Zoe and The Zebra
Do not shut the door on something unexpected20 total reviews
Comment from Gail Denham
Love it - I wrote a poem about a gal who found a unicorn and took him all around town. That was fun. This one is super cute and I love the illustration. Good job.
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Love it - I wrote a poem about a gal who found a unicorn and took him all around town. That was fun. This one is super cute and I love the illustration. Good job.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2019
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Thank you for reading.
Very Clever idea with the unicorn. My Zoe had to have an animal with a Z- thus Zebra. Lol
Comment from Patty Palmer
What a sweet little poem! I'm sure any little kids would really enjoy it! You use language that little could easily read. The Zebra is the one the other kids would want to come back, I think this is a winner for a children's book! Good story!
God bless!
Patty
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What a sweet little poem! I'm sure any little kids would really enjoy it! You use language that little could easily read. The Zebra is the one the other kids would want to come back, I think this is a winner for a children's book! Good story!
God bless!
Patty
Comment Written 16-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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Thank you for reading. I have written several poems that would do well. Maybe some day....life keeps interfering.
I am as silly as I am serious. I will do my silly kids books to offset some of the heavy stuff I write.
Comment from lyenochka
This is a very cute children's poem with a full story plot. It also gives a good message to not be too quick to judge a situation. I know your granddaughter would love it!
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This is a very cute children's poem with a full story plot. It also gives a good message to not be too quick to judge a situation. I know your granddaughter would love it!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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Thank you for reading.
Glad you got the point. I can not help myself - I just have to put a learning lesson in. Even a Zebra should be allowed in school. Zoe was much to quick on her status. But she learned and self corrected.
So it?s silly - easy rhyming- but it has a kick.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Zoe and the Zebra", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a delight to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I've run out of them. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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"Zoe and the Zebra", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a delight to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I've run out of them. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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Thank you for reading.
It was silly rhyming - not advanced at all.
The challenge was to tell a story in the rhyming in a concise manner. I might rewrite this as a short story and upgrade it as a more serious story underlying kick.
Acceptance
Flyaway1,
You're very welcome.
God bless and take care,
the Duchess :)))
Comment from Brian Hill
The story is very cute and worth a read. As a
poem I have a problem with it as it doesn't flow with any cadence that I can find. The rhyming words are erratic. If this format has a name let me know. Again I love the story and the end message is worth a bunch. Good luck.
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The story is very cute and worth a read. As a
poem I have a problem with it as it doesn't flow with any cadence that I can find. The rhyming words are erratic. If this format has a name let me know. Again I love the story and the end message is worth a bunch. Good luck.
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Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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Thank you for reading. I am not a poet.
What I was going for was each two sentences rhymed.
Anyways, found it somewhat challenging to fit a story into any rhyme.
Thinking about writing a short story out of it with no rhyme and use this as an outline.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about Zoe and the zebra whom only wants to have a friend but she takes him to the zoo. She starts to regret her actions and release him from the zoo.
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A very well-written poem about Zoe and the zebra whom only wants to have a friend but she takes him to the zoo. She starts to regret her actions and release him from the zoo.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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Thank you for reading.
It was a lark - since I have been visiting my grandchild.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Share a Story in a Poem contest.
You tell a fun story of Zoe and the Zebra. This would make a wonderful children's story.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the Share a Story in a Poem contest.
You tell a fun story of Zoe and the Zebra. This would make a wonderful children's story.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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Thank you for reading.
It was a lark that I happen to be visiting my granddaughter Zoe.
After, I wrote it- I had the same feeling. I thought I just wrote the outline for a short story.
Comment from Hitcher
It is a great little story in poem and one you could read to your children at bedtime and ask them what the story meant... discuss it and let them sleep on it. How did Zoe react to it when you read it to her ?
Good luck in the contest !
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It is a great little story in poem and one you could read to your children at bedtime and ask them what the story meant... discuss it and let them sleep on it. How did Zoe react to it when you read it to her ?
Good luck in the contest !
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
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Thank you for reading.
I do not think Zoe cared one way or another. Too busy with her pad.
However, her parents and I had great fun with it. Zoe is 6- could be someday she will think about the fact that her grammie wrote this for her. I had fun.
Comment from Sugarray77
I enjoyed reading this delightful verse and think the moral and point is apt for that age group especially. And even adults should not overlook or take for granted the good things that come their way. Well said and well written.
Melissa
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2019
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I enjoyed reading this delightful verse and think the moral and point is apt for that age group especially. And even adults should not overlook or take for granted the good things that come their way. Well said and well written.
Melissa
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2019
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Thank you for reading.
Thanks for the great comments. This was the message I was going for.
Comment from Lobber
Hi there
Thank you for sharing such a whimsical poem - and one with a strong message - most animals make therapy pets for people with needs... Animals ask for so little and give so much. - Lobber
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Hi there
Thank you for sharing such a whimsical poem - and one with a strong message - most animals make therapy pets for people with needs... Animals ask for so little and give so much. - Lobber
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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Thank you for reading.
A visit w my daughter and granddaughter. We all had some fun with it.
Hopefully, something she will cherish later in life.
Words, and word gifts are the best intangible gifts.
