The French Letter
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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
I had t laugh at his starchy pomposity as here he is free at last and on the verge of a warm bath and decent food and he's worried over how he will look to others as opposed to being simply grateful to be heading to a clean room with fresh sheets. SHAME on him LOL. You continue to keep us in suspense about Helen - I hope the gas are filled in soon. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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I had t laugh at his starchy pomposity as here he is free at last and on the verge of a warm bath and decent food and he's worried over how he will look to others as opposed to being simply grateful to be heading to a clean room with fresh sheets. SHAME on him LOL. You continue to keep us in suspense about Helen - I hope the gas are filled in soon. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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Thanks, Angel. I appreciate your review and comments. He?s a proper English gentleman! All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Pam (respa)
-An excellent chapter, Tony, that shows
the importance of friendship.
-I am so glad Ian is playing a major role
at this point in the story, and has been
a major support for Charles.
-I like the beginning, as Charles
is concerned about how he looks.
-But, Bisto came through, and
Charles is a new man!
-The detail you use to describe the clothing
that was set out and other arrangements
Bisto had made are very good.
-The ending section is very good, too,
as we learn why Alain was anxious to
sell the painting, and it takes us back
to how it all started with the letter!
-Well done.
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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2019
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-An excellent chapter, Tony, that shows
the importance of friendship.
-I am so glad Ian is playing a major role
at this point in the story, and has been
a major support for Charles.
-I like the beginning, as Charles
is concerned about how he looks.
-But, Bisto came through, and
Charles is a new man!
-The detail you use to describe the clothing
that was set out and other arrangements
Bisto had made are very good.
-The ending section is very good, too,
as we learn why Alain was anxious to
sell the painting, and it takes us back
to how it all started with the letter!
-Well done.
[Glitterfy.com - *Glitter Photos*]
Comment Written 27-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2019
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Thanks, Pam. I appreciate your comments and the sixth star. Not that I?m thinking of a sequel, but the nexus between Charles and Ian leaves an option open. All the best, Tony
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You are very welcome and deserving, Tony. It's always good to have an option!
Comment from Therese Caron
The story sounds fascinating, and of course I'm joining it very late as I just joined this website. The writing is very good and clear and leaves me with a lot of questions. Chapter 98 means I have missed a lot of chapters but I was still interested in the story. That indicates that the rating is very well done.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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The story sounds fascinating, and of course I'm joining it very late as I just joined this website. The writing is very good and clear and leaves me with a lot of questions. Chapter 98 means I have missed a lot of chapters but I was still interested in the story. That indicates that the rating is very well done.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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Thanks very much for your review, Therese, and welcome to the website. 'Ninety-eight' chapters is a bit of a misnomer. It just means 98 posts of between 1000-1500 words each. The story is reaching its climax, and I imagine quite a bit of cutting will take place during the final edit before submitting it to publishers.
I appreciate your interest and your kind comments.
All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Janilou
It's always a little difficult coming in at such a late stage in a story, but I enjoyed this chapter.
I love rosemary and jasmine, so your opening lines drew me right in to the story.
Question for you. What is a mocktail? Did you mean cocktail?
OMG Milk and 7-Up really does sound rather revolting! LOL
Nothing else to suggest or correct. I spent many years living in South Australia, and hope to have the opportunity to visit Fleurieu Peninsula in 2020 when we visit with friends there. :-)
All the best,
Jan
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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It's always a little difficult coming in at such a late stage in a story, but I enjoyed this chapter.
I love rosemary and jasmine, so your opening lines drew me right in to the story.
Question for you. What is a mocktail? Did you mean cocktail?
OMG Milk and 7-Up really does sound rather revolting! LOL
Nothing else to suggest or correct. I spent many years living in South Australia, and hope to have the opportunity to visit Fleurieu Peninsula in 2020 when we visit with friends there. :-)
All the best,
Jan
Comment Written 26-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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Pakistan is a Muslim country and alcohol free for the most part. Mocktail is a portmanteau word contracted from mock cocktail. A bit like a vegetarian eating ?not sausage?. If you do visit the Fleurieu, we?d be delighted if you had the time to drop by.
Thanks for the supportive comments.
All the best, Tony
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Tfawcus,
Nice piece of General Fiction!
Although I started it just today, yet I found it interesting due to your conversational Approach and lovely Style.
Lucid and matching the theme wording.
Smooth and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
The ending lines are noteworthy.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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Hello Tfawcus,
Nice piece of General Fiction!
Although I started it just today, yet I found it interesting due to your conversational Approach and lovely Style.
Lucid and matching the theme wording.
Smooth and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
The ending lines are noteworthy.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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Thanks for dropping by to review this chapter, RP. Glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate your supportive comments. All good wishes, Tony
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Tony, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
Another excellent chapter, Charles has more lives and escapes than a cat in a dog pound, and seems to recover very quickly from weeks of solitary in Pakistan, too.
Good to see Bisto and Kayla back. Somebody certainly has some great connections and influence.
While Charles might be starving, he might also need to go slowly.
The title seems to be reappearing with good effect. Maybe you should keep it.
It's also good to get back to the excellent batter between the characters.
Nicely done
Robert
Have a great, healthy Holiday. Hope everyone is well!
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Hello Tony,
Another excellent chapter, Charles has more lives and escapes than a cat in a dog pound, and seems to recover very quickly from weeks of solitary in Pakistan, too.
Good to see Bisto and Kayla back. Somebody certainly has some great connections and influence.
While Charles might be starving, he might also need to go slowly.
The title seems to be reappearing with good effect. Maybe you should keep it.
It's also good to get back to the excellent batter between the characters.
Nicely done
Robert
Have a great, healthy Holiday. Hope everyone is well!
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Thanks, Robert. Charles may not be as well as he thinks he is. We shall see. We?re nearing the end now and I imagine that most of what doesn?t tie in will eventually be axed. You?re very generous with your sixes. Appreciated! Al good wishes to both you and Pam for the holiday season. All well here. Tony
Comment from estory
So Alain ends up springing Charles after finally selling the painting because he needs the money to provide better care for his grandmother. Ah. It's also interesting to have Kayla and Helen both together in this plot now. It should lead to some conflict over Charles' romantic interests. But Kayla's drug days cast a shadow over all this. Why would Charles trust her here? Bisto's motives are also kind of unclear to me. Then there are the mysterious couple at the end of the chapter who Charles seems to half recognize. There's a lot of juggling going on in this one. careful to keep it orchestrated. The tension level is slipping a bit from those earlier chapters. estory
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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So Alain ends up springing Charles after finally selling the painting because he needs the money to provide better care for his grandmother. Ah. It's also interesting to have Kayla and Helen both together in this plot now. It should lead to some conflict over Charles' romantic interests. But Kayla's drug days cast a shadow over all this. Why would Charles trust her here? Bisto's motives are also kind of unclear to me. Then there are the mysterious couple at the end of the chapter who Charles seems to half recognize. There's a lot of juggling going on in this one. careful to keep it orchestrated. The tension level is slipping a bit from those earlier chapters. estory
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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You're right. Quite a bit of juggling, but I have a framework in mind for the ending. Thanks very much for your review and thoughts on this. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from royowen
So, some semblance of normality is being restored to Charles, he refreshes himself with a shave, a reasonable set of clothes, and a chance to eat and have a much needed drink of milk and seven-up. He's invited to dine with a couple, but politely declines. No one is sure where Helen is. Well done Tony. Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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So, some semblance of normality is being restored to Charles, he refreshes himself with a shave, a reasonable set of clothes, and a chance to eat and have a much needed drink of milk and seven-up. He's invited to dine with a couple, but politely declines. No one is sure where Helen is. Well done Tony. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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Many thanks for your review and plot summary, Roy. Appreciated as always. Tony
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Well done Tony
Comment from padumachitta
Hello. I have been away for a wile and have not read the rest of this, therefore can only comment on this chapter:-) I also am so rusty at grammar that I can offer no tips there!
I did enjoy the lively dialogue. It gave me a good feel for the characters, which is very good in a first 'meeting'.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Hello. I have been away for a wile and have not read the rest of this, therefore can only comment on this chapter:-) I also am so rusty at grammar that I can offer no tips there!
I did enjoy the lively dialogue. It gave me a good feel for the characters, which is very good in a first 'meeting'.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Thank you so much for dropping by to review this chapter. I very much appreciate your positive comments. All good wishes, Tony.
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:-)
Comment from lyenochka
I was impressed he wasn't raging with hunger more than his need to look proper. And that milk soda sounds hard to digest on an empty stomach. Glad that Bisto can see Charles' good forethought about the key.
Minor observations:
"deposit box with him, wasn't it?." (extra period here)
" painting and the letter establishing ownership and provenance." (These words seem to be oddly highlighted. I don't know how or why.)
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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I was impressed he wasn't raging with hunger more than his need to look proper. And that milk soda sounds hard to digest on an empty stomach. Glad that Bisto can see Charles' good forethought about the key.
Minor observations:
"deposit box with him, wasn't it?." (extra period here)
" painting and the letter establishing ownership and provenance." (These words seem to be oddly highlighted. I don't know how or why.)
Comment Written 24-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Thanks, Helen. I've had that highlighting problem once before. No idea what causes it. However, I went back into the advanced editor and highlighted the whole post with a white background. Hope that fixed it. Thanks, too for your sharp eyes spotting that extra period. All the best, Tony
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Yes! That fixed it! I wasn't sure if it's just something on my computer.
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Thanks for letting me know.