Family Ties Volume two.
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Comment from Bill Schott
This two-line poem, Every Word of God is Pure, lifts a little Proverbs out of the Bible and gives it a politically correct editing for the 21st century.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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This two-line poem, Every Word of God is Pure, lifts a little Proverbs out of the Bible and gives it a politically correct editing for the 21st century.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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MERRY CHRISTMAS BILL: Thank you for viewing and commenting on my poem. You are appreciated. You see it in an interesting way. again...thank you. God bless you, Bill. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A wonderful pic to go along with such an important Bible message.... I would suggest, perhaps, changing the she/he to 'they' as the slash takes away from the smoothness and even the impact of the message... ;) :) Thanx for sharing! ;)
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A wonderful pic to go along with such an important Bible message.... I would suggest, perhaps, changing the she/he to 'they' as the slash takes away from the smoothness and even the impact of the message... ;) :) Thanx for sharing! ;)
Comment Written 11-Dec-2019
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is short and sweet, yet contains a valuable message for raising our children wisely. The repeated use of "he / she" tends to take away from allowing the piece to have any poetic tone to it. I know you were trying to be politically correct, perhaps referring to the children should be a plural generalization like 'they' to make it flow better and still not offend any specific gender. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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This is short and sweet, yet contains a valuable message for raising our children wisely. The repeated use of "he / she" tends to take away from allowing the piece to have any poetic tone to it. I know you were trying to be politically correct, perhaps referring to the children should be a plural generalization like 'they' to make it flow better and still not offend any specific gender. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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MERRY CHRISTMAS MYSTIC ANGEL: Thank you for your helpful advice. I edited my poem by using the word, "they," and the flow of my poem ran much smother. Again...thank you. God bless you. Cordially: rhonnie69.
