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Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Say what?"Fiction and non-fiction prose
15 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
Hahahaha! This is a very cute story, well told and well edited. (I saw only a single flaw) Everything was clear and easy to visualize. I thought the precise details added clarity and the humor in your story made it top notch. The only "flaw" was the punctuation of the final sentence. It should have a semicolon instead of a comma after 'wide,' I think. Do you agree? That is perhaps a matter of opinion. It is a wonderful story and I hope it adds to your amazing winning streak.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Hahahaha! This is a very cute story, well told and well edited. (I saw only a single flaw) Everything was clear and easy to visualize. I thought the precise details added clarity and the humor in your story made it top notch. The only "flaw" was the punctuation of the final sentence. It should have a semicolon instead of a comma after 'wide,' I think. Do you agree? That is perhaps a matter of opinion. It is a wonderful story and I hope it adds to your amazing winning streak.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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I appreciate the kind words, MM. I think you're right about the semicolon. Maybe it's my imagination, but they seem to have been falling out of favour in recent years, so I probably avoid them when I shouldn't. I've changed it as you suggested. Many thanks, Craig
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The alternative, if you prefer, would be a period and new sentence. Actually, what you have is two complete sentences, and you would not want them to run together, I know. You are probably right about semicolons falling out of favor but so are commas in poetry, yet my editors refuse to allow me to leave them out when I try. Lol.
Comment from Santiago2
Cleverly done and good luck in the contest. Unlike your partner, my malady is the "delayed eloquence of the inarticulate." Hours after the fact, I summon up several responses I wish I had made in the moment.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Cleverly done and good luck in the contest. Unlike your partner, my malady is the "delayed eloquence of the inarticulate." Hours after the fact, I summon up several responses I wish I had made in the moment.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Yep, that's more my style, too. Thanks so much for the fun review. Craig
Comment from Angela Hayes
Good read, funny and tricky, i understand that in order to drink they would not have to climb into the feeder, well told, i find your article to be very interesting, as it is different to other everyday works, interesting image to
compliment.
Well done and good Luck!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
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Good read, funny and tricky, i understand that in order to drink they would not have to climb into the feeder, well told, i find your article to be very interesting, as it is different to other everyday works, interesting image to
compliment.
Well done and good Luck!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
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Thanks so much for the delightful rating and the very kind comments. I appreciate both greatly, as well as the good wishes. Cheers, Craig
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You're welcome!
Comment from BeasPeas
This is amusing, Craig. Is she blond? (I used to be blond before I turned gray, so I can say that.) Your story is well written. Best of luck in the contest with this fun flash non-fiction. Marilyn
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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This is amusing, Craig. Is she blond? (I used to be blond before I turned gray, so I can say that.) Your story is well written. Best of luck in the contest with this fun flash non-fiction. Marilyn
Comment Written 19-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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She is whatever colour the hairdresser decides, Marilyn; but yes, she was blonde as a teenager. Thanks for the fun review and good wishes.
Comment from JudyE
Don't you know when you're having your leg pulled? lol This is pretty funny and a great entry for the true story flash competition. I think I would really like your wife. lol
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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Don't you know when you're having your leg pulled? lol This is pretty funny and a great entry for the true story flash competition. I think I would really like your wife. lol
Comment Written 19-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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You probably had to be there. No leg pulling involved, just a momentary loss of sanity :)
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is an interesting entry for the True Story Flash contest.
Yes, we all say things we wish we could take back at times.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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I think this is an interesting entry for the True Story Flash contest.
Yes, we all say things we wish we could take back at times.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 18-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the kind words and good wishes. Cheers, Craig
Comment from catch22
Hi Craig, I think I over thought this one. I was wondering what your wife thought it was for. Maybe she thought it was meant to be a watering hole? Either way, I hope she doesn't read this one, lol. Good use of a punchline in the story.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Hi Craig, I think I over thought this one. I was wondering what your wife thought it was for. Maybe she thought it was meant to be a watering hole? Either way, I hope she doesn't read this one, lol. Good use of a punchline in the story.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Too late, I told her I used it :) I have no idea what she was thinking! Thanks so much, Pam.
Comment from damommy
LOL! That's priceless. I can't criticize her, though. When I was first married, we were on our way to a Navy base in Maryland, and passed a lot of beautiful scenery. I once remarked how the cows could stand sideways on the mountainside, and he told me they were bred for that with their legs on one side shorter than the other. It took me a mile or so before I figured out I'd been fooled!
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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LOL! That's priceless. I can't criticize her, though. When I was first married, we were on our way to a Navy base in Maryland, and passed a lot of beautiful scenery. I once remarked how the cows could stand sideways on the mountainside, and he told me they were bred for that with their legs on one side shorter than the other. It took me a mile or so before I figured out I'd been fooled!
Comment Written 18-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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haha :)
You should try swapping stories some time, she's got plenty of them. Like the time she was taken to the river to see the submarine races...
Thanks Yvonne :)
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Now you must finish telling me. I have quite a few, too. It's because we're trusting women. 8-)
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Well, that was it really. How exciting do you think submarine races would be to watch? I think someone just wanted to get her by the river ;-)
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I wasn't paying attention. I get it now. lol
Comment from juliaSjames
Uh oh! Forget the compliments you lavished on her at the beginning. It's never a good idea to crack a joke at your partner's expense. Let's hope she doesn't read your posts.
Actually I'm still trying to picture the circular trough. It's gotta be difficult to clean but I suppose more animals can use it at any one time.
Good luck in the contest. You can use your winnings to buy her a gift.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Uh oh! Forget the compliments you lavished on her at the beginning. It's never a good idea to crack a joke at your partner's expense. Let's hope she doesn't read your posts.
Actually I'm still trying to picture the circular trough. It's gotta be difficult to clean but I suppose more animals can use it at any one time.
Good luck in the contest. You can use your winnings to buy her a gift.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 18-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Too late, I already told on myself :)
I'll get her the gift, but I won't count on winnings to do it, she could be waiting a while!
Many thanks,
Craig
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:-))
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Craig - 'It's how you tell 'em' as the saying goes. You tell, in 100 words a story that is simply - well simply just that, simple. You praise your partner to the heavens - well you had to, didn't you, in case she reads it. Well it made me laugh. Tell her next time you are in the bath that you have noticed how the water level rises - isn't that strange LOL! I love your story.
You know how to tell a tale, and with only a 100 words to play with you have to be good at it. Good Luck - Dorothy
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Hello Craig - 'It's how you tell 'em' as the saying goes. You tell, in 100 words a story that is simply - well simply just that, simple. You praise your partner to the heavens - well you had to, didn't you, in case she reads it. Well it made me laugh. Tell her next time you are in the bath that you have noticed how the water level rises - isn't that strange LOL! I love your story.
You know how to tell a tale, and with only a 100 words to play with you have to be good at it. Good Luck - Dorothy
Comment Written 18-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Thanks so much for the fun review and the good wishes, Dorothy. That story never gets old for me. Cheers, Craig