The French Letter
Viewing comments for Chapter 96 "A Time for Reflection"A Novel
29 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This was a very good chapter, Tony, that showed
the situation in the prison, but Charles is optimistic.
-However, it doesn't take long for Javed to color his
thinking, much to the annoyance of Charles.
-It makes me wonder about his motives-is he an
undercover spy in the prison?!
-Maybe his job is to break down
any sign of hope for people like Charles.
-It reminds me of "Time Goes By," when
Penny would always say, "Poor Jean!"
-I like the inclusion of the things Charles reminisces
about, as it takes him away from Javed's incessant
doom and gloom, and it reminds the reader that
there are more pleasant things that Charles and
Helen can re-connect with, hopefully.
-It also helps break up some the goings on in the prison.
-I was glad to see that Helen was free of her captors.
-I like how you let the reader know that, but poor
Charles still has to deal with his situation, but I am
putting my money on Helen coming to the rescue!!
-Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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-This was a very good chapter, Tony, that showed
the situation in the prison, but Charles is optimistic.
-However, it doesn't take long for Javed to color his
thinking, much to the annoyance of Charles.
-It makes me wonder about his motives-is he an
undercover spy in the prison?!
-Maybe his job is to break down
any sign of hope for people like Charles.
-It reminds me of "Time Goes By," when
Penny would always say, "Poor Jean!"
-I like the inclusion of the things Charles reminisces
about, as it takes him away from Javed's incessant
doom and gloom, and it reminds the reader that
there are more pleasant things that Charles and
Helen can re-connect with, hopefully.
-It also helps break up some the goings on in the prison.
-I was glad to see that Helen was free of her captors.
-I like how you let the reader know that, but poor
Charles still has to deal with his situation, but I am
putting my money on Helen coming to the rescue!!
-Well done.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Thanks very much for your detailed review, Pam, and for the extra star. Interesting and affirming comments. All the best, Tony
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You are very welcome and deserving, Tony. I wonder how many of the comments were right?!
Comment from JanetRussek
No surprise this is an award winner. The writing is excellent. Each line left me wanting to read more. I found myself reading faster, in anticipation of what might be coming up. It's such a pleasure to read things like this.
Regards,
Janet
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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No surprise this is an award winner. The writing is excellent. Each line left me wanting to read more. I found myself reading faster, in anticipation of what might be coming up. It's such a pleasure to read things like this.
Regards,
Janet
Comment Written 17-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Thanks very much for your positive and supportive review, Janet. I'm delighted that you thought this chapter worth a sixth star. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Money can open some doors or maybe not... you can called reward or bribe. I really like this part:
"Pity. Money can buy you a better time here. It's a good thing you're not Indian. Indians have the hardest time." As he spoke, the lights flickered and went out. "Power failure. Very common. The wiring is nearly as old as the building. They won't bother to fix it. Not worth wasting electricity on prisoners - except for torture;"
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your next chapter.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Money can open some doors or maybe not... you can called reward or bribe. I really like this part:
"Pity. Money can buy you a better time here. It's a good thing you're not Indian. Indians have the hardest time." As he spoke, the lights flickered and went out. "Power failure. Very common. The wiring is nearly as old as the building. They won't bother to fix it. Not worth wasting electricity on prisoners - except for torture;"
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your next chapter.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Thanks for your review, Iza, and for pointing out passages in this chapter that worked well for you. Always interesting to hear. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Cindy Warren
Good for Helen! I hope she tied his balls up so tight they fall off. She'll have to go for help. Charles' new friend is probably telling the truth. He won't be going anywhere without some serious help.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Good for Helen! I hope she tied his balls up so tight they fall off. She'll have to go for help. Charles' new friend is probably telling the truth. He won't be going anywhere without some serious help.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Thanks for your review and comments, Cindy. Much appreciated. I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter in yours. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I take it from this post that Helen will eventually rescue Charles. I can't wait to see how it happens. I am sure it will be enjoyable to read. You did a great job writing the descriptions of the emotion and pain Charles felt.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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I take it from this post that Helen will eventually rescue Charles. I can't wait to see how it happens. I am sure it will be enjoyable to read. You did a great job writing the descriptions of the emotion and pain Charles felt.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Thanks for your supportive comments, Barbara. You are right, someone is going to have to rescue Charles. The question is who - and how? All the best, Tony
Comment from Janilou
Excellent writing. I am not familiar with your story, but I found it easy to read and it pulled me in quickly with great descriptions and well flowing dialogue.
No errors noted while I read. It was very interesting and left me wanting to read more.
Jan
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Excellent writing. I am not familiar with your story, but I found it easy to read and it pulled me in quickly with great descriptions and well flowing dialogue.
No errors noted while I read. It was very interesting and left me wanting to read more.
Jan
Comment Written 16-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Thanks for your supportive words, Janilou. I appreciate your taking the time to read and review this chapter. If you want to read more, I've just posted the next chapter. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
My mind turned in a slow-moving kaleidoscope of fractured thought, (I love this wording--I have been there many times)
Soon after I had been dragged from the Chitral Police Station. Tariq (should be a comma not a period)
When Weaselface and his oppo returned to their post half an hour later, they found their esteemed leader lying naked on the floor with a pink ribbon tied tightly around his testicles. His legs were manacled to the bars of the cell, and blood dribbled from his lips, the place where his smile should have been. (That girl has spunk)
An interesting and well written chapter, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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My mind turned in a slow-moving kaleidoscope of fractured thought, (I love this wording--I have been there many times)
Soon after I had been dragged from the Chitral Police Station. Tariq (should be a comma not a period)
When Weaselface and his oppo returned to their post half an hour later, they found their esteemed leader lying naked on the floor with a pink ribbon tied tightly around his testicles. His legs were manacled to the bars of the cell, and blood dribbled from his lips, the place where his smile should have been. (That girl has spunk)
An interesting and well written chapter, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 16-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing this chapter, Debbie. Much appreciated. It's always good to hear which particular passages appeal to individual readers. Thanks for picking up the spag - now corrected. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from estory
I liked how you created this great contrast between the cowed Charles and the capable Helen in this chapter; Charles sitting there watching the beating of the prisoner, listening to his ally telling him of the hopelessness of his situation, and day dreaming of his comfortable life in England. And then Helen giving the prison guard a good beating for trying to take advantage of her, and apparently escaping with a ray of hope for them both. Great descriptions of the cell and the manipulations of the sadistic police interrogators made this come alive. Plenty of tension in the air here, and I think this is turning out to be the best part of the whole story. estory
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2019
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I liked how you created this great contrast between the cowed Charles and the capable Helen in this chapter; Charles sitting there watching the beating of the prisoner, listening to his ally telling him of the hopelessness of his situation, and day dreaming of his comfortable life in England. And then Helen giving the prison guard a good beating for trying to take advantage of her, and apparently escaping with a ray of hope for them both. Great descriptions of the cell and the manipulations of the sadistic police interrogators made this come alive. Plenty of tension in the air here, and I think this is turning out to be the best part of the whole story. estory
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2019
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Thanks for these comments, estory. I suspect I shall have to do some substantial editing and rewriting to strengthen the earlier parts.
Comment from Tpa
Quite an entertaining and humorous chapter liked your pessimistic character, enjoyed the segment with Helen and how you brought the chapter to its climax, good writing.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2019
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Quite an entertaining and humorous chapter liked your pessimistic character, enjoyed the segment with Helen and how you brought the chapter to its climax, good writing.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2019
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Thanks, TPA. I appreciate your review and encouraging comments. All the best, Tony.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is a definite six-star chapter, Tony, I'm just sorry I'm all out. That was terrific! The imagery you painted with your words showed us graphically what life is like in countries like that, what an awful place to be in! I'm sure it's all true too, having heard how people are locked up for nothing and never seeing the light of day again. But, you did give us a giggle with Helen, LOL, that was just so funny, and the picture conjured up in my mind was hilarious! Now Helen has to find Charles, (hopefully) and get the hell out of that place! I can't wait for the next part. Well done! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2019
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This is a definite six-star chapter, Tony, I'm just sorry I'm all out. That was terrific! The imagery you painted with your words showed us graphically what life is like in countries like that, what an awful place to be in! I'm sure it's all true too, having heard how people are locked up for nothing and never seeing the light of day again. But, you did give us a giggle with Helen, LOL, that was just so funny, and the picture conjured up in my mind was hilarious! Now Helen has to find Charles, (hopefully) and get the hell out of that place! I can't wait for the next part. Well done! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2019
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Thanks for your lovely comments, Sandra. Not quite sure how we?re going to get him out of this mess, but I expect there?s a way!