embers
a naani poem4 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This naani, Embers, uses twenty-three syllables and shows a person left with the burning knowledge that what was is over. Lights out.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2019
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This naani, Embers, uses twenty-three syllables and shows a person left with the burning knowledge that what was is over. Lights out.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2019
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True dat. We were in Africa for 22 years and got along great,now back in Canada we are going through a transition. Just one more reason I don't believe in marriage until death do you part. Cheers, thanks for the review Bill.
Comment from shaffer40
If I interpret this correctly, it's of a woman or man who has a recent loss in the romance department. I like the metaphor of flickering embers to express love having died and feelings remaining. Good for you.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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If I interpret this correctly, it's of a woman or man who has a recent loss in the romance department. I like the metaphor of flickering embers to express love having died and feelings remaining. Good for you.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Yes, like a woman who has been neglected by her husband for so many years, suddenly realizes that it is over, and she rises alone.
Thanks for the insightful review,
Cheers.
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You're quite welcome. Could be a compelling short story.
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Haha, I'll let you know the ending soon enough. We were in Africa for 22 years and we worked very well as a team. Now we are going through a transition in Canada and I realize that he is a workaholic, so that is that. We are great friends though. Cheers, j
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written and nice Naani poem you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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This is a very well written and nice Naani poem you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 09-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the encouraging review Teri. Always a transition eh. Cheers.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a technically sound Naani Poem with correct line and syllable count throughout. The content is haunting in its imagery. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a technically sound Naani Poem with correct line and syllable count throughout. The content is haunting in its imagery. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the review, yeah, transitions. Cheers, have a lucky weekend.
