A Word To The Wise Is Sufficient.
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Comment from papa55mike
What a wonderfully written poem, and I love the picture. Yes, weed seeds have many ways of traveling into your gardens. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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What a wonderfully written poem, and I love the picture. Yes, weed seeds have many ways of traveling into your gardens. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 29-Nov-2019
Comment from Pantygynt
Weeds are the bane of the gardeners life but many of them are quite attractive. A couple of suggestions here.
'Then they can turn to snowflake white,
and then like snow, take to drifting flight.' -- The two 'thens' in this short couplet do not sit very easily. I would suggest changing the second one perhaps so that the couplet could read:
'Then they can turn to snowflake white,
and (then)[so] like snow, take to drifting flight.
'Where their floating flying goes...
Driven by the wind...nobody knows? -- This couplet is not a a question but a statement, so a question mark is incorrect.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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Weeds are the bane of the gardeners life but many of them are quite attractive. A couple of suggestions here.
'Then they can turn to snowflake white,
and then like snow, take to drifting flight.' -- The two 'thens' in this short couplet do not sit very easily. I would suggest changing the second one perhaps so that the couplet could read:
'Then they can turn to snowflake white,
and (then)[so] like snow, take to drifting flight.
'Where their floating flying goes...
Driven by the wind...nobody knows? -- This couplet is not a a question but a statement, so a question mark is incorrect.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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HELLO PANTYGYNT Thank you for your suggestions. I edited as you said would make it better...and Yes...it is better. Again thank you. You are appreciated. God bless you. Cordially; rhonnie69.