Comment from Eve Vasa

Good

Hello, this is a good poem. Heartfelt and interesting. You do have a few errors in here though, but if you fix them, get back to me and I will re-rate your poem.

Other's! I don't think you need this apostrophe, but here:

My Minds Star - I think you need an apostrophe here so it would be My Mind's Star.

I have no other suggestions for improvement and it is a lovely tribute to someone who was dear to you, cheers, Eve.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019

Thank you for Sharing your Gifts reading and reviewing this poem offering. The "mind" (interpretation) in the title refers to the drawn star on the heart in the mask, where an's the (Other's) refears to more than one (person) I didn't mean to confuse anyone.
For Clarity I will revise soon, Thanks again.

Comment from Sallyo

Good

Your the Star in My Hearts Mind!
You're the Star in My Heart's Mind!
Yur Other's
Your Others
Apart from these glitches and some very odd capitalisation, this is an intriguing and very original poem. Great inspiration.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019

It's Interesting how people think I'm writing about my personal thoughts rather than just an (Interpretation) of the mask by itself. The Notes usually help explain the Capitalization. Fir further clarity and less confusion, I'm going to revise this very soon.
Thanks again.

reply by Sallyo on 03-Nov-2019

I wasn't thinking that. I was just commenting of the typos