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Comment from BeasPeas
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This is a very good poem. "Be kind." Words to live by. I think that's the crux of the whole thing. Life is not a test, although we are tested by life's demands and circumstance. The trick is to make it come out the best way for everyone. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
    Thanks very much, Marilyn. Much appreciated :) Craig
Comment from MissMerri
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There is nothing to fault in this poem. The rhymes and meter are faultless. The philosophy expressed is one I can easily accept as far as this earthly life is concerned, and you have expressed it beautifully. The idea of kindness to all, animals and humans included, is a way of living I try diligently to adhere to. As you well know, I believe the spirit lives on beyond this short earthly sojourn, but if you are right and I am wrong, it does not alter the way of kindness, it seems to me. I have always appreciated your kind heart, even though I fear you have misunderstood mine. But your poem is perfect, and I enjoyed all of its perfection repeatedly. Thank you for sharing this outstanding work. MM

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
    Thank you for the wonderfully generous assessment, MM, and for the delightful rating. Both are very much appreciated. I totally agree with you on one point. The idea we only get one bite at the cherry doesn't preclude the need to behave with kindness towards others -- if anything, I'd argue it makes it all the more important. Thanks once again :) Craig
Comment from pome lover
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that is truly lovely.
Would that more people felt as you do.
The picture compliments your thoughtful verse - "soft and tender."
Kindness, civility and respect are hopefully qualities that will resurface in some of our young people if parents, teachers and school administrators who project it themselves.
very good.
pome lover

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
    Thanks so much for the kind and thoughtful comments, they are very much appreciated. We can always hope.
reply by pome lover on 22-Nov-2019
    you bet
    pome lover
Comment from Sharon Haiste
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I think this is an excellent verse for the Meaning of Life writing prompt.
Your verse is well written, well rhymed, and has a wonderful message.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
    Thank you very much for the kind wishes and much appreciated comments, Sharon.
Comment from Therese Caron
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I have taught my children since they were toddlers that the most important thing in the world is to be kind. Your poem is beautiful. The picture of Daniel in the Lions den really adds to your words.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
    Hi there. The picture actually depicts the story of Androcles, one of Aesop's fables, about an escaped Greek slave who does a good turn for a lion by removing a thorn from his paw. I can see, though, how it could easily be taken to be Daniel. Thanks so much for the very kind words, they are much appreciated.
reply by Therese Caron on 21-Nov-2019
    I know that story Also and it never even occurred to me. Both stories work so if anyone thinks of Daniel, you?re still OK.
Comment from mrsmajor
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12 lines of beautifully written poetry, using rhymed quatrain verses.
each line, each verse spoke of the meaning of life, in it's excellence and in it's simplicity...meter well established making for a smooth, and easily read poem, I saw no spag, and nothing I'd even begin to change...This was a joy to read, and I thank you for sharing your thoughts with us...Good luck in the contest, this is a very fine entry.

Warmly,
Victoria

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
    Thank you so much for the wonderful words of encouragement, Victoria, and for the delightful rating. Those, and your good wishes, are much appreciated.
reply by mrsmajor on 20-Nov-2019

    You're quite welcome, whoever you are...LOL...this was such a pleasure reading...6 stars for sure...
    Victoria
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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You did good job, Mystery Author, with your contest entry. I enjoyed reading it. Your lines/words flow smoothly with great rhyme and imagery. The picture is a good pairing with your thought-provoking words. Your two words at the end are good choices for all, but all don't hear them. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
    Thank you for the kind words, Jan. Not only do not all of us hear them, but I think it's fairly safe to say none of us always hear them. Still, they are something to aspire to. Most grateful.
Comment from Dawn Munro
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I wonder if the meaning of life is anything at all sometimes, if life just is, just exists, just because it happened. The older I get, the less I seem to know. But I do know I love this poem and I hope it wins.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
    Oh well, everyone has their own viewpoint, and no one can prove theirs is right. I don't have a problem with life having no intrinsic meaning... that means we are free to choose our own :) Thanks so much for the lovely rating, Dawn, and the wonderful comments.
reply by Dawn Munro on 20-Nov-2019
    Too true. And 'be kind' is the best way to live it, I think.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
    Ah, Crap. I just now see, when I view your response, I have unthinkingly violated the contest rules. What an idiot. Oh well, thankfully I'm unlikely to get anywhere near the prizes in this contest, so I won't have to bother disqualifying myself lol
reply by Dawn Munro on 20-Nov-2019
    NAH! Just remove the offending thing. It shouldn't matter anyway, if you ask me. It's already been reviewed with blinders on.
reply by Dawn Munro on 20-Nov-2019
    NAH! Just remove the offending thing. It shouldn't matter anyway, if you ask me. It's already been reviewed with blinders on. !!!
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
    Too late, I already asked Tom to DQ me. It's too hard. When we've only got one piece in, it's possible, with some effort, to remember not to sign (which I almost always do, because I hardly ever enter a "blind" contest). But when, as is currently the case, I've got three or four pieces being reviewed, I'm bound to stuff up [sigh]. I did remove the sig though. That way if it stays in through voting, it can't influence anyone else's vote (I hope).
reply by Dawn Munro on 20-Nov-2019
    Oh, I AM sorry -- I've been there! Very frustrating. Perhaps write back to Tom saying what I told you? That I read it with blinders on? That it was just your reply? :(( Blind contests are a pain in the neck. I seldom enter them too.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
    It's OK. I know for this particular contest I haven't got a look in anyway... I knew that before I entered. But I still wanted to say my piece lol

    If I thought I was in with a chance, I'd be more upset with myself :)
reply by Dawn Munro on 20-Nov-2019
    Oh, ok, if you are ok then I am. :)
Comment from moonsunrise
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The imagery you selected is so powerful. Yes, only two words are needed. "Be kind". We are just mustard seeds in this vast universe we live in and are all children of God. All we need remember is "treat others as you would like to be treated".
Amen.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
    Thank you for the kind words, they are much appreciated :)
Comment from the13thpoet
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A wonderful Wednesday fellow writer. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
    Thanks for the kind comments and good wishes :)