Comment from emmaysavage

Excellent

I like this lovely poem. The form and the art fits with the content magically. Your third and last lines create a picture of the wonders of snowfall.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020

Emma

So pleased that my vision matched yours for this winter post. I thought it was a lovely poem too (-:

Mark

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Congrats on the your prize. Nice alliteration: winter wonders...flake flurries float...limited lifespan. Lovely picture--perfect accompaniment. Cheers. LIZ

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020

Liz,

I so appreciate your review and good wishes. My typical poetry style is 5-7-5, but I like to use letter-alliteration words whenever possible for my short style poems. With minimal words and syllables, I strive to convey a picture of what we may see outside our home. Longer verses are not in my poetry wheelhouse; reviews of the same are very limited (even for my FS friends).

Mark

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

The butterfly is an apt and imagainative metaphor for snowflakes. The artwork matches well. I love fairies.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020

Yo Dragon!

Of course, I am super pleased with the committee's vote, but do like your feedback you just shared about my poem as a metaphor.

Mark

reply by dragonpoet on 22-Feb-2020

You're welcome, Mark.
Joan

Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova

Excellent

How very true. Of course while those flurries have limited lifespans on their own, once they cluster together in groups they can last a long time. I'd say we should do the some as people, but whenever we get into groups, we cause all kinds of problems. Then again, so do flurries.

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020

So pleased with your feedback about my contest entry. I had to stretch my typical 5-7-5 format to enter the contest. (-;

Mark

Comment from rama devi

Exceptional

What wonderful artistic alliteration! I especially applaud the combination of consonance with alliteration of L and F, and the fine counterpoint effect of consonant S. The consonance of W in snowflake after winter wonder works well!
And then consonance of T in winter, float ad butterflies is also musically coherent. Well done!
Lovely presentation.
Nice atmospheric tone and imagery with a strong pivotal twist in the closing line, signifying impermanence. Well done.

Warmly,
rd

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019

RD,

Your review tells me you know a lot about creative writing and parsing my verse. I do like to routinely slip in alliterations into my short poems. (Long verses are not in my poetry wheelhouse.) The consonance you cited was not intentional, but I am so pleased you recognized the same. (-;

The pivotal twist is something I try to create in writing more traditional Haiku. But, it is hard to effectively do. Glad this one worked for you.

Wow, the extra star is just delicious icing on my dessert dish. THANK YOU!

Mark

reply by rama devi on 08-Dec-2019

Most welcome! :)

Comment from Michele Harber

Excellent

This is nicely done, Mark. I love your images, and the alliteration is excellent. Darn you and your skill at short poems!!! ;-) Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019

m

methinks my only forte is short stuff and I do
like to slip in alliterations (-;

thanks, as always, for your support of the same

m

reply by Michele Harber on 07-Dec-2019

My pleasure, as always. :-)

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

You have made excellent use of all syllables in this vividly descriptive,
beautiful piece. Alliteration and the simile are smoothly employed as
effective instruments of expression.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019

Janice,

I do appreciate your comments and review of this verse and others previously reviewed.

Thank you for your kind words.

Mark

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written five line poem about the snowflakes fluttering like butterflies around in the air, their limited lifespan make it all worthwhile to watch.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019

Sandra,

So pleased with your feedback and stars. Thank you!

Mark

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a beautiful entry for the 5 Line Poem contest.
The artwork is a lovely match as well.
Well done and good luck with the contest.
Sharon

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019

THANK YOU Sharon for your review and stars for this contest entry.

I am very happy with what I wrote and you reinforced my thought processes.

Mark

Comment from Mackenzie Schmidt

Excellent

Your poem flurries float like butterflies fits the 2-2-5-7-5 syllable. the name and image elevate the theme of the poem and it was well done.

good luck with the contest

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019

Thanks for your support for my entry Mackenzie! So pleased with your compliment. I expanded my normal 5-7-5 by four syllables for this posting (-;

Mark