Dinner With Granddad
The plot thickens with helpful Aunt Hilda. (293 words)9 total reviews
Comment from country ranch writer
Looks like everyone had a good helping of grand. Just saying without laughing .Iuess she didn't know Grandpa was sitting there on the shelf.Theyclaim a little ash is good for the soul!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Looks like everyone had a good helping of grand. Just saying without laughing .Iuess she didn't know Grandpa was sitting there on the shelf.Theyclaim a little ash is good for the soul!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Grandpa was a man of true grit!
Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Author, this piece is Classic!!! I did not know whether to laugh or cry! I do hope this entry came from your imagination.
I gladly give you five stars for this one! Not only for the excellent writing, but the emotional rollercoaster ride!
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Dear Author, this piece is Classic!!! I did not know whether to laugh or cry! I do hope this entry came from your imagination.
I gladly give you five stars for this one! Not only for the excellent writing, but the emotional rollercoaster ride!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
Comment from JudyE
Haha - this is so funny and not beyond the realms of possibility. Can you just see this in real life? lol
I picked up a couple of tiny points:
what she considered unnecessary in the pantry, what was a modern fad, what was poorly labelled etc. - comma needed after 'labelled'
Ben had made a nice tossed salad, to be accompanied with some garlic bread. - maybe you could find a word other than 'nice' for the salad - tasty, colourful, delicious?
Julie commented that the flavour was somewhat different to her usual stew. - there is an extra space in 'the flavour'
Best wishes
Judy
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Haha - this is so funny and not beyond the realms of possibility. Can you just see this in real life? lol
I picked up a couple of tiny points:
what she considered unnecessary in the pantry, what was a modern fad, what was poorly labelled etc. - comma needed after 'labelled'
Ben had made a nice tossed salad, to be accompanied with some garlic bread. - maybe you could find a word other than 'nice' for the salad - tasty, colourful, delicious?
Julie commented that the flavour was somewhat different to her usual stew. - there is an extra space in 'the flavour'
Best wishes
Judy
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is an interesting story for the "A Good Turn Gone Wrong" contest.
Your story is clear and has a nasty turn of events at the end.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
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I think this is an interesting story for the "A Good Turn Gone Wrong" contest.
Your story is clear and has a nasty turn of events at the end.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
Oh no. It was bad enough that she had to tell about grandpa peeing on the lemon tree every morning. His ashes in the beef stew? Oh no is right. I hope that she told everybody. Thanks for sharing this humorous and well written work. Well done!
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Oh no. It was bad enough that she had to tell about grandpa peeing on the lemon tree every morning. His ashes in the beef stew? Oh no is right. I hope that she told everybody. Thanks for sharing this humorous and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a wonderful story which emphasizes the character of Auntie Hilda, who is somewhat of a Calamity Jane. The plot thickens as well as the gravy when we reach the surprise ending. Well done.
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This is a wonderful story which emphasizes the character of Auntie Hilda, who is somewhat of a Calamity Jane. The plot thickens as well as the gravy when we reach the surprise ending. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
Comment from Darlene Franklin
That's a nightmare of a good deed gone wrong! Poor Aunt Hilda. She can't do right, no matter how hard she tries. (How didn't she realize? What were they doing in the k itchen cabinet?) Good luck with the contest.
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That's a nightmare of a good deed gone wrong! Poor Aunt Hilda. She can't do right, no matter how hard she tries. (How didn't she realize? What were they doing in the k itchen cabinet?) Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
Comment from royowen
What a an incredible story. Loved the way you started, yes indeed, families are a mishmash of different members, some liked, some not. But that special gravy, thickened with grandad's ashes, what a story, I've still got my mum's ashes, but they are in a distinctive casket, in the clothes cupboard. A wonderful work, just enjoyed this so much, well done, blessings, Roy
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What a an incredible story. Loved the way you started, yes indeed, families are a mishmash of different members, some liked, some not. But that special gravy, thickened with grandad's ashes, what a story, I've still got my mum's ashes, but they are in a distinctive casket, in the clothes cupboard. A wonderful work, just enjoyed this so much, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Well, at least Granddad got to have one last meal with the entire family... he'll be a part of them for a little while longer.
Well-written and a great little ending.
All the best
GMG
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Hi there,
Well, at least Granddad got to have one last meal with the entire family... he'll be a part of them for a little while longer.
Well-written and a great little ending.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
