attitude songs that you put at the end that helps with the I'm tired view of the Piece.
Thanks,
And Happy New Year!
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 01-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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Hi Doctor Ricky! Thanks for stopping by to read and review Chapter 16 of Love Long Distance. Glad you fount it well written. Thank you for also mentioning the songs. Much appreciate the continued support. Chapter 17 has just been posted. Happy New Year from both of us! God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from damommy
I remember those days all too well. We were a Navy family living on the East Coast. Pax River. My husband was a diver, and I prayed every day he wouldn't be called. I lost family and friends in that war. I think its strange that two people had the same dream, but it's been known to happen.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
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I remember those days all too well. We were a Navy family living on the East Coast. Pax River. My husband was a diver, and I prayed every day he wouldn't be called. I lost family and friends in that war. I think its strange that two people had the same dream, but it's been known to happen.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
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Hi Yvonne! Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review Chapter 16 of Love Long Distance. We hope you come back for Chapter 17 which is almost completed and will be posted very soon. Thank you also for sharing about your Navy family. We wish you a wonderful New Year! God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Patty Palmer
There are lots of twists and turns in this story and I enjoy every minute! I am worried about the dream they both had. I hope that's all it was. your chapters are very well written and easy to read. I'll be watching for it.
Patty
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
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There are lots of twists and turns in this story and I enjoy every minute! I am worried about the dream they both had. I hope that's all it was. your chapters are very well written and easy to read. I'll be watching for it.
Patty
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
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Hi Patty! So glad you enjoyed this chapter! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing it. Glad you find our chapters are very well written and easy to read. Chapter 17 is just finishing up now and we'll have it posted very soon. Wishing you a Happy New Year! God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
BIll & Cathy
Comment from tfawcus
It looks as if you and Bill are having a lot of fun putting this co-authored work together. It has plenty of action, nice touches of humour and good dialogue between the characters. An enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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It looks as if you and Bill are having a lot of fun putting this co-authored work together. It has plenty of action, nice touches of humour and good dialogue between the characters. An enjoyable read.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Hi Tony! Oh, yes, we're having a lot of fun! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. We're glad you found it an enjoyable read. Also, thank you for your continued support. It means a lot to us! Chapter 17 is in the works and coming soon. Wishing you a wonderful New Year! God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This was quite the era before my time. Strong line here: We quickly descended the ladder, then dropped among the body parts on the ground. That is a stark, to the point way of describing a war-torn locale in the middle of attack. Not sure what to improve on for now.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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This was quite the era before my time. Strong line here: We quickly descended the ladder, then dropped among the body parts on the ground. That is a stark, to the point way of describing a war-torn locale in the middle of attack. Not sure what to improve on for now.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Hi CrystieCookie! We really appreciate you stopping by to read and review Chapter 16 of Love Long Distance. Thank you! Your continued support means a lot to us. Chapter 17 is already in the works (almost finished) and coming soon. Wishing you good health and happiness in the New Year. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Jan Anderegg
Another outstanding and wonderful chapter. You two just draw the reader right into your memories and this story. Loved it.
Looking forward to the next chapter. No errors noted or edits needed. Wonderful!
Jan
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Another outstanding and wonderful chapter. You two just draw the reader right into your memories and this story. Loved it.
Looking forward to the next chapter. No errors noted or edits needed. Wonderful!
Jan
Comment Written 28-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Hi Janilou! Thank you SO MUCH for the AWESOME six star rating and review! So glad you are enjoying our story, and you loved this chapter. A double "SALUTE!" We really appreciate your comments and continued support. Chapter 17 is in the works and coming soon. Wishing you a wonderful New Year! God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Jeffrey Ford
Amazing Work! You gave a great and graphic description of war. I could feel the intense battle by the way you described it. The characters that you created each have their own personalities and differences from each other. I like how you written the scene when Bill was shot and the premonitions that his family had while he was at war. It is very creative and well written.
I only saw one snag: Grandpa, Grandma and I were in front of the console TV watching Walter. You just needed to add a coma after Grand Ma.
Grandpa, Grandma, and I were in front of the console TV watching Walter
Great and amazing story!
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Amazing Work! You gave a great and graphic description of war. I could feel the intense battle by the way you described it. The characters that you created each have their own personalities and differences from each other. I like how you written the scene when Bill was shot and the premonitions that his family had while he was at war. It is very creative and well written.
I only saw one snag: Grandpa, Grandma and I were in front of the console TV watching Walter. You just needed to add a coma after Grand Ma.
Grandpa, Grandma, and I were in front of the console TV watching Walter
Great and amazing story!
Comment Written 25-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Hi Jeffrey! WOW! Thank you SO MUCH for the AWESOME six star rating and review! Your comments here are great, and we really appreciate the kind words and support. Thank you also for the comma suggestion. So glad you enjoyed this and found it to be an amazing story. Please continue to follow along; there's so much more to come! Chapter 17 is already in the works and will be posted soon. Happy New Year and God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very well done. Professional quality. Wish I had more sixes. This rings true as if it really happened, the mark of good writing. Merry Christmas to you and yours. :)
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Very well done. Professional quality. Wish I had more sixes. This rings true as if it really happened, the mark of good writing. Merry Christmas to you and yours. :)
Comment Written 24-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Hi Phyllis! So happy you stopped by to read and review Chapter 16 of Love Long Distance. THANK YOU! Your comments mean a lot to us! We're so glad you enjoyed this and found it to be very well done and of professional quality. Stay tuned--Chapter 17 is already in the works and coming soon. Thank you also for the Merry Christmas. We hope you had a nice Christmas, too. May this upcoming year be the best for you!
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from robyn corum
Hey, guys,
Nice chapter. I really, really cannot imagine what life would have been like for those poor soldiers in those horrible environments back then. OR for the gals who loved them. It was a terrible situation all around. I certainly never thought of them also having to deal with gators. YIKES.
A couple of notes:
1.) Stay brave and positive for him. That's the best we all can do right now.(")
2.) (")We'll keep him in our prayers for God to protect him,"
Super job --
Thanks!
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Hey, guys,
Nice chapter. I really, really cannot imagine what life would have been like for those poor soldiers in those horrible environments back then. OR for the gals who loved them. It was a terrible situation all around. I certainly never thought of them also having to deal with gators. YIKES.
A couple of notes:
1.) Stay brave and positive for him. That's the best we all can do right now.(")
2.) (")We'll keep him in our prayers for God to protect him,"
Super job --
Thanks!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Hi Robyn! Sorry for the delay in responding. Christmas took over! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. Also, for your continued support and great editing. Those darn quotation marks! The two that were missing have been added (thank you again!). So glad you enjoyed this. Chapter 17 is already in the works and coming soon. Wishing you a wonderful New Year! God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Sally Law
The was pretty harrowing. Not the gator being blown up. You can go at it all day here in Florida where we are overrun. In one lake nearby, there is reportedly 20,000! Yep. It is always the Vietnam war that stirs me, as I had a stepbrother who served as a Green Beret and died of Agent Orange exposure. He was a real sweetheart, too. He left five children behind at age 33. You story is well written as always, and we are holding on to see if Bil makes it back to Cathy and the baby.
Sending you both my best today as always,
Sally xoxo
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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The was pretty harrowing. Not the gator being blown up. You can go at it all day here in Florida where we are overrun. In one lake nearby, there is reportedly 20,000! Yep. It is always the Vietnam war that stirs me, as I had a stepbrother who served as a Green Beret and died of Agent Orange exposure. He was a real sweetheart, too. He left five children behind at age 33. You story is well written as always, and we are holding on to see if Bil makes it back to Cathy and the baby.
Sending you both my best today as always,
Sally xoxo
Comment Written 23-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Hi Sally! Again, we are so sorry about your stepbrother. Why do the good die young? Thank you so much for sharing, and thank you for reading and reviewing this chapter. Your continued support means a lot to us. We both extend our best to you, too--today and always. May this upcoming year be your very best! Stay tuned--Chapter 17 is in the works and coming soon. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
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You are welcome. I certainly will. Blessings to you both. xo