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Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "St. Louis Chapter 16 part 2"Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Hmm, that doesn't sound good. It's as if they knew they were coming. It's just as well Logan is well equipped and knows how to handle himself. Mac should stop worrying about him and concentrate on herself. I have to go and see what's happening next! Well done again, my friend. Sandra xx
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Hmm, that doesn't sound good. It's as if they knew they were coming. It's just as well Logan is well equipped and knows how to handle himself. Mac should stop worrying about him and concentrate on herself. I have to go and see what's happening next! Well done again, my friend. Sandra xx
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thank you for going back and reviewing especially since there's no money attached.
Comment from SLMorrical
Great edition to your story. It seems that Logan and Mac are inseparable. I know Logan is trying to protect her. I think Mac's intuition will help her just fine. This is well written and flows well. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Great edition to your story. It seems that Logan and Mac are inseparable. I know Logan is trying to protect her. I think Mac's intuition will help her just fine. This is well written and flows well. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sylvia Page
A cleverly written chapter. Now that Logan has a proper permit to carry a concealed weapon, it would give him more confidence in performing his duties towards Mackenzie. A good move to sneak out the staff entrance.
Just one typo...
We could leave though(through) an employee exit.
Best regards
Sylvia
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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A cleverly written chapter. Now that Logan has a proper permit to carry a concealed weapon, it would give him more confidence in performing his duties towards Mackenzie. A good move to sneak out the staff entrance.
Just one typo...
We could leave though(through) an employee exit.
Best regards
Sylvia
Comment Written 08-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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I have fixed that typo. I appreciate the catch.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Barbara, I hope this review finds you well. Thank for the latest chapter of St. Louis, I'm enjoying the adventures of Mac & Logan. Hey if this book ever becomes a TV series that what you can call it. LOL Anyway great job and I eagerly await the next chapter.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Hello Barbara, I hope this review finds you well. Thank for the latest chapter of St. Louis, I'm enjoying the adventures of Mac & Logan. Hey if this book ever becomes a TV series that what you can call it. LOL Anyway great job and I eagerly await the next chapter.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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I haven't really come up with a real title, yet. That's one of my weak areas. Every editor has changed the title of my previous books. Any ideas????
Comment from Dawn Munro
Just one small suggestion for this stellar chapter -- instead of "tears welled in her eyes", I think you could simply say "tears welled" to avoid the repetition. We know where the tears are, and you say shortly after that she wiped them from her eyes anyway. I'ts not a very important suggestion (lol), but when writing is this good, even fine-tuning becomes nearly impossible. *grin*
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Just one small suggestion for this stellar chapter -- instead of "tears welled in her eyes", I think you could simply say "tears welled" to avoid the repetition. We know where the tears are, and you say shortly after that she wiped them from her eyes anyway. I'ts not a very important suggestion (lol), but when writing is this good, even fine-tuning becomes nearly impossible. *grin*
Comment Written 05-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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I agree. I like your suggestion. If somebody asked, where the tears were, I'll scream. Thank you.
Comment from judiverse
Logan has his gun and the permit now. Here's hoping he won't have to use it. At least Mac has a couple of suspects in mind. She wonders about Sidney and how he was connected to Logan's sister. Mac and Logan also have plans to interview Donny Carlton, a man Megan had dated. Wonder why she was dating someone who lived in such a poor neighborhood? I like Logan's plan to get a rental car so it will look like Mac and Logan are still in the hospital while they've slipped out. Very intriguing. judi
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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Logan has his gun and the permit now. Here's hoping he won't have to use it. At least Mac has a couple of suspects in mind. She wonders about Sidney and how he was connected to Logan's sister. Mac and Logan also have plans to interview Donny Carlton, a man Megan had dated. Wonder why she was dating someone who lived in such a poor neighborhood? I like Logan's plan to get a rental car so it will look like Mac and Logan are still in the hospital while they've slipped out. Very intriguing. judi
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging post. Logan probably wouldn't have a gun unless he's going to use it.
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You're welcome. Logan is determined to see that Mac stays safe, so he'd go to great lengths to protect her. judi
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Barbara
Enjoyed the post. Interesting cast of characters which seems to be a very tight-knitted group, where there's not only concern for one another but that they have one other's backs. The flow made for any easy, pleasant read. Great ending. Looking forward to the next post.
Take care and stat safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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Good morning, Barbara
Enjoyed the post. Interesting cast of characters which seems to be a very tight-knitted group, where there's not only concern for one another but that they have one other's backs. The flow made for any easy, pleasant read. Great ending. Looking forward to the next post.
Take care and stat safe,
Ray
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I see this is one of those chapters that definitely make the reader want to find out what happens in the next chapter, because more of the puzzle is coming together, and now looking up Donny's address. With this sentence: He wants to insure your safety.
I would put: He wants to ensure your safety.
Just a difference of one letter.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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I see this is one of those chapters that definitely make the reader want to find out what happens in the next chapter, because more of the puzzle is coming together, and now looking up Donny's address. With this sentence: He wants to insure your safety.
I would put: He wants to ensure your safety.
Just a difference of one letter.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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I will make that correction. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Someone is watching the house to see who if anyone shows up. I doubt they'd be expecting Logan and Mac, but maybe they have connections closer to them than anyone knows. Guess I'll have to wait to see what's going to surprise our two heroes. :)
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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Someone is watching the house to see who if anyone shows up. I doubt they'd be expecting Logan and Mac, but maybe they have connections closer to them than anyone knows. Guess I'll have to wait to see what's going to surprise our two heroes. :)
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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Our heros have their hands full and it's only going to get worse. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Great Chapter, again. Plenty of suspense and drama and good they are getting SOME answers. Now spags and suggestions. move comma in following don't need it with the "and" either.
officers outside his door(,) identification[,]
"I'm glad you ask(ed).
After the 16th your side I won't be able to do this unless I do it from Tootsie55 till the 20th. Then it will just be by note to you as to errors and what I think of the chapters.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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Great Chapter, again. Plenty of suspense and drama and good they are getting SOME answers. Now spags and suggestions. move comma in following don't need it with the "and" either.
officers outside his door(,) identification[,]
"I'm glad you ask(ed).
After the 16th your side I won't be able to do this unless I do it from Tootsie55 till the 20th. Then it will just be by note to you as to errors and what I think of the chapters.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the help. Please help as you can. LOL
