Me and You 40+ years of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "This Mad, Old, Upset Man"Poetry and Short Stories by George Medina Martinez
6 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
You've penned such a fun and descriptive answer to the challenge, G -- you really give a breath of life to the characters! ;) Thanx for sharing with us! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2019
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You've penned such a fun and descriptive answer to the challenge, G -- you really give a breath of life to the characters! ;) Thanx for sharing with us! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the Time to Read and Review this Poem. Inspired by a Little Reality. LOL
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Chochee. Your "take" on the image works well. Despite our age or a couple's longevity we have our differences with our partner. I giggled at the "have to do's." We all have them, don't we?
Structurally, there are some punctuation errors that need fixing and using capital letters to words in the middle of sentences is distracting, but overall the poem reads well. Marilyn
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Hi Chochee. Your "take" on the image works well. Despite our age or a couple's longevity we have our differences with our partner. I giggled at the "have to do's." We all have them, don't we?
Structurally, there are some punctuation errors that need fixing and using capital letters to words in the middle of sentences is distracting, but overall the poem reads well. Marilyn
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thank you for your valued time to read and review this poem offering. I Apologize for the constant Capitalization it does serve an overall messaging purpose.
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I expected there was a reason for your in-line capitalization. Thought I would mention it, though.
Comment from country ranch writer
Her love and devotion shows by staying by his side through rain or shine.His memory may be going but she dotes on him because she deeply cares.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Her love and devotion shows by staying by his side through rain or shine.His memory may be going but she dotes on him because she deeply cares.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thank you for your time to read and review this poem offering. This one based on a stroke experience we went through with me constantly confused, repeatlying questioning things and being stubbonly insistant.
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It takes awhile to regroup after such an ordeal. Bless you and hope things are better now.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
You've told quite a tale around this old couple, the grumpy thinker pose (that made me smile) and the mad, upset old man.And though they disagree, (who doesn't) they still go home holding hands, lovely ending and a good read.
cheers
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2019
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You've told quite a tale around this old couple, the grumpy thinker pose (that made me smile) and the mad, upset old man.And though they disagree, (who doesn't) they still go home holding hands, lovely ending and a good read.
cheers
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much for your Time to Read and Review this poem offering. It's written based on my wife and my relationship. LOL
Comment from Alex Rosel
I love the humor induced by this image, and I've enjoyed reading many of the poems based on it, and your poem is no exception {smiles}.
His memory has some gaps held up as high as his pants with those red suspenders -- Oh, I dolike the simile you've used here. As an aside, I'm not sure if American English is the same, but British English would say "braces" instead of "suspenders" in this context.
Thank you for giving me a smile {thumbs up}.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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I love the humor induced by this image, and I've enjoyed reading many of the poems based on it, and your poem is no exception {smiles}.
His memory has some gaps held up as high as his pants with those red suspenders -- Oh, I dolike the simile you've used here. As an aside, I'm not sure if American English is the same, but British English would say "braces" instead of "suspenders" in this context.
Thank you for giving me a smile {thumbs up}.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the time to read and review this poem offering. Thank you for Sharing the British English term "Braces" interesting thing here we use that term for dental retainers. LoL,
Blessings to you.
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Braces is used for dental retainers in the U.K. as well. LOL!
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Author, you have earned every star with this very clever take on this poem. I particularly liked the ending where the couple go home hand in hand BUT please add another verse or two, to lead up to their reconciliation !
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Dear Author, you have earned every star with this very clever take on this poem. I particularly liked the ending where the couple go home hand in hand BUT please add another verse or two, to lead up to their reconciliation !
Comment Written 09-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the Time to Read this poem and the Wonderful Review. It's a Pix This challenge entry from Fanstory with my twist on it for a book series. Blessings!